The Mastermind: Remaking the World Through Dreams

The first thirty chapters (90) have a novel plot and sound logic, and are quite good. Chapters 30 to 50 (75) are a bit cliché, the plot develops too quickly, and the characters switch perspectives too frequently. The revised chapters 50 to 66 (60) have poor plot control, chaotic character relationships and perspectives.

The writing is messy, and the protagonist's character is too weak. The "I'll always help you if you're good, and always stop you if you're bad" mentality is pointless. First, you have to understand that whether they're good or bad, they're all strangers to the protagonist, and even the world itself is unfamiliar to him. So what's the point of the protagonist constantly taking sides?

The writing lacks immersion; the characters feel more like programs than real people. The author really needs to learn from other great writers. Your writing is too stiff. For example, the dream-like confrontation in the room—it's clearly written from your character's perspective, so those narrations like, "It's a pity he wasn't the soldier's superior, so the soldier disobeyed and fired,"…

A recent plot development was too long and dragged out, which made some viewers uncomfortable. I admit that this was because I didn't plan well when I wrote the outline, and I didn't have enough control over the plot, so it was longer than I had planned. I've thought about it for a long time and come up with a few solutions, such as deleting this part of the story and rewriting it.

This theme feels like a perfect match for the mysterious resurgence. Forget about traditional Chinese martial arts, just make it about ghost tamers, with the protagonist standing behind the scenes controlling the supernatural resurgence. That mirror ghost felt a bit sloppy; it wasn't scary enough. Its escape wasn't particularly thrilling; it was just like a martial arts practitioner.

Well, the most important thing about behind-the-scenes stories is that they treat everyone equally to be interesting. If the protagonist is too biased, the plot has no suspense and what's the point? If a good guy and a bad guy appear at the same time, the winner must be the good guy, and that would be the protagonist! But the protagonist in a behind-the-scenes story can't be like that.

I've seen a lot of comments... Calling her a nanny, calling her a saint, saying she didn't kill enough, saying this and that... First of all, the protagonist is a time traveler; he's no longer a psychopath! Aren't normal people willing to help others if they have no vested interests and are in a good mood? If there are vested interests, do they prioritize those interests?

The first 30 chapters made me think you were going to become a new god of behind-the-scenes writing, but you just dragged it out completely. This section from chapter 30 to over 60 was just chaotic and long. It not only disrupted your earlier pacing, but it also made reading tiring for us readers. Plus, it just so happened that you were about to go on sale, so how could it possibly do well?

He used to have a book called Dream Film Company, which had some great ideas about creating dream scripts and the impact of dream energy on reality. You can check it out, author. It's a pity that he abandoned it after a few scripts and stopped writing urban fantasy stories about leading the world to a higher level.

The bad guys are bound to fail; there's no suspense. No wonder they got this result. Was everything really so smooth sailing without any twists and turns? In reality, villains must die, but novels need to be engaging and prevent readers from knowing the plot at a glance.