My Apprentice and My Master Became Love Rivals

It's a pity that this is not the era of female virtuous literature,,,, alas! In those days, it was possible to blatantly show off one's weight and thinness,,,, alas!

My mom, this is so good. I finished it in one night. Now the only thought I have is, I really can't drive this car. Please give me more extras.

It's so beautiful, I discovered the treasure author

Thank you to the author for just figuring out how to post comments! Recently, I have been looking for various stories with the background of cultivating immortals, so I read a lot of articles that seem to be different but actually have similar content frameworks. To be honest, I was somewhat resistant to this copywriting at the beginning, but there is a shortage of literature, so I didn't come in with high expectations. But in the end it smelled really good to me. First of all, what I appreciate the most is the heroine (or perhaps the author)'s multi-faceted thinking on many issues. Even if it is a mindless and sweet novel, my point of view is that it should have an accurate conception. Including the heroine's initial treatment of people and things, the distance between her and her friends (whether the change affects personal choices), and whether the black and white she thinks are really what she sees in the future, etc. In this process, I saw the heroine's personality becoming more and more perfect, and it is also a content worthy of learning and reflection by "I" as a reader. I also hope that the author will insist on thinking about this in his writing and convey it to the audience. Because it is easier for brainless sweet articles to gain popularity and response, but literary and artistic works with a certain ideological quality are worthy of repeated scrutiny. The second is the structure of the world view. Some of the author's analogies are very vivid, and the description of the world of immortality is also suitable enough. However, what makes me feel more comfortable reading is the description of outsiders and heaven and earth. I think it is very similar to the semantic meaning of "duwai". In contrast, I don't really like the emotional line. This is not to say that the heroine should focus on her career. First of all, I personally don't have a strong desire to control (of course, everyone has their own preferences). Secondly, I think that compared to the heroine's IQ, the sensitivity in emotional processing may be too low? I don't care about cleanliness, but I am. It depends on whether the protagonist can fully understand and handle each relationship. In fact, in the end, I feel that the heroine's attitude towards different male partners is still a process that is not fully clear. Either it is clear who I choose, or it is clearly stated that one cannot let us all be together, and if you can accept it, you can stay or leave. As for emotional problems, I feel as uncomfortable as eating delicious fish but accidentally getting stuck in my throat by a small thorn. The third thing is about the master. After becoming the heroine based on strong desire for control and finally (in a certain sense) more control and dominance, I think the changes in this process are still a bit jerky and abrupt. It would be better if the transition in the middle is more detailed. Maybe it is due to space limitations? There is one last small problem. I personally feel that this timeline is too long. It is inevitable that the years of cultivating immortals will be longer, but it may be a matter of seniority, which also contributes to what was just mentioned. Some plots are not full enough, but due to the large content and limited space, some details are not revealed enough. The author can try to pay attention to this aspect when writing an outline next time he starts an article. Finally, I usually like to read articles in silence and basically don't leave comments under the articles. However, if I like this article and feel that I can take it a step further, I hope to leave my comments here. The second and most important point is that I read the comments and found that the author may not have high exposure at the moment. It is also because of his passion for writing that many comments have replies. I am a moderately accomplished fan fiction writer in the industry, and I also went through this journey in the early stages, so I can quite understand the author's feelings. I also hope that my comments can give the author a little more encouragement and motivation. Love can last a long time. (Finally, I want to make a digression. I have been torn between writing what the public likes for the sake of popularity and temporarily ignoring these choices and insisting on writing what I want to express. This issue is always worthy of repeated consideration by every literary and art worker, but no matter what, the article will be a reflection of the author's heart. I hope the author will continue to persist and stay true!)

As a result, we still haven't broken through the physical relationship until the ending, hahaha

I really like the no cp written by my wife, it is exactly what I had in mind. Npahhhhhhh! I want to ask for a side story about Master! Also looking forward to your next non-cp book hehe

The big analogy is always very vivid, the big writing is awesome

I finished watching it in less than 10 hours. Well.

The person closest to him physically (Goutou) suddenly became curious about how far senior brother has come.

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