You Have Truly Made Me Suffer

You added a double penetration plot, you really think your results are too good, right?

Say it in advance, double penetration 🤫

The writing is good, and the plot is interesting, but as a storyteller, what do you mean by spoiling it yourself, because you are afraid that I will be blinded?

Is it interesting? Is it interesting to wear someone who is bound to succeed? Boring

I can see that you want to use the similar cultural souls of these two time travelers to make sweets, and let Lou be the assistant to open cheats. But have you ever thought about how to arrange a woman with modern thinking to adapt to ancient patriarchy? Do you want to be like Queen Dugu and have two saints come to the court? I hope your pen power can shape it

Why are historical time-travel novels almost all about soul travel, and many protagonists still have systems or personal space? It is better to write that the protagonist can travel between modern and ancient times through time and space channels. After all, it is based on Einstein's theory of relativity. It is very interesting to write about the protagonist traveling between modern times and ancient times through time and space channels. This can show the direct collision between modern times and ancient times. There are already many stories about the protagonists rebelling in the early Qing Dynasty, including the Kangxi Dynasty and the Yongzheng Dynasty. It would be interesting to write a book in which the protagonist rebelled between Kublai Khan and Yuan Dynasty in the Yuan Dynasty or Zhu Yuanzhang and Hongwu Year in the Ming Dynasty.

Your introduction should mention double-wearing. Those who want to see it come in and those who don't want to leave. I don't mention it in the introduction, but it pops up in the text. Isn't this looking for scolding?

The author still uses as few Internet terms as possible, which destroys the sense of immersion. Even if you want to use it, be careful not to appear in character dialogue.

I read in the comment section that it is for both men and women, so can this harem still be open? Can this wife still sleep with her? If you don't have these, what else would you call Gao Huan?

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