After the Immortal Disappeared

I've read more than twenty chapters, and it's not good to watch, even a little ugly. First of all, I think the writing style is very average, just plain and straightforward. I don't know where those people who say the writing style is very good come from. I just think it is a little better than a running account. Furthermore, there are many plot arrangements that are confusing. First, the father of the protagonist insists on returning to the capital. Although we can see that there is a story behind it, in general, it is stupid to give up the opportunity to be a warlord in another place and go to the capital to be a mascot during the domestic rebellion. Then Uncle Hao's bird died and he went to the protagonist to cry, which was also very embarrassing. There was no description of the bird at all, and he had no relationship with the audience at all. It was completely unreasonable to suddenly come out to sensationalize the scene. The conversation between the protagonist and his father when we were about to enter the desert at the end made me confused. You have no idea what the purpose of writing the conversation about his father insisting on taking him to the desert was. Was it written that way to get the protagonist involved? Or is it written like this to point out that the protagonist may have good luck? But no matter which one it is for, the design of this plot is a failure. If it is the former one, it can be advanced in other ways. For example, the young man named Nian is unhappy with the protagonist and insists on taking him. After all, the father of the previous protagonist also said that he is a small role and can be squashed and rounded by others. Or think about the conversation again, don't be so abstract, what do you mean, I think you are born with great luck and it will not be easy for you to die. This is human talk. What father can do such a thing. If it's the latter, you can just make up a random story at the front. For example, the protagonist encounters an accident but luckily escapes. Then there is a memory of the protagonist, remembering that he is indeed lucky, so that readers can understand that there is such a foreshadowing. As a result, he just designed such a plot that I thought was stupid. . . I can only say that it's awesome Some people compare him with Chixin Xantian, saying that they both drive low and walk high. I really think so. That's also low. Can it be the same as lower than Mount Everest and lower than the little dirt bag in front of my house? They are not at the same level at all, okay? That's what people call good writing skills. That's pretty much it. The main reason is that the reviews are all about how good this book is. Some people say it's not well written and scold others for saying that wild boar can't eat fine chaff. . . What kind of fine chaff is this, so I can't help but want to make a few comments about it

There is a lot to say, but the general summary is – this is the most interesting novel I have read in recent years! ! ! ￥￥￥First of all, the rhythm of the whole book is very well controlled. From the beginning of Blackwater City to the gradual foreshadowing, the plots are interlocking and natural, and each small plot is natural and foreshadows the huge waves behind it. It is neither abrupt nor blunt. Looking back, everything is traceable. It really made me as a reader realize that "everything is human-made", which is very rare in online novels with fast-paced flat plots. Secondly, the character setting is exquisite, the character image is very full, and it is really penetrating. The relationship between the characters is not a simple struggle to the death. As the situation develops, former enemies may also become allies. The author can clearly distinguish between primary and secondary conflicts. The relationship between the characters can change wonderfully with the situation as long as there are no irreconcilable conflicts. This is also rare in other online works. A common problem in some online works is formulaic characters. However, in the author's writing, the characters' behaviors are in line with the behaviors that their characters should have, thus promoting the natural and wonderful progress of the plot. Moreover, Mr. He's character is really lovable👨. ￥￥￥Furthermore, the writing style is exquisite, whether it is plot transition or emotional expression, it is all done smoothly, often with a finishing touch in details, which is natural and spiritual. The customs and customs of various places in the book and the unique humanities are enough to support the plot framework, as well as the depiction of food. Hahahaha, go and write copy for food bloggers, it will definitely be a success 😯, there are many other advantages, so I won't list them all 😍 ￥￥￥In short, I hope the author can stick to the quality and continue to create. There will be fans who truly appreciate the work to support you, come on!

He Lingchuan was hunting, and suddenly a leopard came to eat him. In desperation, the jade talisman on his body was broken, and he also traveled to another world.

At the beginning of this book, everyone is invited to eat boiled cabbage, various soups and soups, stewed slowly and carefully, the heat is cooked, the flavor is fresh, and even if you are impatient, you will not be able to taste it. But without these foreshadowing, how can we show the big fish and meat behind? Then we have the vigorous sea fishing and the Manchu and Han banquet. If you are not satisfied even with this, I will treat you to dragon liver and phoenix marrow later on, which you cannot taste anywhere else. Old diners all know this. After all, they have been eating here for eight years, and their appetites have long been gone, so they want to see if I can come up with new tricks. But if you want to eat better and better from beginning to end, you have to be patient. The most important thing is to have enough energy.

The beginning was like a historical novel, the force value was very weak, and the strongest was only at the level of ancient generals, so I wasn't interested in reading it. . .

