I Got Laid Off and Picked up a Magical Girl

I thought it was Chen Rui, and I was wondering why someone would write this

Various magical girls appear in the workplace

Why is it that magical girls can't accept their husbands and they seem to turn into husbands pretending to be themselves?

The first three chapters are arresting enough, but only the first three chapters are good enough. After reading the rest, I doubted whether it was written by someone else. There are several problems with this book. Let me pick one: The apprentice named Cheng, no matter what the plot arrangement, should not be allowed to hold the protagonist's hand The second wave of people appears before the world view is spread, it is too hasty Bai Jing sneak attack and escape? No one likes someone who has betrayed him, okay? It is too slow to enter the main plot, and the rhythm is a big problem Also, the Dragon Clan is very good, but you are not Jiangnan. Please put away the literary youthful flavor that is always exposed. This is not suitable for the mode of online novel serialization Finally, the eunuch doesn't even have an outline? 😒

At present, the setting is a bit complicated I haven't seen the cause of the Kaijumon disaster and the impact of this thing's intermittent appearance of destroying neighborhoods on society. The source of magical girls' power is flower bloom, and they use flowers as code names for each other. Although the background mentions that they are keen on grading magical girls, the text does not clearly divide the grades. It only mentions a small group of "fairy tales" that are invited to join if they are strong enough. At the same time, Kaijumon directly took the Arabic numeral grades from the original work. At the beginning, it was said that sexual creation related to magical girls is a felony, which shows that the status is okay, but then the black-hearted organization appears The existence of the black-hearted organization is grand. The time when the awakening is detected from the age of six, the probability is as low as a few ten thousandths. After awakening, you have to take the test, if you fail, you will be kicked off After that, the classification of monsters and magical girls is not clear. I hope the author can sort out the settings.

No man, I thought the daily guide was good but it turned out that it was cut. You should at least send an outline before leaving.

Obviously, he picked up a magical girl and then got laid off

Alas, you guy, after cutting it, more people looked at it A lot of people came to like my previous comments on your place There is always a feeling of looking at the stinky corpse.

It's too slow. After reading twelve chapters, I haven't entered the main story yet. The main character was almost discovered by two waves of people. To be honest, the first wave of people was pretty normal. It was okay for his teammates to come and see him. After all, he had endured three months of being an eagle. Why would the police come to his door later? Just run away for the heroine? It's superfluous. The foreshadowing in the front is okay, but the back part is a bit weak. The writing is okay, and the content is thoughtful, but the progress is too slow. If you want to reflect the heroine's problems, it's actually best to reflect them later, because the setting has been three months.

I once read a book that started to go from bad to worse after writing more than 200,000 words. However, it continued to be updated. It was not until the day when it reached 280,000 words that I finally opened a single chapter to explain the current ins and outs and said that after various efforts, the book was really hopeless and announced the outline. This kind of unfinished way can be said to be ruined. He overcame my anger when I met my father-in-law. I put down my sword for the first time and gave him encouragement. But I didn't expect that today I would see an extremely negative teaching material on the contrary. A self-righteous and exaggerated ability. He also said that when you decide to cut it, everything will cease to exist. No matter how round you are, you will only look like a clown. It's quite pitiful.

Hiss Widower Although I have always only watched magical girl heroines But the writing of this widower feeling is pretty good. I have collected it. I would like to ask what the direction of the plot will be in the future It shouldn't be enough to just cultivate monsters to become magical girls. Without your own power, you are too passive. Will you consider what kind of monster's blue blood will be used as a price to let the protagonist gain strength in the future? Or is it just behind the scenes? That is too controlled by others. As far as the monster girl in the current plot suddenly rebels, it is a very scary scene I hope there is an answer that does not involve too many spoilers.

So who killed the male protagonist's wife? Is there any hole filling?

Writing a novel is contrary to nature, and dying on the road is normal