Cultivation of Immortality: Start by Working Hard to Get Admitted to Dongtian Immortal Mansion

I was confused when I read it, the subject matter is good, but the writing is awkward, not exciting at all, and uncomfortable.

My feeling is that when I saw this introduction, I left it

In the world of cultivating immortals, I feel that being obsessed with one sword is really too monotonous.

I don't know what you wrote and what it means.

The first 5 chapters were very confusing. Chapter 2 talks about brotherhood, Chapter 1 talks about the protagonist's lack of energy, and Chapter 1 talks about the protagonist entering a fantasy world. It's completely wasted and doesn't attract readers. You can write in and out, but you can't just write about one point in a chapter. Another big problem is that it is very tiring to read. It can be seen that each paragraph is carefully crafted, but there is no vernacular to connect the paragraphs, which makes the reader very tired. In layman's terms, even after reading one chapter, I still don't know what is said.

Why do you have to be clever? Make a time traveler master, neither fish nor fowl

This writing style. . . Hard to describe in one word😥

Who will watch "One Hundred Years of Solitude" at the starting point? Besides, it's a narrative method, it doesn't mean that everything can't be written clearly.

After cultivating immortality and taking the college entrance examination, do you like reading so much?

The shelf life has begun😆🤔

The plot is a bit average, but Chapter 37 is a bit powerful. Just write as many interactions as there are supporting characters. It is recommended that all the students in the school be written together in a few million words.

Come on, come on, come on, come on

The writing is good and has great potential. I wish I could write more. Come on, 5 chapters a day!

Why is it that the protagonist, under the guidance of his master, practices some supreme skill in a daze but still makes a mistake? He has to wait for the guidance of the mirror left by his master to discover the correct route?

It makes my brain hurt to read it, and it feels like I'm sick to write it.

It's well written, you can see the growth of the protagonist, it's logical, and it doesn't overwhelm your wits.