My Magic Proficiency Can Exceed the Upper Limit

I still want to complain about William's attitude problem and the protagonist's character problem. I don't know if those two problems are the heroine's problem. A high-level magic warrior fights human traffickers and raises a group of children incognito. This plot is too fairy tale. I will talk about this first. I will talk about it after the following ones have been deleted. If it is not mentioned, I will be blocked.

Because this is the first book at a certain point, I lack experience, so I'll stand at attention and take a beating. ———— Let me talk about the biggest problem first. When preparing the outline, I only thought about the climax of the plot. Lacks a clear main line. Especially in the first volume, I only thought about the climax when William's identity was revealed, but I neglected what kind of main line I needed to use before that to connect the entire plot of the first volume.

Emotional writing needs to be improved. Is that teacher William a Marian?

This is a very old novel. It looks like a Western fantasy version of Fighting Against the Sphere. The interactions between the heroines are shitty and mindless scoldings. It reminds me of the best fanatics and personal masters.

Just read dozens of chapters. The writing style is okay, more like Western style, or Japanese style. But it's a bit weird, there are issues with the protagonist's personality, including some of the pretentiousness and slaps in the face being rather blunt, and there are too many restrictions in the setting and imparting of the power system. For example, magicians must die on the battlefield, and to teach magic, they have to bring two little girls to teach them together. Including the obviously dangerous skill of leyline recovery, and the fact that the protagonist's magic power is not much, so he did not use it in the forest when he was living. The second time he went out, he was struck by lightning, and then he found some morning dew and insect eggs. It was a bit too deliberate for the sake of conflict. You write that the world is too dangerous. How can ordinary people survive? William specifically takes care of children in such a dangerous environment? It's weird anyway. The protagonist's character is not very mature either. He has a very old abandoned house character that is visually appealing. Although it is fine for a slow-paced novel, the feeling of a group of children playing house is still too strong. I hope it will be different in the future.

You all said that you have read more than ten chapters, but why haven't I finished even one?

Although I feel like I've explained it several times, I'll give it a unified reply here. Q: Is William the Virgin? Answer: No, but it may be more exaggerated than the Virgin Mary. Question: Why is the writing about adopting children so childish? Answer: William's character is like this, or the purpose of life is like this. Q: Why didn't you write it clearly at the beginning? Answer: I want to leave my question until the end of the first volume. ———— Beyond that, to be more specific. The character William has his own pursuit in life, so he adopts the protagonist and others. But William's purpose for doing this will not be revealed until the end of the first volume. I didn't write it out at the beginning, so it made readers uncomfortable. My problem. In short, when I was preparing the outline, it was because of William's vinegar that I had the dumplings in the first volume. Even before I started the book, I thought about whether to start the plot directly from the second volume. But in the end I kept the first volume just to make William jealous. I am not willing to give up on him. Of course. In terms of results, what I wrote like this is useless. Readers will either criticize it or abandon it. In short, the data is very poor. It's just that when it comes to this, I have already accumulated a lot of trouble, so I can only bite the bullet and write it down.

When you see the Holy See conspiracy in the introduction, let me remind you What if there is a god behind the Holy See and it may be very powerful?