Mortal: Fairy Song Yu Issues a Mission to You

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What's the use of writing something in Chapter 19? Those who ridicule you will be killed later. What's the use of talking back? I'm afraid of cheating.

Can the author stop using Tang Dao as his natal magic weapon? The shape of your Tang Dao was speculated by a dealer. It turns out that it is not like that. Besides, it is really awkward to use Tang Dao to cultivate immortals. Otherwise, you can use towers, bells, flags, pictures, gourds, etc.; If you want to follow the crowd, you can use swords, needles, shuttles, maces, spears, etc. You can also use crescent blades to repair the moon, but don't use Tang knives, which are neither fish nor fowl.

This novel can be said to be getting better and better, and several points can be confirmed (these points are rare among ordinary people) 1. The author really understands the plot, characters, and settings, Feiyun 2. He has his own ideas and does not follow the same old plot. 3. Moderate plug-ins and strong plot expansion, such as Du Dong's copy, Liu Yu's copy, Xiao Cangkun's copy, and the plot expansion of Luan Xinghai 4. The writing style is in line with the original work of Mortal Mortal 5. The emotional description is not good but reasonable. The progress is good Disadvantages, the writing in the early stage is a bit messy, and the limited-time rewards may discourage people from quitting (but it will not affect it if you read it patiently). The title of the work may give people the impression of a third-rate work that is too popular.

In the first chapter, the cultivation levels before and after are not up to par. Han Li ran away and the sea of ​​stars was in the middle stage of foundation construction. Song Yu was at least the golden elixir stage at that time. When he opened his mouth, Song Yu was in the Qi training stage. His tone was really loud.

The introduction about marrying someone is a bit poisonous to me. Why are you rushing to lick the couple's affairs?

Why do the male protagonists in many mortal fanfics revolve around women? Isn't it possible to cultivate immortality and live forever if you don't revolve around women?

Back? Please learn to ask for leave next time, even if you are a eunuch, please inform everyone.

Don't write stupid things like that. If you reveal your identity in this way, it may really make your character appear empathetic. But just a large number of ghostwriters can easily make people feel disgusted. The characters always want the reader to lead the way. No matter who is brought in, they will definitely not reveal this secret. If you write it, it will definitely arouse resentment. Now, even if it takes a long time, there can be no mistakes at all. Especially this kind of mistake made by oneself. Do you know if your Taoist companion will have his soul searched by others? Especially when you are ascending, you will not arrange the plot of getting separated.

"Mortal: Competing with Han Li, winning in learning and cultivating immortality"

1. The opening is novel, it seems that it is not a Chenmalan Valley opening like the Yellow Maple Valley of the Seven Sects of Yue Kingdom. 2. The plot is unconventional, innovative, and staggered from the cliche timeline of following Han Li (stealing Han Li's opportunities, stealing women and other poisonous points are perfectly avoided), the time difference is not too huge, and the expectations for the subsequent plot development are appropriate in terms of perception. 3. The setting of the original work is exquisite, and the second setting is basically reasonable. 4. He Yuyu's emotional lines are delicately drawn and have a three-dimensional feel, not a card.

Chapter 29 is written too deliberately. If you don't know how to write emotional scenes, don't force the role. There is also a setting that Song Yu is 20 years younger than Han Li. I don't know where to read it. Song Yu formed an elixir before she was a hundred years old. According to the middle stage of elixir formation for the first time in the anime, she is 160 years old when she is 20 years younger than Han Li. She goes from the early stage of elixir formation to the middle stage of elixir formation in 60+ years. Is this Tianlinggen?

What did Han Li do to those who ridiculed him? He greeted those who mocked him with a smile, ran away if he couldn't be beaten, and killed if he was beaten. He never said a word. I hope the author wouldn't write so many meaningless inner activities.

This is a love story in mortal skin

It's too licking, the heroine enjoys the process of being pursued, and the sense of happiness comes from this, like a female author's obscenity.

Well, it's not pretty, it's highly toxic, it's bullshit.

I hope I won't accept second-hand ones, or those old ones.

