Tokyo: Picking Up a Beautiful Ballerina from the Start

The writing is great, and the description of the welfare part is quite delicate and ambiguous, which is awesome. The relationship between the male protagonist and the two female protagonists is gradually becoming delicious and awesome.

1. The setting of the male protagonist as a failed graduate is very poor and unsatisfying, especially since the author also arranged a plot in which the chaebol father drags the female protagonist into marriage. Except for the father giving up on the marriage, I really can't think of how the hero can break the situation. But the father giving up is not the protagonist's game. It's too bland and unsatisfactory. 2. The system and plug-ins are the confidence in the readers' hearts. As long as there are plug-ins, the readers will feel safe, especially this kind of Japanese light novel that does not write in depth. 3. The male protagonist is too frustrated in the emotional interaction. It is fun to have a female protagonist be the attacker. If all of them are attackers, it will make the male protagonist have no sense of substitution. 4. There are too many words that are meaningless or even deduct points. The first paragraph "She walked with a pair of beautiful legs by the window... The morning light poured in, and then she turned to face him... And tucked her broken hair behind her ears." This paragraph shows that the author wanted to portray a more beautiful picture. The girl turned around and looked back, facing the morning light, tucked her broken hair behind her ears, and said to the male protagonist with a smile. But a pair of beautiful legs is too vulgar in this beautiful picture. The scene itself is not used to depict lust. The word ballet girl is also used and emphasized too many times. The male protagonist is thinking about who can dance with the female protagonist. It must be so beautiful. It is too abstract. You have confirmed the relationship between men and women, and you still say this, which makes you feel greasy. Summary: The lightness of the day is satisfying, but the writing style and plot are not suitable for the current Internet environment. The pace is not fast enough, and the plot is not exciting enough. It is in need of a book that is suitable for radio waves.

I can't stand it anymore 😭

The title of the book is Gao Ren (Eating Melon Doge)

Has Chapter 22 been harmonized? Is there a group? 😍

Cp: Soft, cute, aloof rich girl x Wen Li, ruffian and bad guy who lives alone Since I haven't published a book for a long time, this one is still a sweet love story. The outline is very complete, currently 4 per day, and when the number of words increases, it will stabilize between 6 and 10,000 per day. The background of the story takes place in Shibuya, Tokyo. The heroine is not only a girl from a rich family, but also a girl who practiced ballet since she was a child. She has a very beautiful appearance, long black hair, and a cute and a bit bad personality. She is one of my favorite character settings in recent years. This story is exciting and not at all toxic. If you like it, you can read it and discuss it. Thank you everyone