Berserk: This Brand Feels a Little Off

Book lovers of Branded Warrior are really starving, they can endure such a god-man plot and a god-man protagonist.

The protagonist spent three days in a graveyard looking for his way home. Did the author also spend three days in the toilet looking for his pants?

There are fewer protagonists who have just traveled through the system and become a body, but still don't understand the form and want to go home.

This is not Japan, trash protagonists are not popular

After looking at the author's previous works, I found that literary youth is even his smallest fault, and it's not worth spending money on.

The protagonist is too anthropomorphic. He wanted to go home for three days at the beginning and ignored the system tasks. How come you didn't starve to death? You actually admitted that you were a spy when you were in jail. You said that you were a refugee/wanted to join the gang/a deserter/a wandering knight. Why did you not choose a hostile identity? What is outrageous is that in Jianfeng's prison, you only received one whip? You've been tricked as soon as I've been beaten, right? And when you're jailbreaking and you have the key, you rush out alone without letting a few people muddy the waters. It's really too anthropomorphic, and your brain probably doesn't allow the earth to pass through it.

It's rare to see Jian Feng, and I was stunned when I entered it. Is this protagonist still from Earth? Waste three days to find the way home after crossing. Meeting a local who was helpless, he was bombed with gold coins. In the melee of the castle, others were attacked and others went crazy. I have been whipped but it shows that I have not broken away from modern thinking. Let me ask - is this a human being?

There is actually a template for this. For a common theme in online articles, it is caution, because everyone would rather see someone who is more cautious and has made a lot of preparations, rather than someone who is stupid. For example, if you, the protagonist, start in your birthplace, you should be more cautious, observe the environment, think about countermeasures, and put these thoughts into practice. After describing the physical activities and actual actions, you have a very good initial evaluation. You are being caught, tortured, and humiliated. It is difficult to make people feel happy. In the current environment, people generally do not want to read particularly frustrating Internet articles. Now you can still change it at the beginning. It is difficult to have good data.

Let's just say that living is the most important thing... Playing games and doing quests is fine. 🙂 You write that you got sick after being bitten by a dog in a mass grave, lay down for a few days and missed the quest... You were picked up by a kind person, and then the kind person was hacked to death by the rebels, and you were arrested... I think it is better than your explanation of wandering around and wanting to go home.

It's difficult to comment on the history. The protagonist of an online novel can be bad, unlucky, and have flaws of one kind or another, but he should not be a fool who can be recognized by almost all readers. If you don't change this, your subsequent writing will be at the same level as the masters, and at least 80% of the readers will be screened out at the beginning.