Nightmare Mansion

The setting is very similar to Embers of the Deep, and the writing is okay, not bad 👍

After reading a few chapters and speculating, I feel that in the future, human beings should enter cyberspace with all their consciousness, and then create a place similar to the Digimon world in cyberspace, and then humans will compete for power in this place. The so-called god is the administrator. The protagonist may be the earliest experimental subject in cyberspace, so when the administrator is vacant, he will directly take over. The evil god may be an AI that has developed to a certain extent.

The protagonist must be mentally ill. He regards his followers as cultists. Sha Dollar, why shouldn't he be the Son of God? I won't watch it anymore. The setting is completely broken

After dozens of chapters, it's just a dull grind.

The pace is a bit slow, and the description is too one-size-fits-all in its attitude towards its believers. In addition to one's own power, the existence of believers is another very useful tool, whether it is to explore the truth or search for power. There is no good or evil in power, it only depends on the user. Since there is no problem with the protagonist's human anchor point, why not use it well, but instead try to get involved with the church through twists and turns? In addition, no matter how stupid a nightmare believer is, they can still select usable people through screening and elimination. This is far more efficient than a nightmare master pretending to be an ordinary person and checking in person. After all, he still has to worry about exposure, and if a believer is exposed, he will be exposed.

I think it's okay, please support me first

The readers read the plot you gave and you changed it again and again. It is very confusing and difficult to fit into the plot (the first plot is very important)

The writing is quite good, but there are some ink stains. The first dozen or so chapters talk too much about setting, but overall it's pretty good.

As in the title, adding adjectives very deliberately will make you look smarter than the one you are imitating 🙂

Well, I pursued the label of "Three Guanzheng". It's just too little, so we need to raise more

This starts a bit like Deep Sea Embers

This book is of good quality. If you stick with it, it may not end up being another Embers of the Deep Sea.

The author's writing is very good, the pace of the story after Chapter 8 is good, and the world view and core selling point (Golden Finger) are also good. Cut off the first seven chapters, starting directly from the first possession. Those settings that no one saw (including the later ones) that were cut off will be stuffed into the main text in small batches. Maybe it can be saved. As for the protagonist's actions and thoughts being different from what the readers expected, it is normal. Readers can guess what the author wrote and no one read the book. This is the smallest problem in my opinion.

This introduction smells like Alice's Mansion 😁, take a look again

Is there any Shennong? The protagonist is the villain evil god? Or a college student?

Blanch! Hitomi? The description in this introduction is a bit like a hotel, and I am inexplicably full of expectations. Let me be healthy