The Parasitic Immortal

No book on parasitic cultivation of immortality is well written.

For those of you who have come to this world, if you want to cultivate immortality, you should cultivate in a perverted way. All you want to do is have fun. Why don't you try some 'Three Flowers Gathering at the Top'?

The writing is smooth. I personally feel that in terms of setting, I can write more fragments and plots in the normal narrative. After all, although this idea is good, the first famous article and the setting of the writing style of this article are not consistent. I'm quite satisfied with the author's handling of cheats. There is additional information, but it's not like other books that add a little proficiency and can easily pop out and be an eyesore. Come on 🤭

The inspiration should be Sun Zha's parasitic cultivation of immortality, right?

But the problem is that the theme you choose is insects or weird immortality, my friend. Suppose you open a Jianghu vegetable restaurant, but when you go in, they only make Cantonese soup. The problem is that the customers who are attracted in are those who want to eat spicy stir-fried food. What you wrote seems to be just a form, but it still contains very traditional and typical things. You think you wrote well, but do you think you wrote it correctly?

I am a Q reader, maybe you can see it more easily in the Qidian comment area. Author, to be honest, your writing and narrative skills are quite good. There are currently two poisonous points for me: 1. The protagonist went to Qin Xiaodao when he knew that the disaster was enough to threaten his life, and then Qin Xiaodao was killed by the "Chen Zhuiyun" party because of the protagonist. 2. The protagonist uses a hidden weapon without knowing whether Chen Zhuiyun will be defeated by a hidden weapon and will keep his promise. 3. After finding Lin Qing, the protagonist did not immediately take him away to find Lingqiao. After finding Lingqiao again, he failed to solve the life-and-death crisis and blindly exposed himself to death without being saved by his master. This is very frustrating. The protagonist seems to have changed little, but is doing stupid and bad things. You want to write the protagonist as affectionate and righteous, but in my opinion, Qin Xiaodao and Qin Xiaodao are really not that good with him. For the sake of these two, characters like Lin Qingling and Qingqiao are allowed to act on their own? Where do you have the confidence to save so many people? The key to solving these problems is: golden fingers. Don't listen to what you say to be a golden finger, that is something only a great god is qualified to consider. The system is a little more useful. The protagonist can briefly burst out the golden elixir's combat power or have the means to deal with the golden elixir. This can explain why you have the confidence to find someone, why you are not afraid of Chen Zhuiyun's betrayal, and you can also save Lingqiao. You asked the master to come to you immediately after Lingqiao's death, and the protagonist clearly had a chance to save her, but there was no positive feedback in the front. It is completely possible for the protagonist to use the golden finger to glimpse part of the truth and reveal it to the readers, so that the plot of the protagonist not eating French meat will be smooth. Nowadays, in addition to the protagonist, there are also golden fingers. One of them is also the real "master" of the golden elixir. When the golden elixir is at its peak and overhauled, the role of the protagonist's existence has almost disappeared... It is difficult to achieve good results. By the way, I have no idea of ​​changing my number. Don't break this book. If it does, just change your number.

The author's plot and writing style are all very good. But I feel like writing this kind of parasitic cultivating immortality is not weird enough, and it doesn't feel interesting enough. Except for the setting, I feel that what the author wrote is not much different from traditional immortality novels.

The writing is clumsy and difficult to read... Brother, you are writing a novel. Being semi-ancient will only make people feel pretentious and affect reading. There are too many anecdotes and it feels like there is no main line.

It looks pretty good so far. The inspiration should be Sun Zha's parasitic cultivation of immortality?

Instead of writing about Nascent Soul's fight, write about the protagonist's fight?