Journey to the West Demon Cultivator: Starting with the Snake Demon

A snake that is 1.6 Meters long and as thick as a thumb... This must mean noodles

Forget it. I have to write some people to find fault with the protagonist when the protagonist is not well developed! It is estimated that either the protagonist was tortured! Either the protagonist pretends to be cool and slaps him in the face! Can't we write that the protagonist is fully developed and then comes out?

As a subject of cultivating immortals, it is well written, but it is not like Journey to the West at all. Not to mention the division of realms, I wish every villain was plotting, all plotting against pdsd. When I see cats and dogs opening and closing their mouths with calculations, I want to point out that Journey to the West is also the bullshit conspiracy theory version of Journey to the West.

I thought it was an evolutionary stream, but it turned out that it was grinding away in the human world. The writing was not straightforward. The narrative had no sense of immersion, and the sentence fragments were like being out of breath. There was no reading coherence. I guess I still think my writing is good. . After reading about ten chapters, I have no interest in reading anymore.

The writing is quite good, but your sentences are broken like this. It's too frequent. How can anyone break sentences like this? It's uncomfortable to read.

Is the introduction wrong? All things clothing? Why do you want to make clothes for all things?

The author has never seen a woman, right? There was a Chen there last week or something, then there were several women from the sect, and now there is a woman in white.

. I don't understand that people who write about Journey to the West and Conferring Gods are not good people, they just become beasts. Have they forgotten their roots or just like to be beasts?

Can the typos in the introduction be corrected? If there are mistakes in the introduction, who dares to look forward to the main text?

Come on, brothers, see you next time. My grades are too bad.

The first point of view of the web article should be the protagonist! , I asked why this book looked weird, and he appeared when he didn't move, which made me think that another passerby appeared. Can't you just change that person's name to the protagonist's name? Whose protagonist keeps switching back and forth between the main perspective and the perspective of a passerby?

So well written! Must reward! ! !

The writing is really good, just follow this rhythm,

Snakes have no hands. When I see a snake that doesn't transform into a dragon, I don't want to look at it.

No, buddy, didn't you check for typos? Why did you suddenly finish the book?

Now that there are not many words and fewer people are reading it, I have to revise it quickly. I will explain why this book is obviously well written, but there is one thing that makes me feel weird.

There are too many typos and wrong sentences, and many places seem incomprehensible. Didn't the author read it through and check it himself after finishing writing?