Thankfully, I Have a Home

Ah ah ah ah, I'm finally here. Pearl, I promised you, okay!!!! So I will definitely come, so I come to give you my support!! Because after all, this seems to be the first novel of yours that I've seen? Maybe... After a long time, Lan Luo gently hugged her uncle and grandma. These two important relatives showed a very light smile amidst the pain and sorrow. . ——Fortunately, I still have a family. . I burst into tears when I saw this. This ending is good and it affects me more! In fact, there are many sadistic articles, but this one is quite good. It is well organized and smooth, and it is also quite interesting. For example, the hero and heroine work together to fight zombies, etc. It highlights friendship and emotion. It is very loving. I support you and it will never change. . . . . The author's writing style is more relaxed, which is my cup of tea! Just like what you said in your copy: three men, two women, five people's love and hatred. Everything, in the end, is just one sentence. ——Fortunately, I have a family. Very good theme. The ending of the article is still a return. Although I have read several chapters, I still don't understand it a little bit? Maybe I read less articles on this type of subject, like magic and fantasy? I've read very little of it, but I still finished reading this article. It's not sloppy at all, but I still have to give you a thumbs up. It's hard work coding, there are hundreds of thousands of words = =, let's touch it first(￣￣)(￣￣)! But one of the outstanding advantages of this article is that every character in the article has a personality, which I discovered. Maybe this is what the author wants to express. Let's talk about the protagonist first. Lan Luo is an ordinary boy, but his character is very straightforward and honest, and he values ​​love and righteousness. He cares about his friendship with friends! This is very important, just like I care about your friendship with Pearl. I wonder if you can feel it, Pearl? So whatever I do, I hope you will be happy, Pearl. Secondly, everyone in the article you wrote has a personality, and the love between the hero and heroine is also quite touching. First of all, the name attracted me. When writing an article, just try to be happy and be happy. You are very good. How many authors stop talking in the middle of the article?! But Pearl's article is quite novel!! I have rarely seen this kind of writing style in recent years!! A little bit more towards Western fantasy? It's like a fairy tale, so loving!! Just what I wanted. When I first started watching it, it felt bland and bland. The more I watched it, the more interesting it became. ~ Da Ai, Lan Luo is an ordinary young man who embarks on a dangerous journey and keeps fighting just to save his sealed grandmother. Lan Tian fell in love with the princess and got married, but in the end he and the princess killed each other, splattering the enemy's capital castle with blood. Xing Jiajia, with superb medical skills and ruthless killing, saves people and kills in just one thought. Yin Xingxia, a princess of a country, is packaged with beauty and power, but she has a cruel and bloodthirsty side that no one knows about. Lin Chaozi caused chaos in the world just for an important friendship back then. This story has quite a sense of plot, I'm really not exaggerating.00 I love this fairy tale adventure story, and it seems like I have returned to that year and month again (this refers to a nostalgic plot - I used to like reading this kind of stories) (￣￣)(￣￣)<(‵3′)> Author, keep up the good work!! I will continue to support you. Our friendship will always be there, come on!! Finally, I would like to add a little red flag. I hope you like my long review. The writing is good. I am looking forward to the author's next work, by the way!! What type of article will you write next? You can tell me a little bit. I am here specifically to support your article. I love you so much~~~~Come on... I will give you thirty-two likes.

My friend Huanhuan wrote a side story for this article! Lan Luo never thought that brother Lan Tian would leave him one day, and that was just when he found that person. He thought he could protect him; he thought he could stop Xingxia; he thought he could take him back to see his uncle and grandma. Xingxia, she is no longer here either, haha~ King Zhan probably cares about Brother Lan Tian very much, but he couldn't do anything when he knew that it was the woman who killed Brother Lan Tian. As for myself, watching Xingxia kill that person, I can't kill Xingxia either. Friends, yes, Yin Xingxia is my partner, and so is Xiaoxing. They are people I would never want to hurt. But why, why did my brother die? He was obviously such a good person. He admitted that even though he couldn't do anything to Yin Xingxia, he hated her. For the first time in Lan Luo's life, the woman he hated was the woman he once liked. Haha~ It's really ridiculous. There is a tomb on the border between Hong Yan Kingdom and Bai Han Kingdom. Lan Tian is a traitor in the eyes of Bai Han Kingdom. In this way, even if he dies, he will not be able to go back! A simple tomb, not even a name was engraved on it. Lan Luo sat quietly, her heart empty! He thought he still had a lot to do, but at this moment he didn't know anything. The scenes in my mind are only memories when they are there. That year he saw the blue sky for the first time; that year the handsome young man made the first cane as his birthday gift; that year the handsome young man was about to enter the palace, and the look in his eyes, that year, that year... It turned out that there were so many memories between them, and he remembered every scene clearly. He still remembers the way the man fell in Xingxia's arms and looked at him, whether with attachment or reluctance. There were too many things to say that were too late, but only one sentence was left: "Luo Zi, you have to be good, you, you..." After all, the man did not say that sentence, but used his last strength to take out a string of bracelets from his arms. Yes, that is his only relic. My cane was also broken when I attacked King Zombie. It turns out that I am so useless that I can't even preserve your relic. He didn't know that Lan Tian had spent five years refining the bracelet. From the moment he entered the palace, it had just been refined a few days ago. That string of bracelets has no other function, its only function is protection. If it weren't for this bracelet, he would have died during the battle with King Zombie. Haha~ He thought that when he left, he gave up everything in the past, but that person never abandoned him. Brother Lan Tian, ​​you will miss Luo Zi when you are there! When grandma and uncle are well, I will go find you, okay, wait for me, wait for me~

I've always been there~ The writing is very good, I'm moved, come on! Send flowers

Pearl~Received, sending flowers~~

From the content, I always feel that the details are still lacking, but the language expression is basically okay. Although some parts are not very clear, it can be seen that the author has put his heart into it. Keep working hard and look forward to the wonderful things below.

