Pirates: From the Start, I Take Down the Celestial Dragons

The writing is alright, but unfortunately it's another example of a self-created crew member 😅.

It's made clear from the beginning that the protagonist's dream is adventure, sailing big ships, dating busty girls, and doing big things. He's neither a pirate nor a navy officer, and his stance is generally righteous. After all, they were all well-educated people who traveled back in time, and they could never abandon their simple, kind, and empathetic nature.

The first point about Luffy being an adventurer—I've read a lot of fanfiction and it says that line. Did you write this based on fanfiction, or did you watch the anime? It sounds like you just read a fanfiction and wrote it yourself. If you've been following the anime all along, then One Piece is utter garbage, and all pirates are garbage. And the Navy? Lots of garbage in the upper and middle ranks, fewer garbage at the bottom, but most of them are good.

They've recruited three crew members, making four including the originally planned Nami. I didn't see the action being exciting, nor did I see the sassiness. The original characters lacked any highlights, and the original characters, being from eight years earlier than the manga, lacked their original charm. Plus, the protagonist's inexplicable lecherous behavior upon hearing the name Bakura completely killed my desire to continue reading.

In terms of subject matter, it's not a ship-following story; it's set much earlier than Wang Luffy's timeline, features a semi-invincible protagonist, and has multiple female leads. It's worth mentioning that the female characters the author wrote are not stereotypical.

The chapter about acquiring Bakala is extremely off-putting. The protagonist is led by the nose the whole time, while Bakala acts like a scheming green tea, taking advantage of him. In the end, the protagonist even says, "I'll suffer a little loss to get her on board." Even the so-called first kiss feels like he's being manipulated by her.

This is a well-written One Piece novel with very detailed character portrayals and engaging slice-of-life scenes. The creative use of manga-style cover illustrations at the beginning of some chapters is particularly noteworthy. I saw an article where the author was asking for ideas on the protagonist's Devil Fruit for the next book.

You can tell what level someone is just by looking at the comments, which are all pictures.

Nicole Robin, a popular figure on TikTok.

Trebol in the original work was a slug, but in your writing he is like Rain Man. His seawater karate hits him without losing any power, and his Armament Haki only causes him to bleed! How did you write this?!