Xiaoyaoshanjun

It is obvious that the author has considerable literary skills and a certain amount of life experience, and the small details of daily writing are quite good. Unfortunately, there are serious problems at the root of the book. If adjustments and revisions are not made, the performance of the book will definitely not be much better. The soul of a book lies in the creation of the protagonist. A protagonist that readers can accept and appreciate is the primary prerequisite for the success of a book. Unfortunately, the protagonist of this book is first a brainless fool, and then a pervert! The protagonist finds that he has a game panel with various parameters and points. Anyone who is a normal person knows that points are very important and should be used in emergencies. But where is the protagonist? I didn't even fully understand the specific situation of each parameter, so I just added them all to the immortal path that I thought was very important. I didn't even touch the door. How can I cultivate an immortal? Could anyone with any brains do this? Taking this opportunity, the protagonist finally got his wish and was kicked out. It's okay to find a temporary place to stay, but the key is to find a way out. So what does the protagonist do? Worrying about solving the life difficulties of the damselfly family has become the whole life. While having fun with the wife, she encourages the husband to cheer up. Isn't this a psychological abnormality? That's not how gangsters work. If you want to be a pure good person, you have to send your husband away after all. If you don't want to wait and want to play with your wife right away, then you don't have to pretend to encourage your husband. You are a pervert who likes your husband's eyes! As for the case where the husband provided martial arts skills and successfully passed the exam to become a scholar, did you, the protagonist, buy a lottery ticket and immediately win the jackpot? What else could you do without that? Playing tofu for the rest of your life? Then I went on the run and met a few rabbit spirits. The rabbit fur was not completely faded, and they were still having sex with a shemale. This kind of taste would really make even a pervert would be defeated. The author handles the small details of the protagonist's life very well. After all, art comes from life. But if people today are addicted to endless matryoshka dolls, readers will definitely not suffer much. This is a society where normal people are the majority.

Let me tell you, it's really beautiful. The protagonist of this book is concerned with both his character and his work. They are all very experienced and skilled. And this book is very realistic. I especially like reading this kind of realistic novel. Anyone who likes to read historical articles or farming articles can read it.

I just read the first chapter of the second volume, and the review is toxic. First of all, let's talk about the previous part. Here we can praise the author's ability to describe the market very well. Is this a rare advantage of this book? After talking about the advantages, let's talk about the disadvantages. First, the author's plot twists are very blunt, especially at the end of the first volume. The protagonist becomes angry very suddenly. The whole plot is inexplicable and the detonator is forcibly reduced to his wits. Second, does the author have any NTR hobby? However, this is not a shortcoming. It is just that the author encounters a monster again at the beginning of the second volume, a banshee again, and it is the same routine as in the first volume. It seems that he is going to the banshee's cave to eat and drink and then rape the banshee's family, right? Is the author's protagonist unable to do anything without a woman or a succubus? ? ? In summary, you can read it, it's better if you don't use your brain, especially those who like stallion stories. But I'll forget it, Abandon Mark, Chapter 1 of Volume 2. If this book is a eunuch, please leave a message below and I will come back to see how long this book lasts.

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This book is well written. You can see how an ordinary person who is dedicated to immortality grows up step by step. The changes in his mental journey and the setting are not bad. The only shortcoming is that in the first and middle parts, when the protagonist grows up, the psychological changes are faster, which will give people a feeling of moving forward and then backward. However, after reading the whole book, you will feel that this is the change in the mental journey that an ordinary person may experience when he travels through time and pursues immortality. This is the first time I am writing a book review.

The writing is good, but it is also really frustrating. Bullies on the street bully the protagonist, servant Xiaosi bullies the protagonist, roadside black shops bully the protagonist, policemen on patrol bully the protagonist, rich boys bully the protagonist, neighbors look down on the protagonist, even Zhang Luo's relatives look down on the protagonist, the author puts everything I can think of that the protagonist can get in touch with Everyone has written it over and over again. In less than 100,000 words, the protagonist also suffers and tolerates it as long as he can. When he sees the policeman handing over money, when he sees the rich man, he throws the chickens and rabbits on his hands to the dog to eat. When he encounters a black shop, he considers himself unlucky and does not get back the deposit. (The plots I mentioned above are all original texts, and I made up none of them)

