Crest of the Star Scar

The "player" in it is a woman, which is not a big problem, but her character is too "feminine". As a result, people feel that this woman is really annoying. I haven't felt this uncomfortable even in Danmei. Put this aside, everything else is fine.

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I couldn't stand it after reading more than ten chapters. The main body is a human-machine local male protagonist with weak emotions + an old man (a female CP player). After more than ten chapters, the author has thrown in countless main characters with distinctive characteristics, as well as background settings. However, the protagonist is a human-machine character, and there is not much interaction at all. Therefore, I can't remember anything I threw away. After reading more than ten chapters, I remember the original plot of Mercy, the number one female student in CG. The writing style is considered good for online articles, but there are some strange sentence breaks and extra ""s".

It is obviously a good light novel written in a light novel style, but it lacks the most important interaction with the heroine in a light novel, and there are not enough scenes where the protagonist's charm is highlighted, but it is not a group drama. . . . . So who is the target audience for this book? How do you keep people? It didn't feel as attractive to me as the previous book. Although it may be that my taste has changed in the past two or three years. I felt it was bland. There was something worth reading, but it wasn't enough. I have read more than a dozen chapters so far, can anyone tell me where to start which would be more interesting? Of course, the above are all personal feelings.

I read dozens of chapters. The protagonist is actually quite abstract, he just uses seriousness and stereotypes to imitate human beings. . . .

Let me go, the Bathing Goddess breaks the dimensional wall and takes over the book cover, the customized champion is in trouble😡

The biggest problem is that the emotional line is not developed. I wrote a lot of female characters, but they get along with the male characters no differently. I just wrote a little progress (drawing the coat of arms plot) and then cut it immediately. The transition chapter is filled with trivial things, which looks really boring. Maybe it's because I can't write it that I keep avoiding the emotional line. If I really can't write it, I can just write some ambiguous interactions. In fact, the most beautiful thing about the emotional line is the kind that seems to be there but not teasing, hey.

After reading this game for so long, I still find the author's writing angle very interesting. The dialogue between an indigenous protagonist (a reliable adult male) and a player who doesn't know much about the plot and only recognizes his wife (the unreliable bathing goddess Doge) slowly reveals the plot of the original game. It feels much more interesting than a time traveler with a script or system directly describing the script.

I heard that you are the author of The Weakest of the Four Heavenly Kings and The Cold-faced Earl, and I have read both books. The settings are rigorous and the writing is smooth. They are indeed good books. But other than that, after reading these two books, I have the same feeling. Your book is like a light novel, but it is too heavy to read and carries too many things. Not only did you work hard to write it, but so do the readers who read it. A suggestion here is that you should try writing 200 to 300+ chapters to end this story. If this story continues, let it be written as a trilogy. The world structure of the story you wrote is very large. It is a pity to end it after two or three hundred chapters. However, the world is too big, and it is easy to cause reading fatigue if it is always a visual description. It might be better to change the vision or 20 years later, and different protagonists or the original protagonist has a different mentality after growing up.

Is the name changed because Professor Li wants to pursue the harem line openly? (Error)