Beginning Longevity with Elixir Refinement

Is it that unlucky author? If so, I will chase him.

I feel that some settings in the book are not as good as copying them directly from ordinary people. After all, readers have preconceived notions. The realms of junior high, middle and high, Qi, spiritual power, etc. Seem to be quite inconsistent. They are not as good as front, middle and back, and spiritual consciousness.

There are some broken sentences, hyphenation, and many typos, which makes it look very confusing.

1. Generally, what exists naturally is called "spiritual energy", while what is transformed through self-cultivation is called "spiritual power". "Qi" generally exists in nature itself, and "power" needs to be cultivated by oneself. Otherwise, the author does not change it, and it will look awkward 2. Change the time unit "hour" to "hour" 3. It is recommended to change "work" to "task", although Although they all express the same meaning, I feel that "task" is more fluent in the fairy tale 4. I have read about 10,000 words. I haven't finished Chapter 3 yet, but I can't read anymore. I feel that the reading is intermittent and not coherent at all. I hope the author can re-read it from the reader's perspective and then correct it. Otherwise, I feel that no matter how good the content and plot are, not many people will read it. 🥵(ꐦ ´͈ ᗨ `͈ )

Something is wrong, 90% out of 10, something is wrong. Your name is very similar to that old eunuch.

You wrote the novel Haoyu Zhenxian, right?

Borrowing precious treasures to push the book, "I will clean up the Tibetan Scripture Pavilion at the beginning, and I will complete the incomplete skills." Mortal flow, Gou Dao flow, IQ will not decrease if IQ is online, the protagonist's magical power refers to ancient magic: a wonderful pen creates a dragon, scattering beans to form an army, dividing the ground to form a river, etc. Interested Taoist friends can take a look. If you are bothering me, please contact me. [Asking mortals to recommend each other's authors]

Is there no spiritual chef in such a large world of cultivating immortals?

This is my first time writing. Please bear with me, readers. You can also leave your comments below.

The plot is good, but the sentences always feel a bit unsmooth.