I Took a Trip to Another World

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I don't even want to complain about this kind of author. He writes fantasy novels, but the content he talks about is indeed Chinese. This situation of painting a tiger instead of a dog is really embarrassing. Either you just write about China directly, or you read more about Western literature without writing. Although it is false, please respect the facts.

I read the book well (there are too many chapters where the protagonist is flirting and flirting, and the plot is really dragging). The progress is too slow.

There are already 180,000 words, and there are still 20,000 words to go on the shelves. Friends who are reading, can you please leave a message? It's a little easier now.

The description of the war is too childish. It is very bland and not exciting at all. You have to write an article about having an affair with the heroine. It is worthy of the fantasy of a fat nerd. The main reason is that your ambiguous writing makes people have goosebumps all over.

From the first chapter to the seventy-three chapters, what I want to say as a reader is that the author of the writing is good and bad. The love story between the two heroic spirits and the protagonist is so embarrassing that I have cancer. This is a fantasy war story from another world. I read it like a romance novel. What's going on? There are so many foreshadowings to write in the book. It's obvious that the two people describing love slowed down the progress of the plot (maybe it was an illusion given to me by the audio reading). I mainly want to complain about this. I guess you will finish it after writing like this for five or six hundred years? ?

This is the first time I have written a long review, because Daddy is quite similar to me. I also struggled with my first novel writing. I made a lot of mistakes. I wrote a few books but abandoned them all. Recently, I picked up writing again. For no reason, just for the love and obsession with novels in my heart! I read a big book. To be honest, I only read two chapters, yes, two chapters, because I really couldn't stand it anymore. Don't blame me for being ugly. I hope I'll read it again after you improve it. There are a few mistakes that I would like to mention. It's just my personal opinion. Don't take offense. First point, there are too many typos. There are at least several typos in one chapter. Maybe it is an input method problem. However, I hope that after writing it, I can read it carefully several times and feel satisfied before posting it. After posting it, I can read it again as a reader, so that I can know what shortcomings there are. Because I am like this, after I finish writing a chapter, I have to check it at least ten times before sending it out. Then I read it two or three times. If I find any mistakes, I immediately correct them without delay. Of course, sometimes you can't see it, that's normal, but that way there will be a lot less mistakes. The second point is that the segmentation is too complicated. It is best to have one paragraph for the character. If one sentence is too long, then two paragraphs, but there must be a colon when segmenting! The third thing is to use the correct punctuation marks and use less exclamation points! Because when I read the sentence with the exclamation point, I couldn't help but yell out in my heart. If you end with a period, you must divide it into paragraphs. Try not to use periods in the paragraphs. This is just a small personal suggestion. I hope you will stick to it and encourage you! You can also read what I wrote. I hope you can learn something from it. Of course, I am not saying that mine is the best, but I have made all the mistakes you have made. After all, we all write novels to fulfill our dreams. Our works are our dreams and our children. Who doesn't want their children to be better! Come on! ! !

Can't make it? That's enough. If you're afraid of harmony, don't write about women. Can't you write about men?

Dear readers, newbies, if there is anything wrong with what I wrote, you can write a comment and let me know I will change it when I see it, because I hope you can give me some suggestions.

There are more than 2,000 soldiers in the 5,000-person camp. I have organized it for me. There are also a lot of slaves in it. With the productivity of the Middle Ages, it is difficult for 10 people to raise one soldier.