Witch, Fireball and Steam Evil God

​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​ ​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​ Housing 200 chapters of Decay Period, tell me your feelings. Generally speaking, Taogu's story is well written. It is interesting and sweet but not sloppy. It is indeed in line with the style of light novels. It is considered a good novel in the fantasy genre. Nowadays, fantasy novels are in a slump. Taogu is already considered a young adult writer in fantasy novels. But the problems are also obvious and can be divided into main lines and daily problems. First of all, the main line is advanced too fast and there is no foreshadowing. As for the main plots so far, they are all solved as soon as the protagonist goes there. There is no foreshadowing, and there is no character story or strong reason that compels the protagonist to go. It is just that the protagonist wants to solve it for no reason, so he goes there, and then it is solved. There are no twists and turns. The solution is so fast that I can't figure out why the protagonist went there, and then why the protagonist was solved. , The reason is too far-fetched, and at the same time, I feel that the villains are a bit too weak, not even struggling at all, and at least have some conspiracy and conspiracy to resist. Although it is an invincible novel, it does not mean that the villains must be weak. As long as the protagonist is strong enough, the problem with writing the villain that is too weak is that the strength of the protagonist cannot be reflected. What is the strength and how strong it is cannot be reflected. The villain can be made stronger and it can also reflect the invincibility of the protagonist, which is truly invincible. The main line can be paved with more small stories. I think Taogu can refer to Yuantong's works and "Shilipo Sword God" to pave the way for more small stories before pushing forward the big plot. Let the small stories connect the big story and then push the plot. Otherwise, the big plot always feels like it cannot reach the level of climax, and the reason why the protagonist solves the problem is also far-fetched. It is originally a key plot, but it always ends in a hurry without reaching a higher climax. The second problem with the main plot is that the map is too small. The Eastern Continent and the Western Continent are originally very large maps that can describe many cities, not to mention the demi-human race. I could write more plots about evil gods, but it can be said that I only wrote two cities in a hurry. It's over, it's such a waste of material, and there are very few descriptions of evil believers. The main plot says that there are cultists everywhere, but in fact the protagonist has never met a few cultists. The one who looks most like a cultist is the witch at the beginning, and the other cultists have never been seen again. It can describe the plots of some cultists invading villages, making sacrifices, and tempting human beings to fall, etc. This will be rich. The third point is that there is no description of the subsequent impact after the protagonist solves the problem. It was previously described that the empire's fall was due to the ruthless oppression of the capitalists, the ignorant brainwashing of the church, and the turning a blind eye of the royal family. As a result, the protagonist killed the pope and fought a battle in the imperial capital. Everything was fine. The problem of the capitalists inexplicably disappeared, and the problems of the empire suddenly disappeared. The management that was subsequently formed The governance system was idealized to the extreme. The Parliament of Seven replaced the royal family and that was it. The church was changed to the school of life and that was it. It did not purge corrupt people, nor issue any decrees or promulgate laws. It was as if the empire was just a capital, and there were only a few bad guys. Once the bad guys were solved, all problems would be solved. There are also representatives from the colleges and various fields mentioned at the beginning of the novel. Where are they? At the beginning, there was a hermit representing the academy, but there was no movement after that. They just sat and watched so many things happening in the imperial capital without even expressing their opinions? Although Taogu writes a light novel and an invincible novel, since you have described these details, you must follow up and improve them, otherwise it will affect the perception too much. After watching it for a long time, I always felt that zz was written like a child's play. When the queen appeared for a long time and there was nothing related to zz, all the stories were written about Ivy, without any measures for her to handle government affairs and implement reforms. It seems that the central government of the country doesn't care about anything anymore and is now letting things go freely. When writing light novels, you can write less plots, zz, and intrigues, and give the villain more conscience. The plot can also be simpler, but it cannot be completely absent. Otherwise, the senses of the whole novel will be too childish, and it will be written like Andersen's fairy tale. The prince kills the evil dragon and that's it. In terms of daily life, if the protagonist wants to implement technological reforms, it does not need to be carried out entirely by him. It is a bit too "arrogant" for the protagonist to propose various changes, as if people from other worlds are fools. There are academies and various guilds in this world, and there are masters and geniuses. You can let the protagonist come up with some ideas, and then describe some masters in this world, and let them produce various products. This does not hinder the promotion of the main line, as long as the protagonist comes back every now and then to find new changes. There is also the description of the journey. Although I read that Taogu said that the process of rushing was deleted in order to advance the plot, but you can't delete it every time. You can describe a little bit of the customs and customs observed by the protagonist during the journey, as well as the current situation of the people at the bottom, in order to deepen the protagonist's reasons for getting rid of the cultists and promote the main plot. Otherwise, it is just to solve the problem every time, which is a bit too utilitarian. Just like Mr. Clown at the beginning, he died because of the banker's oppression, which added justification for the protagonist to kill the banker. I felt that this paragraph was written very naturally. I felt that it was natural for the protagonist to kill the banker, and the banker's death was well deserved. In general, the problem is that there is too little foreshadowing, the plot is pushed too fast, the description of the background, zz, etc. Is too little and too childish, the villain is too weak, there are too many descriptions around the protagonist, and then the plot description is about a hammer and a broom here and there. This time, something special is suddenly inserted, interrupting the original rhythm, and there is too little description of NPCs. Of course I will give you a big stick and a sweet date, and tell me what Tao Gu wrote well. The plot in the small town plot at the beginning was very well written. The protagonist's unawareness of invincibility and the feeling of passive pretentiousness were well written. The characters were well portrayed. The most classic is the plot of Mr. Clown and his daughter. It is very charming. Although the plot of Witch Winter and the protagonist recognizing each other is a bit sudden, I have to say that there is not so much procrastination and it feels very smooth. There is also the way of dealing with the evil god in the Western Continent. I feel very surprised. I also thought that the protagonist could only solve the evil god or stop the conspiracy of the cultists, but I didn't expect that the evil god was solved from the "source" in the end. I didn't expect this kind of treatment through talking therapy. The idea is very good. The lack of sloppiness in handling the plot is also an advantage, as is the update speed. Compared with the plot advancement and update speed of Big Eyeball Next Door, Taogu is already extremely fast. In short, that's all. Taogu is my favorite author, one of the few that I can read, and the writing inspiration always makes me feel fresh and new. I hope Taogu can make money day by day and become a great god soon!

