Mortal: Han Ming's Story of Immortality

I fantasize that my writing is good. Actually, it's just a piece of cake No, what do you mean by what you wrote? You should hurry up and enter the palace. It's written like a native. Even if you write it like this, even though the protagonist has traveled through time, you don't understand the current plot at all, so you take the lead and ascend.

Aboriginal? Feeling a little bit off

After reading Chapter 64, I felt that there was too much nonsense. It took a long paragraph to describe an NPC. A chapter that can be summarized in two sentences was written with 2,000 words. The main point is that the plot is not attractive. Those who will read this book are just mortal fans. You reprinted the plot of the Yue Emperor's Black Killing Cult and made it suspicious, and the words are meaningful and so on. I haven't gotten into the topic for a long time, and I am stuck on the word count. No wonder it is not popular.

I thought I would jump to the spirit world in Chapter 30 or 50, but it seems that it will take Chapter 300 or 500 to become a god. . . Boss, fan fiction is mainly about showing off in front of the protagonist and popular supporting characters, interacting with NPCs that no one knows, and slapping people in the face. Even if you practice qi and torture Yuanying, no matter how good the writing is, readers will not be able to take it in.

Fans feel bad when they see the natives (◍••) Look, it's always a little distracting and you can't really take it in! Don't read it. It's hard for someone to write a fanfic that's not a system novel, and they don't know that the fighting scenes involve sacrificing magic weapons? It's still the kind of thing you can hold in your hand and chop around. It would be a pity to throw away tasteless food...

With this comment, I am also writing a biography of Han Ming, which is the title. I would like to bother all fellow Taoists to come and watch. Thank you!

Why don't you create your own original work? Do you want to share your money if you write Wangyu like this?

The Tiannan chapter is over for the time being. Now we are collecting ideas for the Wulonghai chapter. I hope fellow Taoists can give me some advice.

Han Laomo is already a Taoist ancestor, so what else can he write about a mortal fan 😵

Overall it's okay! It's just that it's been a bit awkward since you were 18 or 19. Every two years, you're going to find someone you've only known for a short time? People still treat each other warmly.

[Age] (Original text: It was the seven or eight-year-old boy...) [Time of leaving home] (Original text: No one knew that the boy named Han Ming would suddenly run away from home a few months later after unintentionally opening the secret in the jade tablet, and a few years later, with the help of this jade tablet, he would directly worship a certain Nascent Soul elder of the Luoyun Sect...)

Watch more old TV series, there are a lot of things you can learn from

Go check it out: The Immortal World of the Second World, which is also the story of Han Wu There is also another book: Mortal Cultivation of Immortality without Regrets, which tells the story of Han Li 30,000 years after he ascended to the spiritual world. These two books also write about the world view of mortals, and do not include what happened after Han Li, which is also the highlight of your book.

The writing is so bad that I can't stand it at all.

Congratulations to Han Ming on his birthday! Also celebrate your work reaching the important milestone of 200,000 words! On this special day, I believe there are still many Taoist friends who are silently paying attention to your work. The message area may not be very lively, but every Taoist friend who leaves a paw print is the best support for your hard work. Here, I would also like to congratulate you on behalf of the readers. I hope your works will become more and more popular, keep up the good work! 🎉🎂📚