Who Says This Is a Horror Train!

The copy is definitely "non-original," no doubt about it. I just don't know if it's hand-written or AI-generated, but that's not important. There are always people who write better versions than the originals. As for this one, it's alright. It's not bad, but it's not good either. Anyway, there are quite a few flaws. The main problem is that some of the logical points are lacking when it's being revised. Then there are these three characters (one protagonist and two supporting characters). The protagonist is described as having a "strange illness," which might be foreshadowing for the main plot, or it might just be to give him hyperthymesia-level memories. Although the protagonist is supposed to be a calm, collected, and capable person, I felt that some of his dialogue was not efficient at all. As for his actions, well, in life-or-death situations, even though it was obvious that the female supporting player was not cooperating, he just kept talking, neither actively searching the room nor increasing the intensity to quickly get information from the player. The female supporting player was even more confusing. She had died before, but she acted like she was really playing the game, not in a hurry or panic, and even had the mood to bicker. Let me tell you, this is not called tsundere, this is called clown... Oh, and there's also a male supporting player, uh, a pure tool, and a tool character who I don't know why he was given a verbal tic. His verbal tic is "Aish ba" and "like this," and once it was "de shuo." When the three of them came out of the first dungeon and got on the train, well, it was like a picnic (I mean their mentality). I can only say I hope it gets better and better as it goes on.

I'm just passing by; I'm the second person to post.