The Wasteland Is Your Playground

My humble opinion. Let me talk about what I saw in the first chapter: Introduction. Your first chapter crystallizes the introduction. The protagonist shows off his abilities, returns to the safe room, meets the heroine, and leaves a hook. Advantages: 1. Very simple structure and plot, easy for newcomers to master. 2. Almost from the introduction, it is emphasized that this is a love story covered in a wasteland shell. Disadvantages (Purely personal opinion): 1. Grinding teeth, deliberately. One is with the bald head, and the other is with the heroine. The good feeling for the plot was worn away by grinding and grinding. 2. World view. There is one very important point in Wasteland Stream. The description and details of the wasteland are not to mention immersive. At least there must be a general sense of the picture. You are really reluctant to write a single stroke. You also gave a little description of the smell at the beginning, a few cars in the middle, and three locks at the end. There is no sense of immersion at all. 3. Who is he? Mr. Ghost. This is your answer. I guess you want to describe his abilities through the battle with the bald head. But to be honest, you can't tell it without reading the introduction. 4. What is he going to do? There is no purpose for the protagonist, and he has been led by the heroine from the moment he appeared. They just met, where are they on guard? Why does it feel like the protagonist has already figured out what to name the child in the first chapter? Above.