Diary of a Simp's Comeback

I really don't want to say it's too poisonous. Anyone with more than 11 cards is considered Shennong. You can test it yourself.

I just read Chapter 50. Looking at the character list again, why is the scumbag the heroine? Did the author make a mistake? I thought it was a minor villain, but it turned out to be a heroine?

Forget it, how old is the author? Why are college students talking more stupidly than junior high school students? Some words are innocent when spoken by children, but stupid when spoken by adults. So what if you win basketball? Pat your chest and feel confident? Chu Xiaofan is indeed a giant baby among dog lickers. Did the author refer to himself when he wrote this paragraph? Or do you treat readers as fools and write something that would have been rubbish 20 years ago?

This school is too rubbish. The three views follow the five senses. Is it true that the police inside are fw? They have already said it was a homicide but they still don't investigate. The same goes for the hospital. Cremation doesn't have to be so expensive. It only costs more than 2,000 at most. The people here are not very smart.

1: The characters are flat, all based on stacking. I haven't seen any three-dimensional character in Chapter 45. Even Keiko just has various characters stacked up, and the same goes for the protagonist. 2: The transition is a disaster. Nowadays, the novels are basically running accounts and don't require much writing, but at least it has to be read smoothly. I don't know at least the transition in the back of this book is a disaster. One second, I was playing games on my mobile phone, and the next second, it switched to Keiko. I have read a lot of novels recently, but this is the first time that the transition is so outrageous. It gives people a split reading experience. You can understand it, but you have to rely on the reader to make up for it. This is very outrageous. 3: In addition to the flattening of the characters, which is the biggest problem in this book, another point is that the plot development is like thinking of one element and writing one. Here I write a few chapters to beat the king. In the next chapter, I write a song and intersperse retro plots. If there is any basketball game ahead, you can at least string it together and have an interlude. When I see it now, it gives me the feeling of a running account, and the plot is very poisonous and outrageous. It cannot be said to be a good arrangement. 4: I feel like the author must have read that mining novel. I remember it was written by My Sister's Bride. The rhythm of his earlier book was pretty good. Now that I have read and borrowed the rhythm of that book, I don't have the fragmented character rhythm that I have now. It's very strange. 5: If the author really wants to write a character like a high-end scumbag who is difficult to portray and requires certain cultural literacy, I suggest the author read Jiang Wen's Let the Bullets Fly and The Evil Will Not Suppress the Righteous, and taste the interpersonal relationships and speaking art in it, especially in the second part, a few lines of the Evil Cannot Suppress the Righteous One can enrich the character at once, 4 people, father A series of factors such as dang war, good women, etc. Are expressed. It can be said that among the movies I have watched, Jiang Wen's movie is the only one that made me feel the art of speaking and emotional intelligence. I can taste how he created the characters. 6: I recommend the author to read the love system book. The character creation in that book is quite interesting, but the plot development in the middle is very strange, but it is good to skip that section. Whether it is the rhythm or the description of multiple heroines, I remember the book "Cute World War II" has a heroine who is a fox, and the character is portrayed very well by high-end green tea. 7: It is recommended that authors improve their writing techniques. Zhihu has someone who specializes in teaching this. I suggest you take a look. 8: I didn't read any further, I just couldn't watch anymore. The plot was very toxic and the interpersonal relationships were also very toxic. I thought Keiko and the protagonist were a highlight, but it didn't describe Keiko's emotional intelligence and three-dimensional character as a high-level scumbag, nor did it describe the intertwined battle between the protagonist and him. It even became almost dispensable after about 50 chapters. If the author plans to make a living from this, he really needs to make good preparations.

Author, look at this, first of all, let's look at the memory of the male protagonist before his rebirth. If Keiko doesn't say what kind of wrq, he is at least a brz, right? Judging from the current situation after rebirth, there are at least 3+ suspected candidates who have had a relationship with her. Is positioning her as the heroine a bit poisoned by NTR? If we could forcibly clear her name later and implement a bit of tragedy to make people feel sorry for her, but her current idea of ​​"love is like the taste of food" is completely impossible to feel sorry for. On the contrary, people who watch it will scold her more. Secondly, even if this kind of thing is stopped, her thought will be green. For this character, she is either a semi-tool and is sent to the other side with a boat ticket, or she is turned into a tool and turned into a bitch. All in all, you can play it, but it's best if you don't charge it. Besides, the protagonist really feels like a virgin bitch. He doesn't say anything nice to people who are good to him (Zheng), but he still says he is a good person, and he forces himself to understand his betrayal (Lazi). Of course you say he does it for his family, but wrong is wrong. I understood once, but what about next time? It is enough that there is no forced understanding here. This is still a reborn person. No matter how young he is, even if he is 30 years old, he cannot be as low-income as he is. The character of this protagonist really needs to be evolved. There is also the protagonist, who has at least four years of worldview in the superbook world. A nerd should also know the development trajectory of some things, right? Can you definitely arrange some self-improvement plans? Not to mention that he is ranked in the world, but it is okay for him to have tens of millions of dollars for this plan. Is it okay to keep relying on the system's capital?

When it's over, I'm going to feel irritated, cow. If you love it, just order it if you have the money. I hope to make Keiko a little less scumbag. I feel that it will be easier to accept in the later stage. It's okay to shake the s

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