Penglai has an immortal mountain, where the tides embrace the sea. The tides give rise to strange islands, and the strange islands hold three treasures.
The first is the Mirror of Pure Illumination, the second the Measure of All Beings, and the third the Sword of Justice.
The Mirror of Pure Illumination reveals the boundless aspects of the Three Realms. Good and evil are laid bare before it, needing no words to make them clear.
The Measure of All Beings weighs the endless desires of the Three Realms. Right and wrong are measured before it, needing no explanation to be distinguished.
The Sword of Justice severs the ever-changing karma of the Three Realms. Black and white paths lie before its scabbard, needing no hesitation to be judged.
The three treasures were entrusted to three immortals, who reside in three celestial abodes, far beneath the immortal mountain yet high above the tides.
Clouds gather, then shadows appear; turn away from the sun, and light shines through. Burning flowers cannot enter the room, and fierce winds cannot batter its windows.
Only the Kunlun Sevenfold Incense can summon the three immortals. Burn it for a day and a night, and they will come. Whether the matter concerns humans, ghosts, demons, or monsters, no matter how many hardships and sorrows it involves, they can resolve it all., Strange Tales of the East Sea
The Three Realms were in turmoil, and all manner of strange cases had begun to emerge.
The Kunlun Sect Master gave an order, and an Office of Investigation was established in the immortal realm of Penglai. After Lu Hong took up her post, she saw Ao Yunche, dressed in a dark robe, walking out through the gates of the Office of Investigation. He carried a brocade box containing the Sevenfold Incense and looked utterly peerless.
They said the East Sea Dragon Clan’s abandoned illegitimate son had been taken in by Kunlun and made a water official.
Lu Hong instinctively wanted to run. Could anyone have a good outcome working alongside Ao Yunche? Could anyone have a good outcome working under him?
Ao Yunche smiled meaningfully. “Little Deer, we meet again.”
Lu Hong thought to herself: Is there any way I can avoid seeing him?
From then on, determined to survive at the Penglai Office of Investigation, Lu Hong resolved to work hard and do everything she could to satisfy her superior, Ao Yunche.
But as the Kunlun Sevenfold Incense was lit one stick at a time, secrets from the past of the East Sea Residence resurfaced. A web of sinister plots and misunderstandings enshrouded the Three Realms. What would become of the Penglai Office of Investigation?
Awakened the Sign-In System, I Became a Cultivation Maniac
The Transmigrated Villainess's Divine Addiction
We Who Cultivate Immortality
The Beginning of an Immortal Journey
Weren't We Supposed to Be Fleeing Famine? How Did I Become Empress?
Transmigrated as the Supporting Character Who Makes the Heroine Shine
A Husband-Blessing Fate
I Have a Flock of Bizarre Players
Dunhuang Moonlight
The Jiang Family's Ancestor Was Roused by His Descendants
Miss Dragon, Is This the Princess You Ordered?
Apocalypse Game: My Mental Illness Can Corrupt All Things
Finally, the cover has changed! I've been looking forward to it for so long.
Small suggestion
I don't actually pay much attention to romance novels, but the first romance novel I came across was written by a famous author on Qidian.com. After reading the chapters, I felt that the author's writing style and atmosphere were consistently outstanding, and their personal writing style was particularly striking.
There's a Weibo hashtag for Yuqingweilin. Are there any fans who want to join?
Sign the contract quickly. Continue reading the book.
This is so damn good-looking, I need to start typing!
② Regarding the chapter on the clan chief murdering his wife (analysis for improvement), just take a look; some things have in common.
1. Tighten the pace: Eliminate redundancy, leave room for pauses, and allow the emotional progression to be more natural. Break down the mother's lines into "actions + short sentences". Delete repetitive descriptions. For example, only mention the "eight swords" once in key places, such as "That sword that had cut down the rebels pierced my mother's back eight times, splattering blood all over…
The author has made progress!
The transition in chapter 63 was really well written, fantastic! Keep it up!
I Became a Policeman in Penglai (Original 10724 words, first 60 chapters)
More than 4,500 words were revised. Chapters 1-60 of "I Became a Policeman in Penglai" - Chapters 1-5 I. Core Logic & Detailed Bugs 1. Abrupt and disjointed setting: The world-building and rules are presented in a straightforward, narrated manner, without any logical connection to the plot.
Solution
Posting chapter by chapter is too slow, so I've compiled it all together. I'm definitely going to finish reading it today. Author, if you really lack inspiration, you can use the currently published articles as practice and see if you can adapt and rewrite them better. (Small suggestion: keep the title consistent and diversify the imagery to avoid repeating a single image.
①Analyze the problem (Please, please update slowly! I can't even finish reading this, I'm so desperate and I'm scratching my head in frustration 🙀)
Analysis of common problems in the first sixty chapters (summary). More updates to follow (currently being compiled...). 😭😭 I'm also unsure if I missed a word in the correction. I. Core Flaws (Directly Affecting the Potential of the Work) II. Long-term improvement and optimization items (to enhance the quality, which need to be avoided throughout the process)