I Became a God in Tokyo

The values ​​are positive, but... The logic is a bit messy and requires some analysis. Focusing too much on the romance isn't a bad thing, but it can be a bit nonsensical, giving the impression that a lot of content doesn't actually drive or change anything in reality. For example, after the demonic arc, we see the protagonist's life has actually returned to normal. What about the debt?

Judging from the chapters, the author seems to have been discouraged. It's normal for there to be "wise" people who can't resist offering guidance on writing. However, with more followers, naturally some will try to reason with them and engage in civilized conversation.

When I first read this book, I thought the writing style and the protagonist's eloquence were very similar to that of the yin-yang house... I just checked it out, and I didn't expect it to actually be your new book... Keep it up!

I'm begging for cuteness, recommendations, favorites, and even investment! I'm practically begging on my knees! We welcome everyone to offer suggestions below!

Is this really a time traveler? I can't tell at all; just write "native" instead.

Honestly, this is a thankless task for you; readers "don't understand" it, and you also find it very "laborious" to write it.

The premise is good, but what era is this for starting like this? Even one chapter would be too much, yet so many chapters are written without getting to the main point. The story's progression is also forced. I was drawn in by the title and synopsis, only to find myself feeling cheated.

Seeing this plot in Chapter 3, my first feeling wasn't one of being moved! Instead, I thought this woman was incredibly selfish! If you put yourself in the male protagonist's shoes, you'd understand! Even Japanese anime doesn't have this kind of plot anymore! She's simply a selfish and self-serving woman, utterly repulsive!

The first chapter makes the protagonist seem very powerful, then it abruptly turns into nothing but impotent rage. In this fast-paced era, isn't this early chapter far too depressing for the reader?

Flashbacks are too much filler and unsuitable for novels. They're okay in comics, but not so much in web novels. The beginning and end don't connect, and by the time you finally bring it back, most readers won't want to read it anymore.