A Crossover Between Three Book Transmigration Sets

They were all twelve or thirteen years old, so their parents already knew this?

The ending of "Sahua Sahua" is very well written, and the subject matter is relatively novel. However, the plot and ending are a bit rushed, and the emotional lines of the two protagonists are a bit flat. It could be written more slowly, and the emotional lines could be more ambiguous (only my personal opinion)

So I really deserve a beating if I hate and frame others because I am overthinking it ()

As expected of a father and daughter, they both have such flexible bottom lines.

If I have to say, I feel that the emotional line between the two of them is a bit abrupt. It feels like a trickle of water one second and then they are married. Everything else is good [Come on]

Oh, I really said what my wife wanted to hear, I really said it. (Tonic scolded me and ran around with the lid on the pot. Jpg) I thought the ending was too hasty, even a little rushed. The beginning is really interesting and interesting, and I feel that this kind of confrontation is very new. But the ending is too light and seems top-heavy. Look at me, look at me, although I haven't read many articles and I have only been in JJ for 5 years, I still want to tell my wife what I think after reading the article. It is not a guide or a suggestion. That is, my wife's descriptions of crabs and chickens are very good, but in many cases, chickens and crabs are not three-dimensional, not even as three-dimensional as Yan Huai's (let's call it this), or Bai Yuesheng. Although Bai Yuesheng hates it, his descriptions have good aspects, bad aspects, and twists. My wife can consider doing more work on the construction of the two protagonists to make them stand up. From the first chapter, I felt that the little crab and the chicken had a very three-dimensional feel. The back is a little flat. The supporting characters in the novel are often more interesting than the protagonist, Chicken Little Crab. The same goes for the emotional line of Little Chicken and Little Crab. My wife wrote very little and was very reserved. In fact, now I feel that their marriage letter is confusing. The logic behind the so-called providence (the author) in the article is also inexplicable, and I can't write it for some reason. Actually, Madam, there is no need to rush to finish Ji Chang's darkening. I remember that his darkening was completed in two chapters, but there was another comment that impressed me deeply, saying that Ji Chang's darkening was far-fetched. Somewhat yes. But I also like my wife's imagination. It's very interesting and refreshing. So I'm still looking forward to my wife's progress. There will be more updates from my wife. The wife is finished spreading flowers, even though the main text is just finished. [Rainbow fart] [Rainbow fart] [Rainbow fart] [Come on] [Spread flowers] [Spread flowers] [Come on] [Spread flowers] [Come on] [Rose] [Rose] [Red heart] [Red heart] [Compare your heart] [Compare your heart] [Compare your heart] [Like] [Like] [Cat paw] [Cat paw] [Dog head] [Dog head]

The writing is still very good, the writing style is bright, the rhythm is refined, and more importantly, the setting is very novel. It combines the setting of Wenduo Shu + the dream author, and the plot can be written logically. It is really good [poor] but the emotional line ends abruptly at the end, which feels a bit rushed, and the feelings of the whole story are not as clear as the writing. It feels like a bit of copywriting fraud [crying] but overall it is still good ~ I feel that the collection of this article is not worthy of the quality, I feel very sad [cheek support]

I think at this time, as an upstart with a unique investment vision and a mixed business circle, it is a normal operation for a man to directly showdown with his brother and turn the hostility into friendship to make the family bigger and stronger. . . .

I... Want... To... Conspiracy... To discuss... Was the chick's yin and yang eyes blocked when she was a child... There is a problem with Jiaxian... The enemy from many years ago is still there...

The author also worked hard to pave the way for his younger brother's darkening.