The Rise of the Vortex Kingdom of Konoha

Brother, have you watched Naruto? Just a fight at the beginning, and the whirlpool was wiped out in one fight? Ku Yukina? If we were to fight, you should be on the same side as Jiraiya. Why did Katsuyuki appear? Don't tell me that you haven't even read Naruto and you're writing a fanfic? This is such a huge flaw after just reading the first two chapters.

It seems that all Naruto fans want to do Dragon Vein, and then they all travel through time, and then wait until the people around them are injured and die. At the most critical moment, the protagonist comes back, and then beats everyone, and then either travels to the next world, or it is over. In fact, it shouldn't be very comfortable to watch like this. After all, this kind of situation basically doesn't happen in anime and TV series with a single protagonist. It can be brushed off at most. After all, if you do this for a long time, you will lose fans.

The idea of ​​having a harem during the Red Revolution really left me speechless, especially since there is no "custom" of having a harem in the Naruto world, which makes me feel doubly violated - don't talk to me about the history of the Warring States Period... The world of Naruto is an imaginary history, and even if the author is writing a fan of Koga Ninpotsu, I have no objection to having a harem. The final point is... The author's emotional drama is not good at all! Why write it forcefully? It makes me feel uncomfortable when you write so hard! If you have the ability, write about cars... Otherwise, is there any pleasure in writing about so many women? It's not you who accepts it? ps: I suggest those who write about harems to refer to Sister Jiao's book. "Hidden Killing" has the lowest sense of dissonance among all the harem novels I have read.

First of all, this book has many female protagonists. To be honest, I saw that the scumbag protagonist in Chapter 262 was so self-proclaimed that I decided to abandon the book. In addition, most of the complaints in the comment area are indeed true. The early chapters are toxic, and the protagonist is too self-proclaimed in the later chapters. Secondly, the system settings and the improvement of strength are toxic and too watery. Abandon the book and disappear.

The first few chapters of this book poisoned me to death. The protagonist has no power development. At the meeting, he slapped the table with one hand, his body was shaken, and his bastard energy leaked out. The clan leaders and famous people all declared themselves ministers and paid tribute. 😰

There are a lot of wrong words, but at least the pronunciation of the wrong words is correct. Your words are completely different!

After reading books for so many years, I feel that I have gradually lost interest in some books. I used to read them happily and now I can no longer read them. I feel good about this fanfic I have some opinions and hope the author can read it haha The system, the book review also said, it is a bit zz. Anyway, the current process of reading this book is actually except when exchanging things, I just don't write this stuff. According to this progress book There are plenty of things to write about, and there is no need to argue with the system, and it feels like a sense of separation I read a book about Garen traveling through time to become a pirate, but I couldn't remember the name. I remember the author wrote about Mount Myoki and Tam Sage, and the plot was about the modernization of redism, haha. It's already finished, and the effect is pretty good I feel like there are not many people around, so just go and py it, haha, there are several starting point poisonous milk waiting for you! ! I hope the author will pay attention and not make the villain too mentally retarded. He can be funny but not too mentally retarded. . . Well, just have a degree Finally, come on, don't be a eunuch. Most of the fandoms I read that became popular only started to become popular in the middle and late stages. Instead, the quality dropped after some achievements There are also many good fairy grass that died at the hands of trolls. , So I either calm down and ignore the trolls, or I turn off the mic and listen to the music, and I just don't come to the comment area. However, it's easy not to see many excellent comments. Look at how many good ideas there are in the comment area. Haha, tomorrow is mine Come on!

The creativity is very good, I don't know much about Naruto, and my literary skills are very poor.

I'm the only one who thinks that Fei (isn't it Obito?) And Namikaze Minato haven't even practiced yet, so why is Obito already in the skin???

Now that millions of Magnetic Releases can be redeemed, why not increase your attributes to Shadow Level? It should be easy. Why

The old monkey needs to be tidied up, at least.

