Five Elements of Immortality

I feel that the author failed in writing. The protagonist is too mentally retarded. He dares to wander into the world of immortals. I am afraid he has not experienced severe beatings from society. Compared with Old Demon Han, he is like a child in kindergarten.

I saw about 170 chapters, under the general section, it is a very poor book.

The protagonist encounters too many great adventures at the beginning. 1. The mysterious jade self-propelled upper body 2. The Coiling Dragon Ring. These two things are enough to defy the heavens. The protagonist may not be able to digest them even if he reaches a very high level. Too many adventures will only devalue it. Later, the mysterious cave can be discovered only when the realm is high, and the adventure of that sword move is not too much. After all, it is to increase the protagonist's attack methods. The method of obtaining it can also be reasonable. Several fatal writing techniques of novice writer Ai Fan, 1. It is reasonable to start from 0 in terms of strength, and both new and old spectators buy it. But there are very few people who are willing to buy into the related perceptions of mind, mood, growth, etc., From childish to strong-minded. Because I have seen too many people who have grown from childish to strong-minded people and become tired. 80% Of the authors describe everything from mind to character. Many readers rarely follow the author from childishness to maturity, and they are rarely willing to buy into it. If they don't buy it, they won't wait until the author matures and becomes wonderful. The number of people has been decreasing. How many can persist until the end? There is a lolita from an auction house who is quirky and likes to ask questions. The protagonist thinks she is cute. The little lolita proposes to make friends, but the protagonist actually agrees hypocritically. There are many cute things in the world, such as cute little animals and cute spiritual herbs, but the animals have become barbecued meat and the beautiful and lovely spiritual herbs have become elixirs. Many powerful spiritual beasts became slaves. Many pitiful, lovely, and beautiful beauties have become Dinglu. Many simple, kind and lovely people suffer from cruel oppression. A little lolita with an obvious high IQ who also likes to ask questions, the protagonist is actually likely to make friends with her because she is cute. This is a great reason. Cute, quirky, so cute. The author is also really cute, very cute. I can't understand the author's psychology. Who would like a friend who is inquisitive? Even in the real world, I'm afraid not many people like it, let alone in the world of cultivation, that person doesn't have his own privacy? Asking questions is not the way to make friends, it will only make people more disgusted. The little loli reveals the protagonist's identity as soon as she meets him. It doesn't matter that the protagonist doesn't hate him, but he still finds him cute. It's so childish and terrifying. The protagonist values ​​​​love and righteousness in the family, and the audience is more understanding. But when I go outside, I look at many things from a childish and terrifying perspective. Another example is the casual cultivator who works with the protagonist. The protagonist is too kind to him. Expressing inability to understand.

Draft, draft, you think you are the emperor, author, how about replacing draft with selection? I'm speechless, can't I use the right words? ? ? ? ? ? . . . . . . . . ? ? ? Do you have to use the draft? Just because you are Xiuer! ! ! ! ! ! !

The writing is so retarded that I really can't stand it until this chapter. I suggest the author read other people's writings about how pig horns protect their secrets. Goodbye! ! !

The surname Lin and the surname Ye are basically plagiarized from mindless articles from ten years ago.

Too wordy, pig's feet are too retarded

Don't put personal emotions into writing a book. It's even more ridiculous than the legend of a mortal cultivating immortality. At least they didn't bring their parents in to cultivate immortality. You have to bring your parents in.

It started out very well, but after a few dozen chapters it started to feel a little disgusting. I was always faced with killing people and grabbing treasures. How many times would the same plot happen? 🔨🔨🔨

Only one in 10,000 people has a spiritual root, not counting those who have not found it. It takes 2.30 Years for a person to practice qi to build a foundation, and 100 years to build a golden elixir. The protagonist encounters murder and treasure grabbing everywhere. In the world of cultivation, death is faster than birth. Nowadays, the novels are all about murder and treasure grabbing, with nothing new.

Such a rubbish outline, the writing is cliché, there is no foreshadowing, and it's all the same.

Does the author divide it into paragraphs? There's a long list of them, what's your writing level? Doesn't know how to divide paragraphs

The writing is a bit shabby and I can't stand it anymore. The first protagonist has too serious aura and encounters too many adventures, so he has a lot of treasures that are far beyond the realm of the protagonist after building the foundation. The second one is to break the mortal bond, and you bring your parents in. In the book of cultivating immortals, it is taboo to bring parents and children into it. There are also some very unreasonable settings, and some ordinary supporting characters are written to be a bit mentally retarded and illogical.

I saw that I failed to enter the Yangmen and came out and gave away more than a hundred pills to others, so I couldn't stand it. One 7 spirit stones, one hundred pills. Haha. It's so generous. How can I continue to read this kind of mentally retarded article?

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Looking at the book reviews, the author was scolded in the same way as 🐶,

It was written a few years ago, and this is the first book I wrote. Although it is very poor, no matter what, since I can persist in finishing the book, this perseverance is enough for me to learn from it. I hope the author will work hard for the next book.

Plagiarizing a mortal's biography of cultivating immortality. Not recommended to watch

After reading roughly five chapters, the first feeling is that the story is very novel, breaking away from traditional routines, and is worth learning from. The second thing is that the author's thinking is relatively clear, and the rhythm of digging holes to attract readers at first glance, Yunran also strongly supports this writing method! A kind reminder, no matter the protagonist or the supporting role, the personality of the character must be well portrayed so that readers can resonate~~~ In short, give it a 9 and keep working hard! Cheer each other up! (A weak advertisement: Check out my "Purple Ling Soul" [url=YviQNz] when you have time)

I don't know what the author thinks about the draft. We don't care about the quality of your writing, but if you don't know how to use words, don't write. You're not suitable.

It's wonderful, the plot constructed by the author is very rich, and it reads very smoothly. The character descriptions are just right; the branch lines and main lines change naturally and are interlocking. In addition to this book, I am also following "The Monk Family" and read more than a thousand chapters in one go! There is a shortage of books. Do you have any good book recommendations?

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