The Outcast: My Golden Light Mantra Is Off!

After the ninjutsu and martial arts were all wrong, now there's another Taoist technique that's wrong. What else will be wrong next?

The whole book is truly a hodgepodge. The strange effects of the techniques are great if you delve deeper and explore them; the humor is excellent, and the various interactions are quite anticipated. But why add those random experiments and this weird pose of a seeker of the Dao? If it's an unexpected ability, then focus on writing about its unexpectedness.

Notebook Is this a joke? Or are you afraid your household registration certificate won't expire quickly enough?

The Celestial Master is the one who imparted knowledge and teachings to you. Although he didn't take you as his personal disciple, and you're not called "Master," shouldn't you at least respectfully address him as "Teacher"? You call him "Zhang Zhiwei" quite naturally, but I didn't see any respect from the protagonist for his mentor between the lines. This is not good; I suggest you revise it.

The protagonist's mindset is stuck in the comprador class; he uses others without truly grasping the essence of his own power.

This protagonist is on a completely wicked and crooked path. Even more wicked than the Quanxing sect.

Author, if you can't write, then don't write. Taoist kung fu is known for its orthodoxy and tranquility. At most, you might make a mistake, and at worst, you'd move slowly and steadily, not through such crooked and evil methods. It's not some kind of martial arts or supernatural ability. What you're describing is completely heretical and unorthodox.

Shouldn't the current version of the Golden Light Mantra be about Chinese people having their own (Susanoo) Gundam?

The writing you've done feels like there are missing chapters between each one; the jumps are too fast, and things always seem to happen abruptly.

Three books at Level 1? You should know what kind of author that is, right?