I read this book because it was written by Shan Lin. The more I read, the more confused I became. In the early stage, the protagonist was tricked by the living widow. To put it bluntly, he was an adulterer. However, the protagonist was extremely good to the husband of the living widow. He was closer than his biological father. Not only did he persuade him to start a business every day, help him build confidence, help him recover from his illness, but also provided various services, including buying books for him to study, and accompanying him to take the merit examination Then he wrote The author didn't know what he was thinking, but he also tricked this miserable master, allowing a useless person in his thirties who failed to pass the boy's examination to win three yuan in a row in one year, and passed the examination with first place, and then the protagonist cheated and was still just a child student And now it's fine, the protagonist, an adulterer, worked hard and finally became a slave of the miserable master. Whether he lives or dies depends entirely on the moral character of the miserable master. I don't know what he thinks.

And the protagonist's logic is confusing🤪! It all depends on the author's mood! One moment he is humble and petty, one moment he does as he pleases, one moment he is true to himself, one moment he has a mad attack, and the next moment he is selfish! It all depends on the author's mood. Isn't this crazy? You say the protagonist grows up, but he gets sick midway and then changes back again? Is the character a neurotic?

It's extremely poisonous, and I'm not in good health, so I went to add spiritual roots. Rubbish

The protagonist has a high emotional intelligence, speaks well, is hard-working, proactive, and always grateful. He is a successful person in any era! The supporting characters have their own characteristics, some respect the protagonist, and some naturally look down upon the protagonist. The protagonists are all kinds of creatures! The background of the era is also very profound. Ancient feudal society, ordinary people, poor people, powerful landlords, and dandy children. In just a few chapters, a portrait of an ancient market is painted. Of course, when it comes to ancient times, there are inevitable signs of ethical corruption and moral collapse. The author illustrates this point through the relationship between the protagonist and the damselfly! Secondly, this is a martial arts world, so martial arts people kill people in the streets, and the government ignores them. In the end, it is the common people who suffer. This is reflected in the fact that the protagonist is saved by a doctor in a medical clinic after witnessing a fight between martial arts people. The only thing that is more abrupt is the cultivation of immortality. Although the protagonist has spiritual roots but no method of cultivation, the background is currently only the feudal martial arts era, so we have to wait for the subsequent plot development. The second abrupt point is that the protagonist's time-travel performance is too bland, and his acceptance mentality is different from ordinary people. It is very different from the protagonist's personality in many time-travel novels. It feels abrupt when watching it, but it also has a sense of sobriety (after all, I am tired of watching too many diaosi time-travelling). The protagonist's cheats are set just right and are not particularly buggy, which is an excellent point (the cheats of many protagonists in novels now look very awesome, but in fact they are all kinds of tricks, with too many restrictions, and the more buggy the cheats are, the harder it is to write a long story. With such awesome cheats, you can speed through another world directly, and there are all kinds of logical errors, which force your intelligence to be reduced, and you will not use it according to normal people's thinking). The writing of this article is smooth and not procrastinating. The short chapters are appropriately omitted. The development of the plot is clear at a glance. The important and important relationships are well handled so that people will not feel bored. All in all, the biggest highlight of this article is the character of the protagonist, followed by the development of the plot and the portrayal of the group portraits. Later, there may be a description of martial arts cultivating immortality, so I'm just looking forward to it!

I have never seen many people with this kind of personality since I was a child. Maybe this is the best among people.

Whether a person with this kind of personality can succeed is a matter of time.

The protagonist is too strong. I don't mean golden fingers, but character. This kind of character can survive anywhere and live well.

Why did you write that grinding tofu for one day will shorten your life span by one year, and grinding it for two days will shorten your life span by two years. No matter how weak your body is, let alone the systematic cutting of hair and marrow before. Even if you write that grinding tofu for one day will shorten your life span by more than ten days, I will consider you to have written seriously. Logic is confusing and poisonous.

I think it's really poisonous. I don't know where the beauty comes from.

