Ravenclaw is Like This

What can I say, when I saw the introduction, I clicked in very excitedly, but it turned out that I was deceived again. What I thought was that I could see intrigues and competing interests, picking myself out of the whirlpool, and sending hostile people and forces into Azkaban. But the reality is that the protagonist knows little about the original work, the daily life is unremarkable, there are few surprising events, and the story progresses slowly. Let's talk about the advantages first: 1: The protagonist's character is well portrayed. He is neither a monster nor crazy. He is eager for knowledge but not paranoid. He is not stingy in helping others and does things safely and reliably. This kind of character description is quite likable. Recently, I have seen too many crazy and hilarious protagonists, which is a bit disgusting. Finally, seeing a normal person makes me feel better. 2: The description of details is excellent. The character actions and selection logic can be written smoothly. Being able to write smoothly is an advantage, but it is too large to control. The shortcomings will be discussed later. The author may be a little paranoid about patching loopholes. There are many explanations and the logic is basically reasonable, which can be regarded as an advantage. 3: It is very interesting to write a story about the protagonist, Cricket Dumbledore. Although it was not originally intended and was changed beyond recognition by the editor, it is not important. I think this part should be a little more excessive. It is even possible to directly portray Lao Deng as a middle-aged man and kill Lao Deng in the society. , Is still too restrained, but this part is quite interesting. At the same time, in this part, there is a feeling that studying medicine cannot save the world, and then through writing and arranging Lao Deng, the students can learn more and grow at the same time. This part is the most interesting part of this work to me. Disadvantages: 1: There are too many thoughts in my head. I don't know if it's the author's desire for expression. There are a lot of parts that don't need to be explained. There's a lot of thinking in my head to explain the rationality of events or settings. It's very tiring to read this kind of stack of words. I originally wanted to see what happened and the choices of the characters, but I didn't. After such a long time, there are too many thoughts in the mind like patching. This is both an advantage and a disadvantage. Because the logic is too smooth, the story progresses too naturally, and no reversal is seen at all. The drama of the story is not felt at all. The result is that the story is told very flatly, as I will say in the next article. 2: The story is too bland. Although in the early stage, the main character's thoughts are used to illustrate the great threat of being noseless, in fact, as a reader, during the reading process, he did not feel any pressure or crisis at all. In the story, the protagonist thinks more and does less throughout the whole process. Even the part about sending a letter to trick Quirrell is finally different from the original work, but the result is no different from the original work. Just like the original work, Quirrell has lost his soul and ran away. Except for this, the rest is almost the protagonist's mental thinking and learning process to become stronger. The process of becoming stronger is also almost all mental thinking: studying spells, and explaining the rationality of the magic logic to readers through mental thinking. From the time I saw it on the shelves, I felt that the protagonist was a vassal of the original story, lacking details and macro-influence, as if he was being pushed forward by the original story. The author's writing is very logical. I think we should take advantage of this advantage and write the story directly away from the original work. Since we have the ability to explain the logic and personal settings, we should be bolder, completely get rid of the constraints of the original work, round up the unreasonable, and have a bigger imagination, instead of being mediocre like now. 3: Many small events interspersed in the middle have little effect and are too detailed. Generally, in stories, events only have two functions: advancing the plot and establishing characters. The fun points are just incidental. If an event has no role in advancing the plot, then you should not focus on describing it with words, but focus on highlighting the characters. The purpose of depicting the characters is more three-dimensional. Briefly introduce them, just to leave an impression of the character rather than an impression of the event on the audience. For example, due to the arrangement of Harry as the protagonist at the beginning of school, he became slightly different from the original work, and there should be more things provoked by Harry in the middle to strengthen this characteristic. These events are typical character creation events, but in fact, Harry only did two things before it was released, which was to promote the fight between the Lion House and the Snake House. Two, and the one where the teacher's academy made a fake train to trap the snake courtyard. The function of these two events is to reflect the changes in Harry's personality. However, these two events were described in very detail, and almost all the unreasonable parts were explained. There were too many explanations and details of the event, but I think it should be Shorten similar pages, reduce the explanation part, briefly go through the causes and consequences, and increase the number of similar events. Focus on describing Harry's choices and actions in other matters after he tasted the sweetness of being a leader, rather than focusing on describing what happened. Cheng, based on this, asked Harry to do bigger things to make the school more unstable, and at the same time used it as a motivation to drive other people's choices, and then added the role of the protagonist in it. The expression of the pen and ink and role depends on the pen power, and the original character cannot be allowed to steal the protagonist's play. There are many similarities in other parts. For example, the same goes for Percy when he looks in the mirror. You can follow the instructions mentioned above. 4: The connection between the owls is a spell. This setting is a bit ridiculous. This is a bit too dramatic. Even if it is because of simplicity, if the connection is a spell, then the name cannot appear in the Book of Access, because Muggles cannot know this, and Harry will not receive a letter from the owl, because the person who cast the spell is not himself. The connection between the real name in the occult should be regarded as background setting, and Sirius's spell to cut off the connection with the owl cannot be used as evidence. Before it was put on the shelves, I only found this one setting that was problematic and could not be ignored. ------- To sum up: the writing is good but the story is mediocre. The introduction is suspected of deceiving readers, and what the protagonist does is completely inconsistent with the introduction. (The part where the protagonist thinks in his head supports the setting of Ravenclaw in the introduction, but what the protagonist does is completely inconsistent.) The story is very bland, lacking transitions and drama. The protagonist does not do anything, thinks in his head, explains, these words are stacked too much, the author is very logical, but it also leads to the description of events. The description is too detailed, the thinking in the mind is too detailed, the explanation is too detailed, I don't know whether this is an advantage or a disadvantage. At the same time, the protagonist does not play much role in these events, it is just like an introduction. The rest of the story basically has nothing to do with the protagonist. At the same time, the protagonist knows too little about the original work, like a native, and there is not much to explore. The protagonist himself only concentrates on research and learning to improve himself, and has little impact on the macroeconomics. All in all, I felt a bit sleepy while reading it, and I summarized it as a daily time-killing novel with no ups and downs. The above are some of the reviews before it was put on the shelves.