My reading experience of Taogu's works is roughly this - the beginning is very amazing, and the middle period is still readable, but in the middle and late stages it seems a little weak, as if the author is gradually unable to control the direction of the story. In the early stage, the protagonist is mostly in a "passive pretense" state, which is particularly refreshing in terms of look and feel, and the descriptions of various details are also rich enough. In the middle and late stages, the protagonist begins to actively promote the plot. Because the character's strength is too prominent, the tension of the story decreases - just like in One Punch Man, if Mr. Saitama always takes the initiative, the plot will inevitably lose suspense and twists and turns, and become dull.

1. There are too many female characters, and there are not even a few seconds of male supporting roles from beginning to end. Even if there is, half of the plot will be taken away by female characters. For example, in the case of Mr. Kuo, the head maid has more plot elements than the young master. 2. The development of the relationship between the male and female protagonists is rather inexplicable. This should be attributed to the fact that the author is not very good at writing emotional development plots. It looks like a castle in the air, a kind of fast food with flowers in the moon in the mirror.

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Come on Laotao!

From the mark of the carving to the present, I love reading your book

Peach Blossom is a rich woman in Shanghai, so you don't have to worry about being eunuched because of her poor grades. The previous books have all been completed safely. It seems that the Yokai Illustrated Book with the worst grades just shortened the plot and ended quickly. I quite liked that one, which is a bit of a pity. Each book has a single female protagonist and is more everyday, so it is quite comfortable to read.

Hey, Taogu is a female author, and the protagonist is male. She seems to have a foot fetish. Could it be that the author likes her own feet? 😰

It feels like since the end of the first volume, the author has no outline. He writes about everything he dreams about, and the rest is completely incomprehensible.

According to Taozi's first law of odd-even writing, this should have been of high quality.

My initial impression of the second volume was not good. From the invincible flow and vulgar development in the first volume to the difficult enemies in the second volume, the change in the plot was too abrupt. For someone like me who likes to watch invincible flow and the author's funny and sweet moments from time to time, this change is not in line with my preferences. Of course, the book is written by the author and is an extension of the author's thinking. As a reader, I have no right to ask for anything, but the fate of this book and me seems to end only in the first volume 🙂

The story about the King of Gold is too abstract and I can't understand it at all. You might as well continue writing about daily life, and the main line is to develop the country to fight against the evil god. What the hell, the first volume is the end.

It's so confusing, I feel like I'm writing about my dreams and the plot just doesn't stop. It's going here and there. Don't the protagonists need to rest?

The first part is okay, but the second part is very foggy, and it feels very disconnected from the previous plot. Especially the plot after Crimson made me abandon the book for a while. I really can't stand it anymore. Farewell

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70 Points, V-shaped look and feel, good or even excellent in the early and late stages. However, the style change in the beginning of the Golden City in the middle is too big. The protagonist changes scenes continuously. Almost all the characters familiar to the readers are marginalized. At one time, I wanted to give up.

The corresponding emotion of the electric element is "majesty", and when Lao Sen realized it, he still relied on looking at the witch maid costume. He felt that upgrading might become "dominance"? Tampering with other people's neural electrical signals to directly control others, or even directly brainwash and modify cognition

Brothers, I actually found gold in this pile of poison.

When I read the chapter of King of Gold, I felt so disconnected. I always felt that it was no different from those novels that changed the map. It was no less than suppressing the protagonist in a cool novel.

Don't expose your next novel. If you keep hiding it, you can write well and feel happy. But once you stop hiding it, you won't feel happy at the moment you stop hiding it. On the contrary, your subsequent writing will not be good.

Actually, I drew two tails, but I cut off one wwww

Although I don't like those invincible novels where the protagonist's hidden strength makes people misunderstand, I have to say that since the protagonist revealed his strength, it has not been so good. I feel that this part of the content has not been handled well, and the plot is a bit messy and not very coherent.

Is this book finished? I couldn't stand it after seeing the doomsday world in the second volume. It was really interesting in the early stage, and I could still watch the Golden King part. Then I turned to the spiritual world without knowing how to think about it. The supporting characters created in the past were basically marginalized one after another. There are so many people who write this kind of plot in reverse, but it can't achieve the shocking effect. Moreover, it is really far from the relaxed daily comedy style before. It feels like a pity.

This is a female channel novel, I guess. I've read more than 160 chapters and I'm still falling in love. It feels like the main story is about falling in love and doing something else.

I finished reading it with dozens of chapters left. I didn't understand many parts, and it always felt like it was a reversal for the sake of reversal. For example, where did the old gods come from? As mentioned before, the old gods are not able to recall the memories before they were summoned to this world. The beginning of Sincaro's memory was even a program error code. This is in line with the NPC settings of the game, but according to the final version settings, all the old gods are real. So what happened to the memory of the old god and the error in Sincaro's code? Taogu's daily life and invincible flow are well written, but the setting part is too stream-of-consciousness.

I've read it on Changdu. It's amazing. I've always wanted to read it before.

Add some finesse

Please improve~

Is it over? Look at the level 😰