This book does have some minor flaws, but overall it's good. Some people are really too dark to make the point. For example, when you meet the rabbit girl, the twist is abrupt, and when you meet the heroine later, the treatment is weird and completely unlike the protagonist. But there are generally no problems elsewhere, right? Just like at the beginning, some people thought it was strange to add all the spiritual roots. The problem is that so far, in more than two hundred chapters, it can only be added once at the beginning. Later, there are no attribute points that can be freely added, and there is no upgrade. So shouldn't it be added to the most important place? The attributes of an average person are basically 0.7 Or 0.8. Even the bones are 0.2. The internal strength is due to lack of cultivation, and the spiritual root is 0.001. There is a gap of two orders of magnitude. What else can be added to the spiritual root? Later he was kicked out, wandering alone, with average strength, no land, no clan, average appearance, no knowledge of reading and writing, no way to join the army and become immortal, no capital to do business, private land reclamation is prohibited by the government (because the emperor can do whatever he wants throughout the day Most of the time, the weather is good, but the heaven and earth are set to have a balance of yin and yang. The more land is opened, the more good weather will be. If the emperor ascends, the backlash will be greater. Moreover, this is a world of immortals, and the government really has the ability to control whether untouchables secretly open land), and in ancient rural areas, they were xenophobic. Finally, a family is willing to accept the protagonist. If the protagonist doesn't hold back and says nice things, how can he break the situation if he doesn't accept it? It was almost a dead end. As for why many people bully the protagonist, isn't this inevitable? No one really thinks that the countryside is some kind of beautiful scenery and pastoral life, right? Even if the weather is smooth, the government's oppression will turn villagers into unruly people. What's more, the protagonist is a young boy, and there is a woman at home raising three children, as well as an old man and a patient. If you don't bully who will you bully? When away from home, he is even more like "a foot in a car, boat, shop, and a gangster. If he is not guilty, he deserves to be killed." It's perfectly normal to encounter a shady restaurant where people are watching people order food. As for Hu Yuwei, it can be said to be the only breaking point for the protagonist in the early stage. There was no chance to cultivate immortality, so Hu was the only one in his family to study and read, and he had no spare money to go to a private school in his spare time. I'm afraid Hu would have died of illness by the time Hu taught the protagonist that he could take the exam. You can't have the protagonist selling tofu all your life, right? Doesn't it mean that you have to rely on nonsense to gain fame? If you don't persuade Hu to cheer up and work hard, why should the protagonist leave the countryside? Just for the few bucks you spent buying tofu? From the beginning, I expected Hu to cheer up and do well in the exam. Hu is just sick but not incompetent. The protagonist is a person who repays his kindness. What happened to the child who helped Hu a little? Later, the protagonist's children were born in the houses the protagonist married. Obviously, they took more efforts to raise their own children, and they were all brought to the fairy gate. As for saying that the protagonist became Hu's servant, it is even more nonsense, pure nonsense. First, Hu and the protagonist were lucky enough to be a child, then Hu took the exam to become a scholar, and the protagonist went to practice immortality. These are two completely different paths. Cultivation of immortality is much more advanced than taking exams. Later, Hu was admitted as a Jinshi, and the protagonist had to go to the Immortal Gate. Later, Hu served as a high official for three years. At this time, the protagonist, who was in his twenties, was already at the level of a monk in his forties or fifties, and his understanding was incredible, and he was basically invincible in his class. Hu's status is not as good as that of the protagonist, right? He also said that life or death depends on Hu's morality. I doubt whether I have actually read the book. Not to mention the official Hu Yuwei, not even the monks in the Immortal Sect who are at the same level as the protagonist's master can't control the protagonist's life or death. If the protagonist hadn't practiced for only two years at that time, and was inferior to others who had practiced for dozens or even hundreds of years, the protagonist had a murderous intention because he had a sharp weapon. He probably really planned to kill the young monks and wanted to kill the old ones as well. Who controls whose life and death? Moreover, despite the fact that the protagonist only said good things in the early stage, it was because he had no ability at the beginning and the environment was too harsh. Later, whenever the protagonist has something, he will kill and save whenever he wants, and he can do whatever he wants with the main character. Kill people if you want to, even if you have the background; save people if you want to save them, the cost of saving people can't be paid by other monks, but the protagonist can pay it, what is this but Xiaoyao? If you are free and happy, won't your character change with the things you encounter? I have read all the way to Chapter 207. To be honest, except for meeting the bunny girl and the heroine, which are a bit strange to read, there are no other problems. Especially recently, learning thunder method is different from other books. The thunder master asked the protagonist to learn from him in the palace, but there was no book. The protagonist simply listened to other people's morning lessons and memorized the entire book by himself. Then Lei's senior brother felt that the protagonist was stealing lessons but could not drive him away, because the head coach wanted the protagonist to go out only when he felt good about it, and the protagonist would rather not eat, drink, wash, sleep or poop than go out. So the senior brother didn't let everyone endorse the practice of practicing martial arts silently. The protagonist can see the method of luck just by looking at it. Ten thousand times the understanding is so defiant. So this book is quite good so far. Of course, if there is any big thunder behind, you can't stand it anymore and run away. If you still have any questions, you can reply to me and I will reply when I have time. Just don't get confused and talk dirty as soon as you come up.

