I Became a God in Tokyo

The values ​​​​are very positive, but... The logical line is a bit messy, and you need to figure it out yourself. Paying too much attention to the emotional line is not a bad thing, but it is a bit nonsensical. It gives people the feeling that reality has not pushed forward or changed after reading a lot. For example, after the demon phase is over, I see that the protagonist's life has actually returned to its original state. What about the debt? What about the Sakura family and the other family who were forced into marriage? … The hole must be filled in, otherwise it will not be complete. Only after the hole in one story is filled can the next story begin. Otherwise, it will feel like there is less jump and a lot of things have been seen.. This is my feeling after reading two story lines. I hope it can be helpful (๑• . •๑)

Reading the chapters, the author must have been shocked There are always "smart" people who can't help but guide others in writing. This is normal. However, if there are more fans, there will naturally be people who can communicate with them in a civilized way. In a certain movie about Naruto Reborn in Tokyo, Japan, some people directly attacked the author personally. But the book was still written like that (at least it was far from what those people wanted) Come on, author! ! !

When I read this book before, I felt that the writing style and the protagonist's eloquence were very similar to **The Yin Yang House. . . I just read it, and I didn't expect it to be your new book. . Come on!

I want to be cute, I want to recommend, I want to collect, I want to invest, I want to ask for all kinds of things, I want to ask for help! Everyone is welcome to provide suggestions downstairs!

Is this really a time traveler? I didn't notice it at all, just write about the indigenous people.

To be honest, it's a thankless job for you. Readers "can't understand" it, and you also have a "hard time" writing it.

The setting is good, but in what era is there such a beginning? One chapter is too much, and I write so many chapters without getting to the main point. I can barely get into the story later. I was attracted by the name and introduction, and then I found out that I had been cheated.

When I saw the plot in Chapter 3, my first feeling was not that I was moved! But I think this woman is so selfish! If you think about it from the perspective of the male protagonist, you will understand! Even Japanese anime now don't have this kind of plot! She is simply a selfish and disgusting woman!

In the first chapter, I thought the protagonist was very arrogant, but then it turned into nothing but incompetence and rage. In the era of fast food, isn't this early stage too depressing for readers?

Memory Kill is too nonsense and not suitable for novels. Comics Memory Kill is okay, but online novels are not very suitable. After all, the preface cannot match the sequel. When you write it back, most of them don't want to read it. . . .