Beginning Longevity with Elixir Refinement

Is it that unlucky author? If so, I'll follow it.

I feel some of the book's settings wouldn't have been better suited to be directly adopted from *Mortal Cultivation*, since readers often have preconceived notions. The divisions of cultivation realms into beginner, intermediate, and advanced levels, and concepts like Qi perception and spiritual power, seem rather incongruous; a simpler approach, like focusing on the early, intermediate, and advanced stages, or divine sense, would have been preferable.

Some sentences are poorly punctuated, have many typos and misspellings, making them difficult to read.

1. Naturally existing energy is generally called "spiritual energy," while energy cultivated and transformed is called "spiritual power." "Energy" generally exists in nature, while "power" is something that needs to be cultivated. Otherwise, it would look awkward if the author hadn't changed it. 2. The time unit "hour" has been changed to "shichen" (時辰). 3. I suggest changing "work" to "task".

Something's not right, nine out of ten things are wrong. Your name sounds a lot like that old eunuch's.

You wrote the novel "Immortal Haoyu," right?

I'd like to take this opportunity to promote my book, *Starting by Cleaning the Scripture Pavilion, I Completed the Incomplete Cultivation Techniques*. It's a mortal cultivation novel, a survival-oriented story where the protagonist is intelligent and doesn't suffer from low intelligence.

In such a vast world of cultivation, are there no spiritual chefs?

This is my first time writing, so please bear with me. Feel free to leave your comments below.

The plot is good, but the sentences always feel a bit disjointed.