The Female Palace Mistress of Qingxiao Traveled to My Home and Is Still Chasing Me.

1. The introduction is not attractive enough. After reading it, you will not click in because the story has already been told and your hook has no meaning at all. 2. There are many poisonous points: Two years to become a god, which shows the low gold content; The mixture of classical immortal cultivators and Western fantasy demons can easily offend both audiences; The way to return to the soul is either time travel or waking up from a dream, farting and taking off your pants. It's still unclear when you get to your doorstep; Even if you become a god, you can't solve the problem of survival in a plane like the earth. Well, you might as well write about how the earth is actually a restricted area for gods, or a secluded place for big guys, which is equivalent to starting a new novice village. 3. Crisis This is really not a crisis, it is very embarrassing. It would be better to delete the first chapter and just write that there is a strange fairy targeting me at the beginning and wants to kill me, and then draw out the cause and effect, which would be interesting. 4. In the end, you don't look at the classification and don't know the audience. The elements of the novel should be streamlined, the crisis should be shown at the beginning, the ability should be shown, and the main line should be directly on the face, so that readers will have the urge to read. And don't change the perspective to write things that have nothing to do with the main plot later. If you want to write, wait until after 30 chapters and someone has read it stably. It should be based on the reader's taste and don't feel self-conscious. 5. If no one reads it, you can cut it. At least Quan Qin has the writing style to write eight-legged essays. Just use more paragraphs and draw out more emotions.