The Way of Heaven

Chapter 1, I got the heaven-defying artifact! Chapter 2, I'm so awesome! Chapter 3, I'm going to show off! The above is how I feel! However, the transition is too sudden. The plot is too sudden. Why are you so awesome all of a sudden? I have no idea. I don't know the class setting of your world view. No more. ————Dividing Line———— Qidian's new book "Infinite Loading End Bone Rider Won't Let Me Clear the Game" is waiting for the boss's recommendation, evaluation, and addition to the bookshelf. The boss's attention is the motivation for me to continue to update. (づ ●─● )づ

Too slow. Let me talk about what I saw in the first chapter; Setting, setting, setting, setting, setting, setting, over. Advantages: It feels like it has its own worldview, a smooth story line, and some paragraphs are written with great feeling. Disadvantages: Explanatory text The first chapter of an online article usually embeds settings in the plot to maintain the emotion of the plot and give readers a sense of involvement. You are different, you embed the plot in the setting. There is no sense of drama, love is substituted but not substituted. I believe that if you keep reading, maybe, maybe, there will be a fairly complete story. But I can't stand it. In your second chapter, you definitely can't let him fly into the sky and fight, right? The plot is too tearing. Compared with the explanatory text, other shortcomings are not worth mentioning. Suggestions: 1. Try to integrate the setting into the plot. 2. Try to reduce the length of the plot. Above.