I caught up to more than 700 chapters in one go. This book does not have a haloed male protagonist. Instead, his good luck, hinted by the author, made me feel on tenterhooks and always wanted to explore what kind of conspiracy was behind it. There was no bluntness of ordinary people immediately counterattacking with unrivaled resourcefulness after time travel. The growth of the protagonist felt like it should be after being immersed in the story. There were no excessive adventures, and some were based on the protagonist's own persistence to bravely further reveal the face of the world... I really can't get enough of it! I'm going to read the author's previous books to fill in the waiting list, and I hope I won't be disappointed. As for this book, it is fully worthy of a five-star recommendation so far!

After reading a few chapters, I found it very confusing and without beginning or end.

I haven't seen such a wonderful article on cultivating immortality for a long time, so I would like to say a few words about it. First of all, from the plot point of view, this is an innovative work that is dressed in the garb of cultivating immortals and integrates various elements such as adventure, strategy, management, and lawlessness. Why is it called innovative? Because after searching through all the fairy tales on the Internet, there is no such fusion novel at all. Talking about adventure, we assume the perspective of the protagonist He Lingchuan, travel through various countries, browse the colorful humanities, and go through weird and bizarre adventures. The author constructs a huge, magnificent but quite realistic fantasy world, which makes people immersive. In terms of power and strategy, He Lingchuan was just the concubine of a small country's border guard, but unexpectedly obtained a large square pot that was coveted by both immortals and demons. From then on, he was guilty of the crime, and every step of his life was startled. The intrigues between father and son, the intrigues in the court, and the pursuit of treasure hunters. With his extraordinary wisdom and perseverance, He "walked on a tightrope" among all the forces, gradually growing up and gaining power, which is addictive. Talking about business, the author found an island for the protagonist halfway through the story. From then on, he started the road of "building high walls, accumulating food and slowly becoming king" to compete in the world. From a chess piece whose life and death depended on the hands of others, he gradually turned into a chess player who could turn his hands into clouds and turn his hands into rain, which made people hooked. When it comes to Mo Dharma, the author carefully sets up a world with low martial arts, where immortals and demons are locked away from the sky. Although half-immortals can defeat ten thousand enemies, they can only be counted on one finger and have no endurance. This gives national power, power, and influence a place to play. In order to further balance the absolute strength difference between immortals and mortals, the author also introduces the Yuanli system, which is higher than mana. When national power is prosperous, Yuanli is strong. "One yuan can defeat ten thousand magics" so that mortals who are united can also fight against immortals and demons. The author also added the setting of "the world is about to merge, and the evil gods are coming to invade". A sense of urgency and crisis that "the protagonist is running out of time" pervades the entire text. Millions of words later, the protagonist's strength is still far from that of a half-immortal. The author doesn't even provide the most basic training system. It's impossible to know what state the protagonist has reached. However, such deliberate downplaying just shows the author's extraordinary control. During the reading process, I can always feel the author's disdain for the realm, "It's enough as long as it feels good, no matter how far I practice." Indeed, cultivation is only a means, never an end. Personal force only serves to promote the plot. This is what the author wants to express. This point alone puts it ahead of all the "Tian Zun Niu Goes to Heaven" on the market. Secondly, from the perspective of writing power, it is undoubtedly excellent. Such a huge world view and such wonderful storytelling are slowly unfolded and narrated by the author. Each character has a distinctive personality and online IQ, especially the climax of the treasure hunt in the ruins mountain, which makes people marvel and tremble. What is worth complaining about is that there are so many beauties in the article, but the author just arranges a virtual girlfriend for the protagonist. No matter how real the world constructed by Da Fang Hu is, it is also a world of souls and deduction. It is also necessary to find a partner for the protagonist in reality. Li Qingge is so tempting, and a CP with He is not too much. This work is only half-written at present, and I hope the author can maintain this level until it is completed. Finally, judging from the evaluation, I think it can be included in the platinum palace of online fairy tales. There are only a few books in the Platinum Palace in my mind. The first one is definitely "Wild Wilderness" by Wild Fox Under the Tree, followed by "After the Immortal Disappears", then "Bu Jian Ting", and then "Zhu Xian". Now, the only thing I pray for is that the author will be safe, happy, and full of thoughts, so that he can complete this masterpiece, which will surely become a shining pearl in the novels about cultivating immortals.

Is this a fairy tale? ? ? Do you dream of making a TV series? ? Are you playing?

The writing was messy. At first I thought the title was fantasy or fairy tale, and the text also contained monsters and monsters. However, after it was put on the shelves, it didn't even include the power system.