Warhammer: Child of Light

I don't understand why there is a female version of the Astartes. Anyone who has watched Lords of Space knows that if it appears in Warhammer and the Loyalists and Chaos factions are all unified, then the Order of Extermination must be severely punished. The Extermination Order appears one second, and the Extermination Order hits the head the next second.

1. The fact that female Astartes is a major turn-off. Almost everyone who reads Warhammer novels finds this unacceptable. 2. Clark is currently surrounded by too many women. Add to that his three female offspring, and it's starting to affect the reading experience. The author needs to control this.

The writing style in Chapter Two just doesn't feel right anymore; isn't this Warhammer? It feels more like five Emperors waging war in Warp. 😂

There are only two most important things in Warhammer fan fiction. One is to be familiar with the Warhammer universe and power system, and avoid making any personal additions (the Warhammer background and power system are very well-established; adding your own additions is like poisoning the air; it is very important to look up any unfamiliar settings). The second issue is the writing style.

To be honest, I don't really understand why some people think that the protagonist's lack of memories is a flaw. Honestly, what good is knowing each character's future? It's just an outcome, and that outcome is the result of every little thing that happens over hundreds of years of life. It's almost impossible for it to be changed by a few random interventions by the protagonist.

Why does Chapter 6 say that Clark's future world will become a world filled with poison gas and smoke? Isn't heaven a good place? Does Clark not even have the ability to manage a world? Or is it that Clark will truly become so powerless in the future that he can't even control his own hometown?

There's a retro beauty to it, a time-travel story bestowed by a powerful being. The last time I saw this kind of setting was...

Honestly, the title is awful! I've actually flipped to this page several times, but I just didn't want to open it. It gives off a very simplistic vibe, especially the first chapter. After reading it, I was even more convinced of my initial impression. If I hadn't listened to it, I definitely wouldn't have been able to finish reading it. But surprisingly, the later parts are quite good.

The legion name has been changed to "Sentinels of Light".

This description is so cringeworthy it makes me want to pick my toes! I've looked at the page several times, and I just can't help it. Please revise it, it's really too awkward.