My Abyss Survival Log

After reading Chapter 60, I feel that the characters in the plot can only be described as incomprehensible. There is not much to say. I hope the author can polish the characters and the overall plot more. I still like the subject matter.

I don't understand. Why do you have to arrange for the protagonist to collect that piece of incriminating meat? Just take it back and throw it away and run away. You have to let the protagonist take the meat with him.

The new book issue is very important to the author, please be kind to readers 😭

1. First of all, let's talk about the plot. I personally feel that the plot advances too fast and the transitions are too stiff. The plot is too fast and the description of the characters will be very flat and mechanical. In other words, the plot is too dry and has no water at all, giving people the feeling of choking to death. I personally think that the first 60 chapters are just about killing Theos, and the angel is killed in the first volume. This rhythm is relatively appropriate, and there is a climax interspersed in the middle. If you foreshadow 60 chapters, and finally Klein kills Theos in revenge, it will resonate more with readers. The previous plot was too fast and led to Anthony's death, which made the reader feel more like the death of a wild dog on the roadside, but in fact no one cared about it. This will cause readers to be unable to empathize. 2. Setting, I personally think the setting is good, different from traditional Warhammer, choose Warhammer Empire vs Abyss. But the darkness and despair of Warhammer were not written. And if someone who doesn't know Warhammer is reading this article, he will find it very difficult, because the previous plot has been advancing all the time, and there is too little explanation of the background. Many people may not know what the background is at all. 3. Protagonist, I personally think that the protagonist's upgrade is similar to that of a meat pigeon. Completing tasks will increase blessings. However, the plot advances too quickly and is completely unable to create a distinctive character for the protagonist. It makes people feel like they don't understand the protagonist's logic. But the expressiveness of Blessing is a bit lacking. If you give the protagonist a background of a medical student + a scholar of the Flame Iron Empire, then you can actually solve the problem based on the skills of these two identities at the beginning. 4. Rhythm. The reason why many novels are good-looking is that they have a very good grasp of the rhythm. Occasionally there are small climaxes, interspersed with daily life to create characters, and a big climax at the end of the volume. No matter it is a short text or a setting text, there is no way to escape the rhythm. This book gave me the feeling that the pace of this book is too fast, even faster than a short novel. It is so fast that people have no idea about the characters before they are offline. I think the pace should be slow in the early stage, because it needs to set up the setting, shape the protagonist, and then create the climax. The later stage can be faster because everyone who is following the story understands the setting and the character of the protagonist is fixed. At this time, the pace must be fast to create the climax.

Hmm... When I read the introduction, I thought of From the Abyss, Claypot Rice 😍

I feel good after reading the introduction, so I'm in trouble

The fast-moving plot and continuous cool moments are really good. The protagonist comes to the abyss as a sinner, hunts monsters to gain abilities, and explores the unknown. I feel that the content of the plot is very visual and can be directly adapted into comics (mainly because the content is similar to dark Japanese comics, and the monsters and settings are similar to Sword and Wind Legend,... And other series of comics) The world view and background can be seen that the author has deliberately created various settings.

It feels like grass jelly, but the current quantity is too small, so I'll take half a step of grass jelly.

The current look and feel is Warhammer from another world

If nothing else, this introduction is very attractive.