The Outcast: My Golden Light Mantra Is Off!

In addition to the ninjutsu and martial arts problems, there is also a Tao method problem. Will there be anything wrong next?

The whole book is really different. The unique effects of the exercises are so funny as long as you dig into them deeply. The various interactions are quite worth looking forward to. But some experiments should be added inexplicably, and some strange postures of seekers should be adopted. If you have the ability to be unexpected, just write about the unexpected. If you have super-standard abilities to do research on, then use the brand-name super-standard abilities to do research. But it is necessary to set the unexpected ability as a superpower descended from God, and then do serious research. It's okay to be humorous, and it's okay to have a seeker setting, but if they are mixed together, it will give people a headache. In order to glue this broken thing together, the author stuffed a lot of various magical modifications into it. Just like the funny scene of a cartoon character swimming in the air, it was suddenly followed by the possibility of anti-Newton. A bunch of theories, inexplicably, began to study anti-gravity devices to fly into space. It's like dragon fruit and stinky tofu mixed together. Each has its own unique flavor, but mixed together it becomes a lump of dissimilar stuff, which is disgusting.

Notebook Is it funny? Are you still worried that your household registration will disappear quickly enough?

Heavenly Master is the person who teaches you the karma and teachings. Even though he has not accepted you as his personal successor, you should not be called master, but you should still be called teacher, right? Zhang Zhiwei's "You" is quite smooth. I don't see the protagonist showing any respect for his mentor. This is not good. I suggest you change it.

The protagonist's thinking is stuck in the comprador class, and he uses it for his own purposes without truly grasping the essence of his own power.

This protagonist has taken a totally evil path. More comprehensive than his mother

If you don't know how to write, don't write. Taoist Kung Fu is famous for being upright and peaceful. It can be practiced with mistakes at most. It is amazing, moves slowly and gently, and is not such a crooked way. It's not a martial arts power. What you are doing is completely evil.

Shouldn't the current Golden Light Curse version mean that the Chinese also have their own (Susanoh) Gundam?

In your writing, I feel like there are some missing chapters between each chapter. It jumps too fast and always happens very suddenly.

3 Books at level 1. You should know what this kind of author is like.