Wouldn't it look stupid if the protagonist didn't know about some plots that both the author and the readers obviously knew?

There are only two chapters updated in one day, especially in today's exciting times, I am really speechless if I can't keep reading. I really want to hang the author on the astronomy tower to urge updates. [Emot=default,01/]

To be honest, if Hogwarts was removed from this book, it could be said to be ordinary campus life. The fantasy version of ordinary campus life feels relatively plain, yet catchy. The author's writing style is very good, which makes me want to read more.

It's too bland, and occasionally has a bit of flavor. If this is reality, it's really good, but in a fantasy fairy tale, it's so bland. I can only say that I can take a look, and once I stop, I have no idea of ​​continuing. There is only step-by-step development, not much of the magnificence of magic, nor the splendor of fairy tales, and even the imagination is mediocre. It is only remarkable when writing a book, and the rest is too dull. It is not like reading a novel, but a bit like reading a biography.

Basically, I didn't know that the plot advantage is very good. The non-nanny article has been well received. The idea of ​​combining technology and magic is also very nice. The main character is dedicated to research and learning. I really don't like the kind of main character who is always developing his career. The only bad thing is that the author sometimes writes plots where the main character is urged to get married by his elders or find a partner (it basically ends in three lines). Although it is not long, it is really awkward to read.

The author's writing style is excellent, that is, inner thoughts and spoken words are intertwined, and the style does not prefix names. When communicating with many people, some jokes or identifying the characters must rely on the accompanying reading comments, which may not be understood by reading it in a cursory manner.

Generally speaking, if you remove the time travel at the beginning, it will be an aboriginal book with Hogwarts.

In the early stage, it can be said to be a daily campus style, but from the middle stage, it has no characteristics of its own. It is all water and water, without any plot, and the writing style is also a problem. The writing style with the beginning and end cut off is inexplicable, and I have no idea what the content is.

After reading three chapters, I felt a bit headache due to the procrastinating writing style. I can't say that the writing is not good, but this kind of writing style is just breaking one thing into pieces and talking about it over and over again. Then I glanced at the author. I still remember his last book because it was recommended by many, but I forced myself to read a quarter of it. In the end, I was persuaded by the grinding writing style. I can't say that the author's writing is not good. I just need to get the signal to appreciate it.