The Helmsman of Xianmen

I have read more than 20 chapters so far, and the writing is pretty good, but I still have two questions. 1. Is the plot progressing too fast? Zhang Ling has been promoted rapidly from a handyman to an outer door to an inner door. Perhaps judging from the time in the book, this speed is not outrageous. But from a reader's perspective, a big stage has passed in just twenty chapters. If it's the Taoist law of the eight-treasure rice that I like very much, the protagonist seems to be cleaning the toilet at this time. . . And such a short length and such a fast pace will result in insufficient portrayal of other disciples. Such a large foundation-building sect is still a sect after the war. There should be many elites left behind. Couldn't it be the few direct disciples mentioned? Are there no protagonists in other novels who have poor talent but rely on their military exploits to enter the inner sect from the outer sect? Moreover, the image of the disciples of the sect is that they are either experts at fighting among themselves, or they are in harmony with each other. It always feels like there is a lack of fighting spirit from top to bottom. We must know that authority established in the flames of war is the strongest. Otherwise, why would Qi Xiu, the leader of the clan, want Gu Tan to lead the war? And none of the inner and outer disciples who established authority during the war had any objections to Zhang Ling's rapid promotion? 2. Will the protagonist's character be a bit conflicting? A person who can do good business and is a brother to so many shopkeepers, not to mention cunning and cunning, is also good at dancing and tactful in dealing with things. He is actually a righteous Haechi native? And to be honest, Zhang Ling's smoothness was not well written. On the contrary, I feel that the people who are his brothers are more diplomatic, but these people feel too kind and not treacherous enough. You can take a look at the character of Niu Guizi in the original "Chong Ming Xian Zong"/current "Zheng Tu". Those people don't need to be as bad as Niu Guizi, but they should not be portrayed as good people with the label of "smooth profiteers". Returning to the protagonist's character design, I personally feel that based on the protagonist's previous experience, joining the gang of "four people whose treacherous laughter rang out simultaneously in the secret room" (Chapter 564 of The Master's Road) is very realistic and interesting. In other words, judging from the previous protagonist's experience, it would be better for the protagonist to become Liu Guang, but based on his natal setting, it would be more appropriate to become a criminal sword. In general, it is still a problem of characterization. The protagonist's smooth sailing makes his image characteristics difficult to impress, which also weakens the image portrayal of other supporting characters. It feels like everyone is revolving around the protagonist. Qi Xiu's control of animals for surveillance does have the feeling of a big brother watching you, like the leader Qi Xiu, but his level of "slickness" in this book is not enough. As for the supporting characters, such as Zhan Yuanpeng, Lin Ping'er, Niu Shengnan, Xiao Mei, etc., I personally feel that they are a bit stereotyped and their characteristics are not distinctive enough. Of course, the above are just my feelings after reading more than 20 chapters. I wonder if the characters will be more distinct when the amount of words increases (doesn't your chapter have a lot of words? More than 20 chapters feel comparable to others' 40 chapters).

Dear readers, this book is newly released. If you are lucky enough to read this book, please support it! There are still many shortcomings in this book. If you find any, please give me some advice and corrections. As the saying goes, a thousand people have a thousand faces. When I see your opinions and corrections, I will try my best to correct them. I hope I can grow together with everyone! Due to practical reasons, the update may not be as big as those of great masters or full-timers, but I will try my best to achieve four thousand a day. Thanks again!

It seems that he is preparing to enter the palace, hey

It's so exciting, I read it word by word

Xuanxuan

Lasted for more than three chapters hahh

Did everyone feel the same when reading it?

I saw the latest, and the writing is getting better and better. It feels a bit like being in charge. Details and characters gradually emerged

Why don't you update it? It's very well written, so go ahead and invest!

Come on, don't be a first-class person 🙂

One chapter updated a day is too little! Can you update it more?

How about changing the name of the sect? Qixiu is in Qixuanmen. If there is no inheritance story, how about changing it to Bai Chumen 😁