Lord of the Northlands

For the author, the writing style is almost understandable, and the writing style will gradually improve. However, if the logic of the plot does not make sense, it will be difficult for readers to recognize it. If the plot does not make sense, it means that readers are not serious about writing. If you do not write seriously, how can readers recognize your work. I just read Chapter 8. The author wrote that the protagonist saw a nosebleed when he saw the fox girl. This plot is very unreasonable. First of all, the protagonist has just been injured, which is when Qi and blood are depleted. At this time, it is difficult to even get a nosebleed. Secondly, how impulsive the protagonist must be at that time to get a nosebleed. Later he said that he would not do anything to the fox girl, which is obviously unreasonable. Also, after all, he traveled from the Internet era with the explosion of information. It is impossible to have a nosebleed when he sees a beautiful woman. How thirsty he is.

So far, there are no useless female characters, and there are no unreasonable likes for the male protagonist, which is already very rare. But judging from these few chapters, it feels like Villette is developing into a heroine. However, I personally feel that with the current setting, she is not a good heroine. At present, I have not seen any other heirs in her family, so she must inherit the family business. So in terms of benefits, it is impossible to marry outside the family casually, unless it can bring very huge benefits to the family. If there are no big benefits, then you can only marry in. Now the protagonist can't provide much benefit, and he can't get married. Of course, it may be said that the protagonist has investment value, but this kind of investment cannot provide much return in the short term. At the same time, if Violet's family wants to get rid of the Holy See as soon as possible, it will definitely need a force that can protect them. The protagonist now cannot even control his own safety. Also considering her age, she is several years older than the protagonist. Even if the protagonist grows up, she will probably be almost 30. Under normal circumstances, it is unlikely that she will remain unmarried unless she has strong strength to deal with the rise of the protagonist while ensuring that the interests of the family are not greatly damaged. So for now, the combination of the two people is not optimistic. Of course, it can also make the protagonist rise quickly, but it is estimated that there will be a lot of water. First love is good but not necessarily the right one. If the author has the writing skills to write the relationship between the two people well and separate them due to reality, I feel that it will be a big attraction. Beautiful feelings make people happy, but poignant love makes people remember it for a lifetime.

When a lord saw a commoner girl, he treated her like a princess. Everyone gathered around this lolita. This lolita screamed like an idiot and wanted to fight and cause trouble every day. The despicable male protagonist couldn't walk when he saw a girl. This kind of loser still wants to imitate others and become a noble. The most embarrassing thing is that Nm, a feudal lord, said that the guards are the people's guards. It really made me laugh. During the feudal period, betrayal of one's own class didn't mean that there was still the concept of the people at that time?

I have always felt that the protagonist is an indigenous person when written by the author. He has no vision, no courage, and is extremely greedy. He is like a clown, has no system, and has no proper identity. He is a peasant.

I feel that opening a casino on my own territory is not a good idea. If gambling is so good, why doesn't the real government vigorously develop it?

At present, it seems that the author is quite serious in writing, and he is a newcomer with potential I won't talk about the minor issues. I usually complain when I see them occasionally 🤭, but I will talk about the bigger issues. First of all, there are many places that feel poisonous in the battle at Eagle Hook Cliff. According to Lancelot's force settings, he was too late to rush to the rescue in front of a group of ordinary soldiers. Moreover, the author deliberately created this danger just to highlight the protagonist's virginity and unscrupulousness based on the protagonist's halo. I read that right, it is the virgin. This is not a random criticism. Although she is a little lolita, her strength is much higher than that of the protagonist, and she also likes fighting. In addition, the purpose of going out together is for training, and then she is not even allowed to fight small soldiers. Others are eager to fight and realize their own value, but the protagonist is thinking about how to suppress his nature and let her be a vase and develop a lolita. At present, it seems that this behavior can be regarded as a saint. I hope the protagonist will not be a saint in the future, and don't rely on the protagonist's aura to commit suicide and then fight back. Even if the protagonist opens an extra gifted plug-in, can he kill regular soldiers instantly after practicing at home? The difference in physical fitness alone will be difficult to make up. (PS: Excessive use of the protagonist's halo will make readers feel uninvolved) Next, there is the over-emotional portrayal of the summoned characters. For example, if I ignore the protagonist's will because of my own feelings, it is very cheating. What kind of 100% loyalty is this? It is not as good as those ordinary loyal ministers. For example, the protagonist asks him to protect a woman, and he feels that the woman will corrupt the protagonist or cause other bad effects. If he kills her, then how does the protagonist feel? Will he be grateful to him? The part in the article where Gareth forces a PK with Lancelot is very deceptive. He completely ignores the interests and will of the protagonist and forces the fight. I also know that this part is the author forcibly adding emotional scenes for them, but this is the more poisonous part. There is really no need to put the cart before the horse to describe the emotions of the summoned characters in a novel of this type of summoning system, because there must be some readers who are completely unfamiliar with the summoned characters themselves (especially the author who is not very famous for writing this kind of thing). Let me briefly introduce the character's personality and abilities. It's better to have past experience, and forcibly start to describe the character from the front. It's really boring and lonely for readers like us who don't know this character at all (although it has been explained in the past). In fact, even if we do know it, we don't like to watch this kind of depiction of summoned characters. If we have time, it is better to write more about the characters in the original world. For example, Dorn's trial after getting the bow can be written in more depth, such as the communication with his father and so on. 😥

I saw Chapter 389 and I can't stand it anymore. Goodbye... A bad book.

Let's talk about this book. The subject matter is good. The writing is so-so, but there are too many plot twists. You are given a system at the beginning. If you don't collect ores to exchange points for recruiting people, you will almost be killed and still don't wake up. Make more use of the system. Paddling every day, the most annoying thing is that the last second in a chapter is talking about the protagonist. The next second he ran to say that the world was far apart. No dividing line is given. If you don't have enough skills, don't follow others' example of enlarging the scene. I want to write a story that gives me a sense of immersion and strategy. The result was written as a rush. The reason why this book is not popular is the author himself!

This novel starts with everyone quitting in the first scene. This author has no idea how to write this beginning. If you write about the origin of a beast, then you should write about a situation that is advantageous to the protagonist, instead of writing about such a loser. If the protagonist's background is not very high, you can write like this.

It's a pity. The first and middle stages of this book were actually okay, but later on I couldn't control the power system, so I sent it like this.