Living as a Remnant in the Sea of ​​Sand

Setting Chapter Let me talk about what I saw in the first chapter: 20 Years of Destruction, Monsters, Goblins, Chaos, Bottom Survival, xx Tribe, xxx Kingdom, Caravan, Past Life, Time Travel, This Life, Golden Finger. Advantages: 1. There is a world structure 2. There is a complete power system 3. The detailed description is okay Disadvantages: 1. Procrastination You put a lot of settings in the beginning, such as the 20 years of the destruction of the country, the name of the kingdom, and the caravan, which are actually not necessary to write now. You crammed too much into the first chapter, so have you ever thought about what you want to show the readers? Whether you want to show them Goldfinger, or show them the past life of time travel, or you want to show them your current experience, if you write everything out, it will only make you lose focus. Today's readers ask to see who he is, where he is, what he is doing, and why he is doing this at the beginning of the chapter. However, you have not given the past life or this life, but only given some very basic pictures. So what do you want the readers to see and let them guess? You have set up the whole chapter, but you have not explained several key information clearly. The first is who he is, the second is where he is, the third is what he is going to do, and the fourth is why he is doing this. Who he is does not mean that you just write his name and then he travels through time. You need to give a three-dimensional protagonist. Now you cannot tell who the protagonist is from the content you write. The protagonist does not have a clear anchor point and can be replaced by any person. This is not true for him. You used a lot of space to describe his world in the opening chapter, which was destroyed. There are goblins, but in the end you still haven't made it clear what kind of world this world is, is it a magical world or a world of high martial arts? Or what kind of world? You didn't write it clearly. You only wrote a few place names and a bunch of goblins. Then your protagonist has no clear thing to do, let alone a reason. You may say that this is a slow start. In fact, slow start and procrastination are two different concepts. There is actually no plot advancement in your first chapter. Your first chapter just talks about your setting. 2. Explanatory text. Do these settings have to be written now? Or can it be integrated into the plot later? You can write your setting by integrating your setting with the protagonist or other people's interactions with just a few words, instead of writing it out rigidly. What is its power system like? Their country was destroyed, and they are now slaves. They are extremely lowly. Summary: I have no desire to read the second chapter. Suggestion: Let the setting be integrated into the action and the plot. It is much better for you to find someone to whip him and say: "lowly thing." Than for you to call them lowly. Above.