The Undertaker Who Stayed 14

It's not that the editor is blind. It feels like a high-quality online short story. For most readers, the readability is relatively low, and it is not optimized to facilitate readers' understanding. When I read it, I had to turn on the high emotional resonance to get the experience of an ordinary online novel (personal standard).

I will gradually increase the quality in the future. Unfortunately, I have not received much traffic recently, but I will continue to write until it is completed.

The description of Leon at the beginning when Leon picks up the heroine seemed very vicious to me. Although I can see that Leon is very kind and I can also see the heroine's feelings for Leon, I found that description incomprehensible. The Alan chapter and the Knight chapter later were very well written. Since I am used to putting myself into the heroine in the novel (if the perspective of the novel is always on the heroine), I can fully understand the heroine's feelings for Leon. He didn't know me in this life, and I was forced to stand on the opposite side of him. The emotional description of the heroine in the novel is quite good, and the description of the reincarnation personality of the male protagonist is also pretty good (the most poisonous point about Alan is the look in the heroine's eyes when he first met him. Alan didn't pay attention to it at all, although I would have done the same). Overall, the one star was deducted from the beginning of the novel, and my personal impression is still very good.

She gave me the feeling of watching Witch's Journey and Labyrinth Rice. Except for the awkward part about Leon, the rest of it is considered a light novel (?). Now I feel that the only shortcoming is that it is not deep enough. Of course, I haven't finished reading until I reached Chapter 27. Wait until I finish watching and come back to comment It's broken, it's a bit difficult to watch the latest chapter even without using your brain. My sanity is elbowing my brain!

It has plot, writing style, description, rhythm and imagination. Good book After reading the latest chapter, I was deeply moved by the thoughts and emotions repeated ten thousand times by my teammates. It is rare to find a rotten persimmon that tastes like pure handmade candy. In other words, it is different, outstanding and innovative compared to other novels. In the last reincarnation, Leon's behavior was reasonable, and Ellie's response was also very touching. And this little trace of the timeline is also very interesting, but I don't know what will happen to the friends who appeared before. It feels like the progress is a bit fast. If I don't use the global travel to introduce the more detailed stories of these characters on the magic side, it will be difficult to tell later. It seems that a grand narrative world view still requires a large amount of text and writing skills or small ideas that will not bore readers, such as maps, architectural pictures, etc. Now I don't know whether the big world view is not spread out or the writing is confusing. It feels like it is difficult to fit such a large world into a hundred pictures. What I have said before is almost lost. But fortunately, following the timeline to determine the narrative does not lead to confusion caused by mixed world views. It is great, at least the reader does not have to think about who is this, who is where, and where is this. The way to do this is to reduce the length of the narrative. Wangdao Ellie's writing is not industrial, but also very burning. Ah, I have been playing all night and can't finish writing here. I'll write something new after the update.

So far, the overall readability of the book is good, and I have already read the latest chapter. From a narrative perspective, it was a bit streamlined in the later stages, but there is still a possibility of recovery, and... The update speed is very slow, and the number of chapters is not enough to read every day. After all, it is still a very good article. Moreover, I only have a few books of this kind on my entire bookshelf, and they are books that I think are readable after all. Although there are scenes of time travelers, these scenes still add to the saturation of the article. It is gratifying that there is no system (although it does not matter, but Some novel systems are like the main line of an article. Everything about the system seems awkward, but there is no such problem here. ) Also, it is normal for novels about different worlds to rise to the universe. Although it is not recommended, it is somewhat formulaic. The two books I read before either returned to the original world of the time traveler, or directly entered the universe. They were well written and indeed wonderful. If something went wrong, it would be a failure. I hope the author will consider it carefully.

There was no emotion in my heart after reading it. At least the story was not embarrassing. It was better than most novels I have read.

First of all, congratulations to our Lao Ang who is about to win the resurrection match and reunite with his little monster [Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss] I wish you both a happy ending as a member of the team

A refreshing article to read to relieve your mood

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