I don't understand what the author's arrangement is for letting Song Yu go to Luan Xinghai with him, just because he wants to see the Shura Field? Under the ghost mist, wouldn't Song Yu's mother be able to live in peace with her? Do you have to arrange a plot where the protagonist takes her away? Is having multiple encumbrances fun? With Song Yu's magical power, when did the protagonist have a woman in his heart, would she not know? Is love a thing that can be tested? How does a woman feel when she watches her man take another woman into his heart step by step?

I have said it many times about the update problem. The update problem is pitiful. There were only 4,000 words in the beginning and now it is 2,000 words in a day. Your score is really updated. You have more than 100 comments in the comment area. You are only three or four hundred thousand words, which is pretty good. With your update volume, who can't stop thinking about it? How can there be a normal author? When the grades in elementary school are still stable, there are only 4,000 words in a day. There is no update and it is getting less and less. Now it is shut down. If you have occasionally added an update since it was launched, and maintained a fixed update of about 6,000 words every day, how could your results be like this? To be honest, today's readers are very smart with your update volume. Everyone knows what can be followed, and there is a risk in not following. You will stop updating at any time in the later period. It is too sharp, and no one is willing to follow it. Even if you now send a separate leaflet to explain it, or update more in the future, it will probably be a little better. Slowly turn around. You are really annoyed like this now. You might as well just cut it and re-open it.

With this amount of updates, it will only be a matter of time before things cool down 🙄

There is something wrong with me. I used my water-earth-and-wood spiritual roots, not to mention practicing with Song Yu's water-attributed heavenly spiritual roots. I got the metal-based skills, and used my master's golden-fire spiritual roots to practice the metal-based sword skills. During the foundation building period, I started to get fancy.

So many book reviews. . . Updated 12 days ago. . . Well.

Is it cold? I haven't updated in a few days.

You need to update it every day steadily.

But there are a lot of uncomfortable things about the content.

All fellow Taoists are welcome to read!

A Mortal's Story of Immortality Lin Jingchu traveled to the mortal world, with mediocre qualifications and dusty memories of his previous life. By the time Su Hui awakened, Han Li had already fled far away from the chaotic sea of ​​stars. He thought he would end up like a fairy, but when he met Song Yu by chance, the golden finger was finally activated! [Discovery mission: Contract of the Snow Fox] [Published by: Song Yu (Favorability: Friendly)] [Task description: Capture a Snow Cloud Fox monster and deliver it to Song Yu. {Map} [Task reward: a top-level magic weapon from Song Yu] As long as you discover the needs of the plot characters and complete them, you can obtain various items from the other party, including immortality and magical skills; Increase your favorability and share the other party's spiritual qualifications and physical strength. Since then, there has been a helpful Taoist friend in the world of immortality. Catch the Snow Cloud Fox for Fairy Bai Feng, temper the sword embryo for Bai Haozhi, help Yuan Yao win back his senior sister, lead Han Li to the Hidden Moon Sect to steal his bride... On an unknown island in the Luan Xing Sea, a beautiful young woman was lying weakly leaning on her sword. "Madam, you don't want your husband to find out that the restriction he set on you has been broken!" "What do you mean?" "I can help Madam escape from the Sea of ​​Chaos Stars." [Discovery mission: Assist Madam Wen to escape from the control of the Six Paths Supreme Saint] [Mission reward: Madam Wen's enlightenment on swordsmanship]

It's really well written, but the name of the pig's feet always makes me laugh. It smells like an idol drama.

Author, look at the results of your book. It was good at the beginning, whether it was not on the shelves or on the shelves. It updated at least two chapters every day, about 4,000 words. Anyway, it was not added once. As a result, not long after it was put on the shelves, it was updated directly. 2,000 Words a day. It is really amazing. Look at your book again. Now it has been a month. It has been a whole month in July. Now, you don't even have a 100 monthly ticket. What are you trying to do? If you continue to write, what are you planning to do with your update volume and daily update volume? Your grades are like this. Ever since your updates have been worse day by day, no wonder your grades are so bad. There is a reason. With your amount of updates and this kind of grade, sooner or later, you will stop updating. Suddenly, it is like this. Even if you update your grades, you will not be able to improve, because your update volume is destined to make your grades bad

The content is very good. I am also convinced that this update is one chapter a day, and sometimes the updates are interrupted.