Super Pokemon: Long Yi

Let's take a look. There's grass growing on the tomb.

Build a built-in building. Friends who want a built-in building can leave a message under this post. The author will come to collect materials from time to time. Format: Name: Because of the initial setting, please try to use a Japanese name. Of course, you can also use a codename like Garton, but generally these are villains. Identity: This can be set freely, it is best not to be too exaggerated Personality: Determines the acting style of the supporting actor, whether he will be selected, and the plot in which he will be used. Elf: It's very important. It's best to write it all. Strength: must match identity This is roughly it. It may be changed when it actually appears in the book. Finally, thank you for your support! 🙏

First of all, I have to admit that this is a fine piece of fan fiction. I've read a lot of Elf fan fiction, and this one isn't the most passionate or exciting, but it feels the most real to me. Reading this book, I feel like I have seen a real elf world. How people live here, how the relationship between humans and elves is positioned, and the various life occupations and combat occupations satisfy all my imagination of the elf world. Moreover, the author also has a special description of the protagonist's emotional line, which makes the characters in the book come alive and makes the book more flavorful. Instead of the online novel's tendency to show off and slap Long Aotian in the face, all kinds of rigid routines have been adopted. There is no empty feeling when reading this book. At least I can still recall the plot of the book after reading it, and I can feel the author's care for this book, which is unconventional. I hope the author will continue his efforts and maintain his standards. Already collected! Ps: This is my first time writing a book review, so my thoughts are a bit confusing. I'm not going to laugh at my poor writing. The main reason is that this book is to my liking!

To be honest, your novels will never become popular. It's best for elf fan novels to not have the female protagonist's feelings. Not only is this cool, it's also very poisonous. Many people may have been poisoned because of it.

After reading a few chapters, it's no wonder that the prisoner is a brainless bastard. The author's decision is very wise.

How can I say that after reading more than 20 chapters, I feel that the author does not understand Pokémon well. . . Abo turned into a Pokémon that is not strong in combat. How did it become Team Rocket's regular Pokémon if it was not strong? The change of snake pattern makes Aboguai almost as strong as Yu Sanjia, and with so many poison-type kings raising him, you can't say he's not strong. Then we talked about Pokémon that use escape methods, and it was Casey who opened his mouth. Did you know that super Pokémon will basically only follow people with super powers, especially Casey? You are writing a realistic article. If you don't write these details well, it will be a bad article.

You know you are weak, but who gives you the courage to be a burden? This heroine is completely unnecessary, right?

It feels a little bit poisonous. The first is the contempt for the knowledge of the elf. It is obvious that the knowledge of the elf Long Mingming is terrible, but he still doesn't pay attention to it all day long. He has to have others come to him to tell him that knowledge is power! Secondly, there is not enough exploration of Goldfinger. Goldfinger obviously said that as long as you have money, you can buy all kinds of treasures and easily break through various limits. Money is power. What are pig's feet thinking? Isn't your brain not working well? A bright road is placed in front of you, go and make money. Easily reach the peak of life. I feel like the protagonist really relies too much on randomness to become stronger. There is no reliable plan to become stronger, and his brain is not working well. It made me very anxious. The author did write it with great care and the characters were interesting, but it was still a little uncomfortable.

If the author doesn't know how to write emotional scenes, then don't write them. I was so embarrassed that I almost got cancer after reading this!

Give the author some advice. This book is a eunuch as soon as possible! Stop hanging like this. It is recommended to read more fan fiction written by others, and then read the comments to avoid the poisonous points, and you may have many ideas.