Pokémon: the Salted Fish of the Ghost-Controlling Family

The author's book has problems with its logical structure and plot design. For example, the shipwreck safe at the beginning exposes logical problems. How could the safe on the surface have been raided and left something for the protagonist? The hook designed to lead to the plot is illogical and poorly designed.        The plot design of the subsequent Dan Emperor CP is also messy. The protagonist's self-positioning is to lie flat. In order to lead to a battle, the author forcibly borrowed the protagonist's father as the Riddler to trick the protagonist as a plot lead. This kind of "for your own good" forceful move will only make readers feel... I feel like I'm choking in my throat. The original daily life is the main line, and the mythical beast plot is the foreshadowing background. It's not bad. However, the appearance of the Dan Emperor CP plot is to forcefully push the protagonist along without any foreshadowing. It's like operating a puppet. It's stiff, full of routines, and not smooth.          ，，，，， To put it bluntly, you have to choose the template well. This plot setting is too disgusting. It will be absolutely disgusting for "introduction" readers to introduce the protagonist. He has a wealth of money, a childhood sweetheart, a happy family, and everything. He can just lie down and go about his daily life. However, he is forced to fight, which makes it difficult for everyone. "Onlooker" readers will also be disgusted when they see it from a third perspective. This kind of bad taste of Riddler + forcing others is disgusting. You are not a group portrait. Everyone is here to see the protagonist. If you just think about disgusting the protagonist, you are disgusting the readers. I took a look at the data and guessed that your book was all about earning a living. I don't know what your attitude was when writing the book. It's unlikely to be a career because the data is average and it's just a hobby. I don't see any obvious points of enjoyment. The main character is just disgusting.

Pokémon

You are already a trainer, and you take the initiative to go to the gym to get badges to participate in the league competition. If you are talking about old enemies, is this still considered salty? Isn't it good to do your job? It's time to drive away ghosts (ghost Pokémon), explore ruins, rescue Pokémon, tame your favorite Pokémon, and live a happy life with Pokémon. Why don't you go out and show off again? Salted fish are like salted fish. I just read Chapter 83 and you wrote it like this, and my desire to read on was instantly reduced. Because of your process, you can already guess the follow-up: traveling + playing gyms, conquering Pokémon, participating in league competitions, and showing off. You know the sequel to other people's Pokémon stories, but what gives you the motivation to continue watching them? It is the warm daily interaction between the protagonist and Pokémon. What is the picture? The lightheartedness of a utopian world. Why is it so popular to ride a bicycle? The daily Pokémon books are so wonderful and so healing. Author: You can't go to the gym to participate in the competition, but also have a warm daily life with Pokémon. The degree between the two is not so easy to grasp. If there is more of one, there will be less of the other. If the two are equal, they are neither fish nor fowl. If you want results, focus on one aspect. You can make money by doing both, but not much. After all, you have to pursue something.

Personal comment: The daily characterization and plot advancement are at least above medium level, and there is the possibility of improvement in the future, but the first-person perspective battle writing is a bit... Mechanical? Anyway, the battle with Dan Emperor was very boring to watch. It is recommended that the author reduce the length of the battle, or not put key plot points in the battle Overall, it is a good idea that remains to be seen.

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Network map

I feel that the ghost-controlling clan is a bit out of place. In the Pokémon world view, it is changed to a medium like King Furong who guards the entrance to the spirit world, and there is more than one entrance to the spirit world in the setting.

Can the author change the picture of the heroine? This one doesn't look good.

In Chapter 16, the amulet in the safe on the smuggling ship is obviously stolen goods, but the official does not take it away. The protagonist still thinks it is reasonable. What kind of logic is this 😅

The sauce is here, bubbling + tasting!

You can vote for some characters of your own creation, and the author will intersperse them into the novel according to the situation The format is as follows Name: Gender: Age: Birthplace: Appearance: Special identity: (such as someone from an organization) Pokémon: (Try not to exceed three, but more is okay, mainly mark your favorite, not mythical beasts)

Pokémon

It's very dry. I'm a master of dry literature. There are a lot of meaningless dialogues and descriptions that are meant to be fun and refreshing. Apart from being a bit childish, you can only skip reading this book. Except for the core plot of conquering Pokémon and fighting, the rest is dry, but the core plot is only 20%. If you make an age-appropriate match for this book, it might be 6 to 12 years old.

Rock Kingdom has become so popular recently, so many people are flocking to the same section, and there must be many amazing and talented people among them. Learning from each other's strengths will definitely make Elf Literature great again😆

Discover Elvish Text! This reminds me Jiangjiang

Seeing that Chapter 99 finally has a main plot 😐

Pokémon Strange Tree

Can the 4 skills be unlocked? Looks so unpleasant

This novel is really good. I followed it until the first few rounds of the competition. Then I stopped because I didn't want to watch the competition intermittently. It was very tedious. I didn't expect that the author would end the competition after finishing the competition. Thank you to the author. I read more than 300 chapters at the beginning. It was really exciting 🙂

A trainer who likes Lulina is destined to have a failed life, but a trainer who likes Caido is destined to have a successful life 😜.