I feel like Mr. Ban is a good passerby

The author perfectly explains what human nature is (I can't help it) But the idea is still very interesting

The red-haired ferret you want

Hurry up and update. By the way, the setting of pig's feet is poisonous. If you are so awesome, why don't you stop chirping. There are a bunch of ants under the feet of an adult telling you that you are chirping. Why don't you trample it to death and keep it for the New Year?

I didn't see the protagonist taking personal responsibility to implement the Intrachonal, but he did spread the awareness of Intrachonal. When he dies, an unprecedented war will break out. It will be an ideological war. No one can escape. Everyone will choose under the banner of Internazionale or Bourgeois, either to the left or to the right. The Kingdom of Whirlpool will be destroyed first in the war, and this will be the real revolution, the revolution that completes the historical process. Comrades, let us unite under Internazionale and shout great leader, everything belongs to the Soviets!

Hinata is indeed weak enough

A few years later, the Kingdom of Vortex created Alipay. In an interview, Kakuzu said, "What is money? I am not interested in money, and I have never touched money. What I regret most in my life is that I became this financial giant."

This book describes the Three Generations of Konoha in my mind. Looking at the original White Fang incident, there are rumors that White Fang who gave up his mission for his companions died. Many fans say that Danzo did it. Let me analyze it for you: Which Konoha boss said that I forgot that there is such a saying that those who do not cherish their companions are worse than trash. So many people know that White Fang is right. Why don't White Fang dare to say it when he has such a high prestige? Why did this untenable rumor drive White Fang to death? Can Danzo just make people shut up? Danzo is just a gutter rat. No one knows what the use of his power is. ! Only the third generation can mess with him! Naruto incident, same reason, surnamed Uzumaki, blond, Jinchuuriki, really don't know he is the son of the fourth generation? Ridiculous! In the original work, Iruka already knew this (it made me feel sick rewatching the Book of Sealed episode!) How many people have been saved by the fourth generation? ! These people don't even dare to repay the favor of saving their lives! Let Naruto eat pig food and be beaten every day! Who is the only one who can intimidate? Danzo can't do it! Only three generations! In the incident of the death of the third generation, no one can really save the third generation in the Four Elephant Flame Formation? Just a few jounin? Release the sealing array! Then why didn't Kai save him? (Kai loves Konoha so much that he won't open the Eight Gates to save him?) Kakashi won't save him (he already knew that the Thousand Flowers Jane has been opened, so he can't break the formation when he unleashes his divine power?) I forgot whether Jiraiya was there, and he probably wouldn't be able to save him even if he was there. It can be seen how unpopular the third generation is! The fourth generation was probably disobedient. After his death, his son was used as the target of the Nine-Tails Rebellion by the third generation. Even the fourth generation's direct subordinates didn't dare to let out a fart. Those who dared to let it go probably died! There were only three special jounin and Kakashi left. Let's not talk about Senju Uchiha.

Ranking of the best characters written: No. 1: The Third Hokage Sarutobi Hiruzen. Beneath a kind and righteous appearance, he is a conspirator with unscrupulous tricks and no limits (because of the scapegoat Danzo). He single-handedly directed the genocide of the Senju (sect) of the first family in Konoha and the genocide of the Uchiha, the second family, and forced the death of Sakumo Hatake, who would be able to compete with the Hokage level in the future. With all these, he can still perfectly maintain his perfect personality. Therefore, the number one person who portrays the most awesome character must be him. Second Danzo, this is not a villain. In this novel, he has transcended from the original Naruto. He is a tragic character who yearns for sunshine and falls into darkness (irresistibly blackened). During the process, he tried to change and resisted, but faced with the evil tactics of the third generation, he was forced to change his character again and again. Every time he wanted the villagers to see his shining self, he ended up with that guy being extremely dark, perverted and dangerous, and staying away from him. The characterization is so penetrating that if you delve deeper into his experiences, it will be very scary to think deeply. Third place: Loquat Juuzang, his experience can be summarized in one sentence, he was read by Infinite Moon 😃. In one example, a person said to a tiger that wanted to eat him every day, "I am your father." In the end, the tiger compromised and treated himself as a human being to fulfill his filial piety every day. Juzo's storyline is relatively short, but very successful. Fourth place: Ban and A Fei, one has early symptoms of Alzheimer's disease, and the other has late symptoms of middle-aged teenagers. This is not a derogatory sense, but a complimentary one. The classic duo is reimagined from another angle. Few people dig deep into Madara's dreams, and everyone basically remembers Madara the Destroyer. But in this novel, a brand new Madara is interpreted. Fifth place: Kakuzu, doesn't appear much, but is everywhere. Readers who owe others fear him in their minds. His dark eyes are staring at you, paying back the money. You can't fight, you can't run. Sixth place: Xun, the engine that drives the novel, currently needs to be added.