This book actually has no sticking points. The protagonist was a bit cowardy in the early stage. In fact, it is not cowardice, but the wisdom of survival. Now I really can't stand the kind of person who has no ability and still quarrels with the sky and the earth every day, especially the local dignitaries. I am really not afraid of losing my family.

Infinite praise, infinitely high expectations. Mediocre plot, dirty language. If I hadn't seen so many compliments. If I hadn't pulled that high there was hope. I won't feel sick watching this dirty plot. I won't be disgusted by that shit.

This brushing is too obvious

I understand that the author wants to open a new map and introduce monsters, but the conflict with the character of the protagonist in the previous article is too great. As a person with high emotional intelligence, who understands his own situation and continues to work hard to change the status quo, will the protagonist choose to escape just because he killed a slave, without thinking or even discussing the process? It's really too witty I personally think it would be better if the protagonist were to think about it, and go straight to Mr. Hu for help at night, and take a shortcut in the mountains at night to encounter a wolf eating a rabbit, and the protagonist is forced to get involved. Wouldn't it be better to arrange the plot like this?

This can also go to Sanjiang. The plot is so poorly written that I don't know what it is.

After listening to the first 37 chapters of the Divine Book, I at least have food and grass + the latter part suddenly fell down, what are you doing, please write it well, boss.

I feel that this book has become less readable after killing people and escaping to the mountains to meet rabbits. It lacks the heavy feeling before. Before, it can really be called a realistic novel with a fairy skin. It is not easy to feel life between the lines and arouse emotional resonance. Now the characters are like clay puppets and wood sculptures. The book review area is all rhythmic. Look at this chapter to truly reflect the readers' voices. The active chapter in the past said that after it turned into a cool novel in the later period, there is not much left. The author's problem is that he has a soft ear and cannot stick to his own style every time!

The last few chapters have been very unreasonable. 1. Hu Yu is nothing. It is impossible to worship the examiner as his teacher before the exam. The level of difficulty is equivalent to being the top scorer in a county in the college entrance examination and then becoming a student of the director of the Department of Education or even a minister. 2. As written in the previous article, he knew that he did not do well in the exam, and he was the first among boys and the first among scholars. He hasn't picked up a book in several years. Tian Buli teased him earlier and said that he was not good and that he had a good memory. 3. As soon as the examiner became your master, he arranged to kill someone for you? Or did Hu Yuwei use his teacher's influence to kill his entire family as soon as he became a disciple? This was not the case in ancient times. 4. A private armed company with two thousand people in ancient times has reached this scale. Does the county know the county magistrate? No one says hello in the province? 5. Can you please stop writing about silly people like Xia Xianshan? Wouldn't writing it down lower the quality of the book? Don't talk about getting to this level. Who is like this now? 6. Will the county magistrate give you time to find someone? I treat you so well, but your family still has to invite people from the province to visit? Maybe it's because the previous writing was so good that my expectations were a bit high. It's best to write less about this kind of thing, as it will be very logically flawed.

The writing is good, and it seems interesting from the beginning. The premise is that you don't put yourself into Mr. Hu. If you look at it from another angle, the protagonist plays with other people's wives, beats other people's sons, and other people's sons are willing to call him daddy.

Alas, I don't really want to read the Red Mansion book.

I still feel hurt by the comments. There are always some people who enjoy reading the content and those who don't. But after reading the comments for a long time, I didn't have the desire to click in. I read it out of trust in the name.

The author should go deep into cultivating immortality. I like all the articles about cultivating immortality that the author has written. The later articles about farming can easily become boring.

It fell apart all of a sudden, okay, Zhong Mingsheng is 10,000 times better than the protagonist in terms of female sex, okay, it fell apart every time it started.

Write more about cultivating immortals and martial arts, which are better than Red Mansions