Starting Out as an Everyday Male God

A life-style male god? This reminds me of a great novel from a long time ago. It is logical, not awkward, and the details are perfect. Especially the female protagonist is very brilliant. Unfortunately, the author may be middle-aged and likes to write a little bit of romance. Book friends reported that it was removed from the shelves. He didn't even finish it.

The pacing and everything are very suitable, but one thing is, does the author have any regrets? "Supermodel" and "187" are mentioned every one or two chapters. Even if you really can't help but mention them, you can't always use these two words. When talking about body, you must use "supermodel", and when talking about height, you must write "187".

The prince is strong? Linlin? Capital? Brother, you are a bird in a hurry🙂🙂

After reading the first dozen chapters, the system rewarded 4 million in two months. When I first entered college, I bought a car worth more than 1 million, hundreds of thousands of clothes and jewelry, and a monthly rent of 18,000, while my parents worked in the factory in my hometown for two months for less than 10,000 a month. Isn't the author simply sick?

After reading forty chapters, I died of a poisonous attack. I imitated Lao Zhou and Bread imitation, but I didn't understand. The writing was a mess.

Is the author female? This novel is relatively long-winded and plain, giving me the feeling of running through a running list. There is nothing poisonous and nothing that makes people want to watch it.

Yesterday, I had a one-on-one match with a classmate in my class. I won, but the other person's mouth and nose were bleeding. What should I do now? Will he come to the system? How many days can I survive?

Author, your takeout has arrived. The security guard won't let you in. I left it at the door of the community for you. Remember to pick it up

Is the author female? A hint of Mary Sue

I basically ordered all of them, but I was really not interested in a few of them so I didn't order them. I was also given two monthly passes. Can I give the author some advice? First, your idea is good, and girls are very three-dimensional. This is your advantage, but the disadvantage is the character of the protagonist. Whether it is the barking dog in the life-style male god book, who becomes high-spirited and wants to do something after having the system, or a scumbag like Zhou Zuiniao who is a complete scumbag from beginning to end, they all have a clear character. Where is your protagonist? A calm, Buddhist, man in his thirties, who is hesitant and doesn't know what he wants. To be honest, he is not likable. His charm is composed of the skills, appearance, and financial resources given to him by various systems. He does not have a core attractive point. Basketball, music, appearance, height, financial resources, and good universities account for many people. At least I have seen such people. Secondly, your recommendation for some plots Progress is too slow. I know you are proud of your writing style. You describe the characters' reasons for doing what they do and their inner behaviors very carefully, but this is not necessary. You are writing a web article. Even if it is Lao Liu, Ji Cha, or Crow, they don't have much psychological description of the supporting characters. More often, they just brush over or directly write about their behavior, and some directly say "I don't know what they are thinking, suddenly...". I know you want to write about the clowns of the protagonist's two roommates, and the foreshadowing of Chen Haoruoruoruo, but to be honest, there is no need to write these in too detail, as they will squeeze your content too much. You can take a look at the content after it is released, and how much it describes the two roommates. The latest content is more than 5,000 words, and how much does it portray Wang Ziqiang's roommate. There are so many comments about you, which may be due to your writing style, but at the beginning, there are not many people who are willing to calm down and read your description of the inner drama. A little humble opinion