Marvel: From the Start, I Drew Atomic Breath

This system supposedly collects some kind of "happiness power"? I'm dying of laughter! Even if we're not using our brains, this is ridiculously uninspired.

The opening dialogue with the system is unbearable to watch.

The system is spouting too much nonsense. If you're just writing this to pad your word count, then never mind.

Has this been a Renaissance? Who even cares about this system full of empty boasts and nonsense? 😰

How could you write a novel like this? Could you even read it yourself? Kids with such lousy tropes shouldn't try to write books like adults.

There's something wrong with the synopsis. A Zeta Swiss soldier points a gun at the protagonist, and then a voice says, "Ding, the Multiverse Turntable is at your service." That line alone is enough to kill someone several times over.

The protagonist's behavior is incomprehensible, like something a primary school student would do; I just want to yell at them.

I thought my writing was bad enough, until I read this book.

If you're going to write a novel with a dialogue system, just start a new one. There aren't many normal people who can read that kind of novel these days.

I can't stand novels like this anymore. A passionate young man risks being nuclearly attacked to save the American people from their misery. And afterwards, he gets bullied. 🙂🙂🙂