Protagonist: Reborn as Song Bayi

1. After watching the TV series, I felt like it was an official fanfiction, just with a different name. Reborn Liu Hongbing will never cheat. 2: The filming was good, but the revisions were not thorough enough. Reason one: Liu Hongbing, who was reborn, died before he could start his business.

You're really fast! The first fanfiction you ever wrote.

This book is already under contract, so feel free to follow, add to your collection, and recommend it. On mobile devices, click the "Free Investment" button above to earn Qidian Coins.

It's all just a stream of consciousness, with pitifully little dialogue, mostly explanations. A single flashback can take up half the time without a single line of dialogue, and the occasional lines are completely pointless. Deleting them wouldn't affect anything, and the protagonist has no presence either; removing him wouldn't make a difference. Even paragraph breaks are problematic.

Although I really want to support the author and I like the protagonist's book, and the theme is great, the author's writing makes it impossible to immerse the reader. One minute there's a system, the next there isn't. When people read web novels, there's a certain sense of enjoyment. Nothing changes.

These are huge articles, long paragraphs, they're making my head spin a bit 😵

So far, this is a fanfiction based on the TV series, incorporating elements from the original work. Many inconsistencies in the TV series have been rationalized. The writing logic and style are excellent, staying very close to the main story and making it easy to read without feeling disconnected from the narrative. The imagery is fantastic. I've read several fanfics featuring the main characters, and this is the best one so far. I hope the author keeps updating! 😍😍

Are Hu Sanyuan and Xiaobaixie (Little White Shoes) together? Is it in the novel or the TV series?

I just finished watching the TV series, and the ending was so tragic. I need to find some fanfiction to calm down.

Actually, author, you could change your writing style. Your current style is a bit like a diary entry—all dialogue and inner monologues, like a notebook. 🤓