Shanhai Pavilion

Bro, there are several logical problems in the first chapter. One is: the male protagonist's grandfather's bloodline is not pure, and the male protagonist's father's bloodline must not be pure either. So how can the male protagonist's bloodline be pure? This thing is becoming more and more diluted. Even if the male protagonist's mother is pure, the male protagonist will not be pure when he is born, purer than his father. This is a bit hard to estimate, and it reads a bit strange. Second: Is the "sleeping" seal literal? Since he is "sleeping", how does Bai Ling know what happened in the past five thousand years and the hero's grandfather? Either the wording is inaccurate or the meaning is vague. Third: Since we are of the Feng family, can we briefly talk about the male protagonist's father? One sentence will do, it's gone, or he will disappear. The comics of "Under One Person" are also grandsons. People said that Zhang Chulan's father disappeared and disappeared from the world, and "Douluo Dalu" , Tang San's father has become depressed and hidden. If the male protagonist's father still has some achievements and is a bit dazzling, then it is not the male protagonist's turn to do anything. This kind of inheritance must be explained, but it cannot be said that the son is awesome and the father is ordinary or garbage. This is not logical. The above are all personal opinions, one-sided, and can be considered or ignored.

The first three chapters are a bit flat. Well, the plot is to be expected. You can add more unexpected words in the sentences or the male protagonist and Bai Ling's thoughts and narrations. For example, the first chapter of "Mysterious Resurrection" only has this sentence, which makes me want to read it. For example, the recently signed "The Master of Trouble" has many flaws in the first chapter, but some sentences such as: Let the male gangster fuck the male protagonist to vent his anger. This kind of collision of ideas will make you want to read it.