Struggle in the Steam Age

After reading about 40 chapters, I can see that the author has a relatively big idea and wants to write a mystery-level novel. However, the author commits the same problem as other novice novels. He hides all the advantages. Even though, due to lack of ability, dozens or even hundreds of chapters will not be used. It has to be hidden. I understand that the author wants to trigger a big branch or even the main plot, but at this time, wouldn't it be nice to turn it in to the church to get contributions and exchange it for items that can be exchanged for abilities? The protagonist's trump card and biggest reliance is the golden finger, not some other treasure.

I originally wanted to see farming, but ended up taking endless risks. Later, as a member of the ruling class, I was always on the front line like a barefoot adventurer. I was speechless. The bloodline of Bai Ze written in the front, and the charm of the book in the back, and there are Many small inventions should not be made after establishing a foundation, using the intelligence of Bai Ze's bloodline and combining some knowledge on the earth to create something valuable, and they are already very famous. They should not continue to improve their reputation and improve their strength, even if they build a small school. Okay, I have so many friends, cultivate some talents, invent some things, use my identity to get more resources, instead of wandering around every day. I only saw that I kept going out, kept encountering things, and then exploded at critical moments. I really didn't see that he was a mage. Type, I didn't see any sedimentation in the middle. It was originally a novel that made people shine, but it turned out to be too boring later. The protagonist is so slutty. I don't think you should write that he has the blood of Baize. It doesn't match at all. Instead, write the blood of Brother Pingtou. This is more appropriate 🤫

A small suggestion. In the Western fantasy setting, the unit of currency is Yuan, which is a little weird. Only China and Neon use Yuan. If the author doesn't want to make it up, he can just use pounds.

Is there anyone from Wanjie Shopkeeper? 1/10000000000

To put it bluntly, the presence of this Jianmu Golden Finger is too low. The protagonist barely makes use of this cheat. The protagonist's wealth has increased so much that he can exchange more talents and stack passive skills. Jianmu Space is not very useful, so it is better to set the protagonist Goldfinger to awaken the Bai Ze bloodline.

As a normal person, wouldn't you call the police immediately if you were robbed? Even in ancient times, robberies had to be reported. In addition, since the technology is set during the First World War, there is no need to write the medical treatment as medieval.

Author, what was your original intention in writing the book? One piece of advice, that is, write according to your heart. Why do you say that? Some people like the main character to be white, and some people like the main character to be black. Some people also like it without any Chinese characteristics or elements. Most of the old readers who have followed several of your novels like that the protagonists you write are Chinese and that Chinese cultural characteristics have been assimilated to Western culture. If you write a book based on the idea that I only give you advice, and it is completely contrary to your book. That's it. Novels can only be a pleasure for a small number of people. I have seen too many authors. Just because a few are more active and aggressive, they don't like some things in the author's books. As a result, they slowly change them, and the more they change, the more they are ruined. Some people start a new book after falling out of the market, and continue writing according to all the writing methods of those people, and the result is that the book becomes even more popular. It's very simple, because most people who like to read novels may not say that they can see more than 100 pictures because he writes in a way that suits their own tastes and gives them a sense of immersion. The advice I give you is just to check and fill in the gaps, not to ask you to change the outline. And a small number of people are clamoring in various ways. Those who are dissatisfied with this may not necessarily be loyal fans of this book. If you change it according to their revision methods. One person has one idea. You may conform to this person's idea, but if it doesn't conform to that person's idea, if you continue to write according to that person's idea, the person in front of you will not be happy. My thoughts are confused as I write. It is difficult not to give up, so the author suggests that you stick to your heart and accept some ideas, but you must not listen to those readers who clamor to change the outline. Because these people may not be your loyal book friends. You have to learn to absorb other people's suggestions as long as they fit your outline and your ideas, instead of just following what they say. These old readers support you.

I saw how the golden finger of 174 was written and disappeared.

Is the protagonist Goldfinger just a decoration? It's been such a long time since I've sacrificed something. Is it possible to transform the seeds into high-yielding seeds from the previous life?

With such a plug-in, struggle seems much more useless. Be careful not to be too buggy

It started well, but obviously the first story, the underground exploration, was a bit bad, and the advanced warlock was too sudden. Moreover, this warlock looks too much like a mage, and the spell selection is also very cliche.

There is really no need to write special spells specifically for Bai Ze's bloodline. You can just learn ordinary spells. Bai Ze's skills are regarded as innate magical powers. Can they be mastered automatically after upgrading?

It is well written, and it cleverly embeds Eastern elements into the North American continent of the steam age. I have always liked this kind of Western fantasy novel with Eastern elements. The only thing that bothered me a little is why two girls must be included in the group. It has no effect at all and is even quite embarrassing.

The author's character description is shortcomings, and the plot conflict is also insufficient. As a result, there is a good world structure, but it does not capture the readers' hearts.

The previous one is only halfway through, right? Why do I suddenly open a new book?

Since there are magic weapons, why doesn't the protagonist farm and open a technology tree? Skip the internal combustion engine and let the natives who are still playing with steam engines experience power armor and electromagnetic weapons. If combined with magic, many material problems will be easily solved.

I'm more curious why the protagonist is not treated as a stallion 😅

I would like to give you a suggestion. There are too many paragraphs in this book. The long paragraphs are not as comfortable to read as the small paragraphs. For those more popular books or books by more famous authors, the paragraphs in their books will not be too long. Personally, I feel that if the text paragraphs are shorter and the length and density are consistent, the page will look more comfortable and the reading experience will be better.

Why does the protagonist keep explaining that Nora is not a god? He persists in explaining it over and over again. Isn't it good to default to it?

I'm here to catch cute foodies, let's work together to catch cute foodies.

It ended suddenly🤫

The Admiral of Hogwarts, you can check it out

I wish the author a Happy New Year and good luck in the Year of the Ox.

Is there no heroine? The author is great

Be happy, be happy, be happy, be happy, be happy, be happy

Kind of like Lord of Secrets, at the beginning.

What does the lighter the protagonist sells look like?

I have read a hundred chapters and I think it is very well written and exciting.