It is said that weapons in the original world affect harmony, and ninjutsu can be exchanged for benefiting the people. I disagree. I want to complain about the system 1. Explosives are very useful for digging mountains and digging tunnels. It is said that Nobel studied explosives because of the tunneling problem. So benefit the people and serve life. 2. Although nuclear bombs cause serious pollution, the former Soviet Union used nuclear bombs to build reservoirs, which benefited the country and the people. Much faster than ninjutsu, just tell me how big the reservoir you want. This is what I have thought of for the time being. Welcome everyone to add to it, and it will also broaden my knowledge)           Manual Funny. Jpg

It's long-winded, super long-winded, just like an old lady's foot wrap, smelly and long. I immediately thought of this. This dish is called cashew chicken. My favorite is cashew chicken, because it contains cashews and chicken, so it's called cashew chicken. The cashew nuts crunch into your mouth and they become more fragrant. The diced chicken crunches into your mouth and they become more fragrant. These two are crunchy and delicious when chewed in your mouth. But there's something wrong with today's dish. There are two pieces of meat that don't look like diced chicken, but like diced pork. Of course, cashew nut diced meat is also delicious. The diced meat is crunchy and delicious when chewed in your mouth. But if I want to eat cashew nut poutine, why should I order cashew nut chicken? Just because cashew nut chicken is more delicious than cashew nut poutine. All cashews are fine, there are still a few peanuts in it. Of course, the diced chicken with peanuts is also very delicious. The peanuts crunch into your mouth and make it even more delicious. It's fine if it's pure peanuts, but why are there pine nuts in it?

There are so many Naruto fans, and this one is the one written more in line with my wishes. All the foundation left by the first and second generations to Konoha was destroyed by the third generation. As long as the geniuses produced by Konoha are not from the Hokage line, they are all evil people and will definitely be detrimental to the village in the future. And I feel that if it hadn't been Orochimaru's plan, Asuma would not have died if the third generation had not died. Later, the third generation took Naruto to fight Madara, and finally killed Naruto and Sasuke, dragging his friend Danzo on the road, clearing the way for Asma to ascend to the throne. From then on, the inheritance of the village chief became from father to son. . . Perfect. . .

I originally thought this book was quite good, but when I saw Uzumaki suddenly marrying Mikoto, I suddenly felt unimpressed. Kyukina had described so much since she was a child, but ended up suddenly marrying Mikoto, Uzumaki Kouko, and Yakushi Nonou. Which one has been longer than Mikoto? Uzumaki and Mikoto have basically never been in contact, and there is no emotional description at all. "For the harmony of the country of Uzumaki" , he proposed to Uchiha Mikoto. You know... Everything he did was for the country of whirlpool! "It felt like he was just afraid that Madara would go crazy, and he suddenly had a sudden impulse, and it was like a brain twitch. I'm sorry for Kushina and the others' feelings. It's really uncomfortable for me. It's a failure. I feel like I've lost touch with this book.

