Industrial Revolution Fantasy Events Book

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There are certain spoilers below🤐🤐🤐🤐 This is a good book, although it is not perfect. I think it is very good for the first time I write a book. The characters are well-developed and the story is interesting. It's a pity that the overall picture is a bit rigid. For example, the death of the goddess of war was too sudden. At first I thought this was at least a big boss with a lot of foreshadowing, but it was too easy to die. The same goes for the second dream world. There is so much foreshadowing, but once the chapter is over, the characters in the dream world basically cannot come out. The sense of mystery is instantly reduced. I look forward to seeing gods versus gods. The real world uses the settings of Girls' Senki, and uses industrial magic that greatly increases the power, so the stage shown is not a battlefield. Moreover, you can also add a mysterious element to show how weird a world with gods is. The most cruel thing is that before the center of the earth, gods with higher status than the heroine died one after another, and then they suddenly saw the origin. What's wrong with you, the sudden final boss For me, the center of the earth is the end of this story 😂😂😂 For me, a story has one main line and countless branches. The author's settings are very interesting. It's a pity that I felt so excited that the whole car drifted to who knows where. If you tell a short story, then I think the author has succeeded. The writing is quite good. But the main plot of the overall situation was suddenly eliminated and redone. It felt like I was eating sweet tofu and suddenly turned into salty tofu. I hope the author will get better and better😍😍😍

After seeing the New World chapter, I felt that it was really well written and the writing power was sufficient! Although the routine is not new, and sometimes the transitions are abrupt, some parts of the opening chapter are easy to dismiss, and no one has written about it. But the writing is really interesting and the more you write, the more interesting it becomes. There are many small ideas and short paragraphs that are very good. It can be seen that the author made rapid progress when writing this book and gradually formed his own style. It's really great to have a visible sense of progress.

This old lady who was kind to the protagonist and moved the protagonist inexplicably was swallowed up by the heroine. The protagonist didn't react at all and still fell in love with her. This can no longer be explained by big intentions. It's indescribable.

These past few days have been a bit of a whirlwind, and I've slowly finished reading the first decisive battle. I often see the author distressed by the lack of interaction, so I'll just give you my own opinion. The first thing I want to say is actually not the quality of the novel, but the target readers. Somatosensory Qidian is not a popular online website about the second dimension, and Qidian's readers don't seem to be too interested in the second dimension. I have personally observed that most of the novels that are full of two-dimensional atmosphere are not very good at the starting point. Not to mention you're pitching in the fantasy division. Personally speaking, although I am also a homebody, I do have a lower tolerance for two-dimensional plots. I can feel some two-dimensional elements in this novel, but this kind of mishmash does not arouse my interest. It always feels a bit like a fantasy two-dimensional story with no favors. This may be because the author is not strong enough in writing. If the writing was strong enough, this sense of conflict should not appear. In addition, Secret is still being serialized now, next to Secret is Zhuyu in front, following the trend (even though you don't really follow the trend, but the first impression is true) and the writing is strong. . . Novel. . . I might as well say it's quite normal. After talking about factors other than the text, let's talk about possible flaws in the novel. When I read it myself, I obviously felt that the story was told too hastily. There were several places where the author's intention of pointing out the mastermind behind the story was so obvious that I was a little disappointed. The plot that showed the charm of the heroine was also a bit too much. . . It's ordinary, it feels like a common two-dimensional scene (which also makes me a little disappointed). As an author, don't try to describe everything. It's enough to write a beautiful side. In short, it's just a bunch of iceberg theories. There are also some problems with the foreshadowing and climax. The bosses were sacrificed one after another. As a reader, I didn't feel the tension approaching. When the climax of the plot came, I didn't even feel nervous at all. Thinking about it, this is probably because the writing power is not enough. It seems that there are many chapters spent on foreshadowing. After typing so much, I also found that many of the flaws I felt were related to writing skills. To prevent ambiguity, the writing power I mentioned is not the same as writing skills. Internet articles don't need to be too high-end, but the key points of the plot should be present. This novel always made me feel that something was missing in some places. My comments are overwhelming. Most of them are personal opinions. Please take them as a reference.

Seeing that Cyril automatically transformed into Celia inexplicably, is it hopeless?

This is very well written, keep it up, author!

Let me tell you a problem - although there are aristocrats in the UK, they cannot detain and arrest people. Moreover, it is still in London. Scotland Yard is completely embarrassed... Even if you have a great reason, you should ask someone like the Sheriff of the police station to come forward.

Going to work is very taxing on my brain. After get off work, I want to give my brain a rest.

To be honest, if it weren't for the fact that she is the heroine and the writing style, Celis would be the perfect mastermind. She comes from the Grimoire, knows rituals, personal realms, and her altar, which is her memory. She can also change her face in Sichuan opera to increase her favorability towards the protagonist. It can be said that the protagonist trusts her very much, and he doesn't even doubt her emmm

Since the information is open to the judge, why doesn't the protagonist go read it? Now it's important for the protagonist to understand the world, right? Ask Selyl everything. She also told you about your career. What she said must be right? The protagonist's current strength and information are not equal, which is very passive Don't just listen to Selyl, you should get the information yourself and compare it!

It's really good-looking. It's going to be popular soon.

It's a good book, but no one reads it, eh! ! !

Great book, author don't lose faith

The writing is very interesting. Cheers, author.

Why are they all women? After reading the first few dozen chapters, all the protagonists met were women. Goddess? Female aristocrats, maids, female judges, missing aristocratic women, the interactions are all female, I don't know what to say

When I first read it, I thought this book was okay, but as I continued to read, I finally understood why so few people read this book. Firstly, it was not recommended, and secondly, this book has an old-fashioned story that many people don't say much about. This is not a big problem. The big problem is that it gets worse as you go to the back. It feels like the author is trying to reduce the intelligence of these characters. Some obvious problems can be solved by just going back and taking a look. They have to force a reversal. I feel that they are forced to change in order to create a plot. I feel that it is so powerful at first. Why is it so strong? Then in the end, it became, in short, it was the kind of book where you felt that your IQ dropped more and more as you went to the end of the book, and each chapter had a starting point. Tolkien's chapter also failed to handle the ending well. Later, in order to force the author's characters in the first chapter to travel through this place and come back, more loopholes popped up. Alas, in short, I have read the second part of this book, but I don't want to read it anymore. This is really a huge failure. Of course there are still many questions, but that's it, I don't want to talk about them anymore. Anyway, if you write a second book, I'll take a look. Hope to make progress

I don't know if anyone has. . .

Hey, Cyril should be the heroine, right?

Why does the plot advance so abruptly? Please explain the causes and consequences, otherwise it will look really unsmooth.

The author could check out Wolf and Spice, it's very similar to your book

I finished reading it again. Why do I feel like every chapter is so short?

Just run away! You are the queen's knight

Very good book! Quan Ding supports it.

Ah, here, the author hasn't filled in the gaps yet. The plot is clearly written in general, so why not continue writing it?

I finished the second book in one go and ran over to read the first one, and found... WTF Now I am more worried about the development of the second book.

That said, after I read about 20 chapters, I felt very good, but I have no idea why he recommended so few books that were not in the starting point before?

The writing on Dream World is really stinky and long. I really wonder if someone else has written it. The style is completely different from the previous ones.

Why does it feel like it's all made up of small stories? It feels so scattered.