Great Heavenly Official of the Immortal Dynasty

The protagonist is suspected to be a eunuch, and the author is suspected to be a virgin. Don't taste the cold snake girl, don't touch the soft belly of the snake. Evaluation: Barely watchable.

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The original body has all five poisons, especially prostitution. Does that mean it already has the disease of flowers and willows? It couldn't be cured in ancient times, right?

1. Is this book about immortality or fantasy? If you want to cultivate immortality, write about immortality seriously; if you want to write about martial arts, write about martial arts seriously. 2. The name of your book is wrong. It should be called "I Become an Immortal Official in the Immortal Dynasty" instead of Gou Zai Xian Dynasty, because I read 96 chapters and didn't find the word "Gou"! 3. Your writing style is good, but the logic of the book is not smooth and has many flaws.

What kind of immortality is it? How good is it to be a martial artist? The energy and blood are as strong as the sun. What kind of demons and ghosts will not die? The world is peaceful. A real man just wants to be fierce.

Once you practice immortality and use guns, you will be in trouble, okay?

There is a drawback to this kind of novel. If you keep following the sign, you will get good luck every time. Simply put, it becomes a luck flow, an invincible flow, or a cheating flow. If you want the novel to be ups and downs and fascinating, the protagonist must have hardships. Good luck definitely comes with a price.

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I'm thinking about the name of the main character for my next work. I'm writing it now.

Is there a main plot? I haven't read it for dozens of chapters, but it feels like it's all just foreshadowing and very scattered. I feel like the protagonist is making noises and doesn't know what he is.

The pace is too fast, and it doesn't make sense at all to match the background you gave. It's boring.

Use fewer adjectives like this, there are too many

The updated version is only 6,000 words long. Isn't it a little short?

If the results are too bad, the big guys can wait and see, and there is no need to vote for monthly votes. The author stood at attention and cursed.