I have always found it strange that Konoha is involved in the Kingdom of Death. It's not that I believe Konoha is very kind, but it doesn't make sense at all. From the external environment, Konoha is in a state of great ninja war, although from the perspective of latecomers, Konoha must have won. But the person involved didn't know that although Konoha was stronger than several other villages, there was no qualitative difference, and with one enemy against many, there was a possibility of collapse at any time. How could they attack their only reliable ally under such circumstances? From the inside of Konoha Village, after Hashirama's death, the strongest person in Konoha at this time should be Mito Uzumaki, the Nine-Tailed Jinchuuriki. In terms of prestige, as the wife of the first Hokage, she is no less than the third generation. When it comes to Uzumaki, who can guarantee that the boss will not go crazy? Both the Sandai and Danzo can read minds? Unless the top brass of Konoha are gods and know that Konoha will definitely win no matter what, and know that no matter what they do, Mito and other ninjas will definitely not get angry, otherwise they will never dare to do such a thing. The logic of trying to seize the sealing technique and prevent the people of the Uzumaki clan from being used as jinchuriki by other ninja villages is even more nonsense. If Konoha really coveted the sealing technique, it would not allow other ninja villages to destroy the country of whirlpool, but would do it himself. If other ninja villages are allowed to destroy the Kingdom of Whirlpool, it's hard to say whether Konoha can get these sealing techniques, but other ninja villages can definitely get them. This is especially true for the Uzumaki bloodline. If other ninja villages are allowed to destroy the country of Uzumaki, wouldn't they take the opportunity to capture a few children? Does Konoha have the ability to ensure that the Uzumaki clan will be completely wiped out, instead of leaving survivors scattered throughout the ninja world? This instead makes it easier for Uzumaki's bloodline to be obtained by other ninja villages. Moreover, from another perspective, Konoha really does not have the sealing technique of the Uzumaki clan? Mito Uzumaki was married to Hashirama. Who can guarantee that Mito will not reveal the sealing technique when his married daughter throws water? Marrying Mito, who is proficient in sealing techniques, instead of marrying someone who does not understand sealing techniques, this act itself means that the Uzumaki clan has acquiesced in the leakage of this part of sealing techniques. In fact, the first generation itself was very proficient in sealing techniques, which means that it was already leaked. The argument that Konoha destroyed the Kingdom of Whirlpool can only be said to be dark and dark by force. It is believed that the high-level darkness in Konoha takes it for granted that all bad things are done by them, regardless of the risks and gains they have in this matter.

Two monthly tickets, I want to be more refined, I want to kiss, hug and hold them high

Do you want so much nonsense? Just complain a little bit. Ninety percent of a chapter is all kinds of nonsense, just like reading the sequel to Journey to the West... I feel dizzy... I have a headache when I read it...

I haven't posted a book review for a while, so I would like to recommend Xianyu's new book here. Maybe it's because of the two-part book that Xianyu published before, and my personal feelings about the rhythm of the new book... Well, you can go and read it yourself 😃 I won't spoil it ψ(｀∇´)ψ. I believe that this book is finished, and Xianyu can focus more on the new book. I have followed this book all the way up to now. Although some places are indeed quite watery, there is still a lot of useful information, so book friends who passed by saw my comments. Friends who are interested can come in and take a look. There may be flaws in the early stage, but this book is worth it. After all, there aren't many good grains available now. Although it is spiritual food, everyone still needs to eat it (´▽`)ﾉ. Today is the last chapter after all, so. It's not a long comment, just leave a mark to follow along👣. {I am not a deadbeat trumpet. After all, there is an author who will reward himself, right? (Maybe but I'm definitely not, that's it, just listen to me)｝

This book is generally a good book. Unfortunately, one line or one line description paired with ten or even dozens of comments is a bit uncomfortable. As for novels, there is a lot of exaggeration. I didn't see a word of exaggeration, whether it was about feelings or environment. It's almost like a complaint by the author. However, the complaint is originally meant to be funny. If the complaint is not funny, it will be really funny.

What are you writing about recently? You know that the Dragon Vein cannot move, and others are eyeing your country, but you go out to wander around. If you are not going to be exterminated, who will be?