This is well written, keep up the good work

Although there are still some things I don't understand, the whole work is generally good and the author has a solid foundation. I look forward to the next article.

This kind of he he he her her copywriting makes me very sharp. First of all, 5 points were deducted from the impression score. If I hadn't collected the article here, I probably wouldn't have continued reading. Although the author's label is a different world, and he wants to write a fantasy world, but the current situation seems that the structure of this world is a bit weird. If you want to write Eastern fantasy, write Eastern fantasy. If you want to write Western fantasy, write Western fantasy. Avoid mixing these things, which will greatly damage the unity of the novel's style. Collected and distributed to the author, I hope you can think more deeply when writing next time. People can't have everything, and the same goes for novels.

I am the original poster who posted bs. I typed this temporarily without logging in - hum, I won't let you have the opportunity to see my collection. If I accidentally expose my poor taste in the early years, I will feel that I can no longer leave a noble and cool message to the author! ╰_╯ What I said was a bit vicious, and I really reflected on it - as expected, my requirements were too high, rz I hope the author doesn't mind, persistence is everything! Some of the articles on those lists may not be particularly well written... At least when I look at the lists recently, there aren't many that arouse my interest. Yanbo's writing is not good at first, at least I couldn't stand the first part of her role-playing series. We can also clearly see the growth of Wen from this series. In the third part of this series, I think she has her own writing style, and she also knows how to show her cuteness. ——This was my opinion when I read the article. Now I don't know what I think when I read the article again. After all, I am a changeable person~ I still hope that I can persevere. It will be very helpful to refer to other people's writing methods word for word and to seriously feel the use of words. Writing is about expression, and good expression can turn a bad joke into a good piece of writing. Many times, my thoughts may look good in my mind, but it will be different when I write them down. It is the reader who is reading your article. This is different from reading your own writing. Unknowingly, these "clichés" and nonsense have been said so much...(╯-╰)/ I'm going to start spewing venom*^_^* The following are all personal opinions 1. Article title - not interested 2. Copywriting - The copywriting model of Dianjia has been everywhere since the 2000s. At least I usually wouldn't be interested in opening the first chapter even if I escaped 1. The focus is on showing the features of the article and being cute. Adventure stories and love stories are everywhere, and they are not worth mentioning. Unless the copy is written in a medieval style and mentions romanticism and chivalry, otherwise it will make some picky readers (such as me) have a lower estimate of your article in the first place. Suffice it to say that it is a male-led novel with a focus on plot. In short, the copywriting should be new and high-end, and at the same time play with the readers' minds. 3. I have no desire to continue reading so far... To be honest, this comment is a bit heavy for an author, but this is the real feeling of me, a person who is picky about poisonous snakes... Ahhhhhhh! I hope you won't be sad, sister! In the first chapter, I felt that everyone's dialogue was for the continuation of the plot. It felt like this was not writing about the world in your article, but an author's running account. There are no waves, no emotions, and the protagonist's behavior is unrealistic and unnatural. I still remember one detail of Spirited Away that touched me - when Chihiro signed her name at Yubaba's request, she did not start writing directly, but looked around, looking for a place to write, and finally hesitated and started writing on the ground. A feeling of first arrival was revealed in this detail that only lasted a few seconds. Sometimes just one detail like this can show the image of a character. The storyline comes first? ——I don't think so. The plot is a matter of course. Write down the character you have planned, and describe his behavior based on his past and personality, so that every one of his actions and words has a reason. Under the background premise, the interweaving of different words and phrases, the mutual influence between characters, the background of objective things, and some small coincidences, the plot will naturally come out, without having to rack your brains to justify it, resulting in unnatural development - this is a general situation without the help of God. The reason why I made this cliche statement is because - your characters have no personality, and I can't tell them apart from each other except by their titles. Nothing they do bears the imprint of their personality. This is the case at the moment. I did not comment on the first chapter, because some authors are indeed not good in the first chapter, but then they are much better. But the actual situation is that there are not many readers who are willing to continue reading after reading a boring first chapter. JJ This phenomenon is not very obvious, especially when the total data is not large. If the data difference in the first three chapters is not too large and the subsequent numbers are stable, even if the data is small at the beginning and the number of words is small, in my opinion it is still very promising. At least it shows that this article can arouse interest. Last but not least - don't make it difficult for readers to understand. This is an online article, not poetry appreciation. Okay, I know I must have hurt your heart (T_T)/~~Maybe you will think that only reading three chapters is too arbitrary, but it is so cruel. If you think there will be a turning point later, you can reply in my post. Come on, the writing style still feels very immature, and there is a lot of room for development~

Fantasy or Western Fantasy? I can't quite understand it, but I'll try my best to read it properly. Come on, sir!