Starting from a Carp and Becoming a Dragon God

Although it is not a cool novel, it suits my taste very well It is not a cool novel, so one or two chapters a day seems a bit bland It would be better if it were four or five chapters a day.

The rhythm is okay, and reading it gave me a feeling of being a blessed heavenly official. There is still a market for this kind of rhythm. There is no need to enter the traditional Xianxia fight and kill. Rhythm pattern.

He said that he wanted to break through to the ninth level. It was both about opening up a business path and also about opportunities. But in the end, he still failed to break through to the ninth level 😅. Breaking through to the ninth level is so difficult, how much harder will it be to follow up? He said that he wanted to be a swordsman, but his mind is not in tune every day. Doesn't a swordsman need to practice swordsmanship? The one who cultivates must be the fish demon fairy named "Jian" 🤔

First of all, the system is too vague. It always talks about the ninth level, but which ninth level is vague, and the introduction to past lives is also vague. Secondly, the world view is unclear. Is it a cosmological view of immortality and all realms, or a heavenly ascension view similar to that of Xianhu? Personally, I prefer the Xianhu cosmology because it can lead to the existence of other ancestors in the future, and the time concept of long-lived species is different from that of short-lived species, so it is not used as a backer. Also, if the follow-up is dragon transformation, the focus in the early stage should be on blood. Since it comes to returning to ancestors, it can be changed from fish to fish-dragon or other dragon veins. It always emphasizes the feeling of practicing law and is inconsistent with the title of the introduction.

It was fine at first, but later on it became more and more complicated. Isn't it tiring to practice so many things? There is no priority. And I also like to participate in big events. I don't understand how things that concern the world can be influenced by a person who has only taken three or four steps on the path of spiritual practice. It's not enough without you.

All I can say is that the protagonist is the protagonist. Before I graduated from kindergarten, I started worrying about the situation in the Middle East.

The world this book is written in starts from the Zhongqian World, and the pace is relatively slow. Everything mentioned in it about becoming an immortal refers to cultivating to the fifth level and living in a blessed state. It is also the standard for ascension in the ordinary world. As a traditional Xianxia, ​​the author bought a lot of Taoist scriptures to read, and there are photos in the Easter egg chapters. According to the way it is written in the book, it is read into it. At the same time, various chapter reviews said that the author read too many books and really wanted to teach us, and wrote too many different legal principles. I think this depends on personal taste. In various things, the plot of enlightenment through previous accumulation and reading books seems to me like research on a classic mathematical problem.         ，，，，，，，          ， After going through this incident, you can gain 500 million experience points and become a top player, which is not available here. The protagonist majors in swordsmanship, Tai Chi, and fine formations. These three items attract me the most. Although I was initially attracted by the dragon and sword, the formation is really good.          ，，，， There are other uses, but the biggest impression is this one. Other uses for paying students, calming the mind, etc. Are all side effects. Let's talk about it after reading it. I would say that the biggest difference between traditional Xianxia and others is that everything can be solved. There is nothing that cannot be solved based on the principles of the Dharma. It depends on how powerful your opponent is and whether you have the corresponding understanding or opportunity.         ， For example, the protagonist's family in the opening scene brings blessings to the marriage and celebrates its consummation. His mother's natal family gave birth to a child.         ，， If you get this seal, it will be difficult for you to improve your cultivation, or you will not be able to do important things in human relations. It will be disgusting to look at.         ，，'''' Finally, there are too few authors. I don't usually do Shennong, so I have to see how to gain popularity and motivate the authors. It's just the Deacon that was fully booked, which is really too little. If I don't write a traditional fairy tale with 3 million words, I usually won't start it.

The protagonist is like a second-rate, not like a practitioner, just a low-level loser, pretending to be a big boss who cares about everything about the family and the country, and cares about his own practice. According to the book, the protagonist's practice is passable, but when it is written, it feels like this. In fact, the protagonist is indeed not good. After you have given birth, you should seize, search for, and create opportunities to work hard to improve your practice. You can also do other things by the way. As for the protagonist, he plans to meet the standards in the final time specified in the blessed land and not be thrown out of the blessed land. His father is not forcing him. He is also planning to hang around again and break through at the last moment. This makes me see the home He is a naughty kid, not to mention how smart he is, but he is obviously pretty good, but he just doesn't study well. He writes like a first-grade student, but he is obviously already in the fourth grade. He should be sensible at this age. He has talked a lot about the truth and beaten it, but he can't make progress, leaving you helpless. I also follow He said that everyone should make the best use of their talents. You don't have to be better than others. I feel that your protagonist here is a naughty child, but he is a reborn person. This is more hateful than a naughty child. If you don't work hard to improve yourself, you have to rely on yourself for many things. With this as the main line, doing other things by the way is incidental.

The setting of "Marriage with Happy Carp" is such a good one, why do you want to write about a bad swordsman who is incompatible with his own attributes?

1. It is difficult to practice swordsmanship with a carp species, and the gimmick of a carp transforming into a dragon is written in the same old style of swordsmanship 2. The character setting is too difficult and not likable at all. The protagonist is an indigenous reborn 🙂 + rebirth makes him feel good about himself. He talks down to his parents and above to his elders of the same race. Don't ask why I still pretend after receiving the benefits. If you ask, it is the power of rebirth. I will pay you back a hundred times in the future.

As shown in the picture.

870,000 Words, at least 400,000 words, have nothing to do with the main character. I read 200 of them right away. The main character is not even in the eighth level yet. He bangs a hoe here and there every day. He is indecisive in returning sword cultivation and has no opinion at all. He keeps clamoring for practice every day but ends up not practicing at all. The plot of the two hundred chapters of practice. I can't even come up with a thousand words and I keep practicing my skills. I don't concentrate on this practice and that practice. I'm laughing to death. Moreover, the level of combat power collapse is blurred. According to the book, fifth level is equivalent to immortality. However, a fish who has just entered the Taoist realm has an immortal attack. In front of the protagonist, his realm is like paper.

If it's too dry or too dull, it just piles up settings, as if all the exercises in the world are given to you, and the training is also automatically deduced by computer software.

First of all, it must be affirmed that the author has something to say, but it is obvious that the setting is too complicated, with too many descriptions, and takes up a lot of space. Readers actually don't care about the setting, but more about the achievements of your cultivation. But it is obvious that the protagonist's level is too low now, there is only one killing move, and the blue bar time is too long In addition, the setting and performance of the protagonist are very disharmonious. He is obviously a swordsman, but he is not smooth at all, not to mention the writing is generous and open-minded. On the contrary, it seems narrow and restrictive. This kind of disharmony greatly affects the reader's reading experience. I have also seen more than one reader mention it in the book review area, but the author still has the same old habits. In short, the setting is too complicated, the main plot lacks a sense of gain, and the protagonist's character is not clear. These are the three most important aspects that restrict the performance of this book. I hope the author can make improvements. You can't finish a book without any progress and improvement directions.

I personally think that the most head-scratching part of this book is the character of the protagonist. A swordsman who practiced the two swords of killing in the previous life should be a decisive person in killing, but the reincarnation of Xiyu in this life has become indecisive; secondly, the protagonist does not have any common sense taboos about cultivation in this life, and always follows the methods of the previous life. He and his father are very different and do not understand each other. They cannot talk about anything and have to be wary of each other. They have to practice preaching and preaching!

In other words, there are too many supporting roles, regardless of priority. Try to write as many protagonists as possible. Also, is your time in the world of immortality so valuable? It depends on the sky. If you can't write fighting scenes, then you can write more about cultivation.

From the time the limited exemption notice appeared, the content has been repeated and broken. Is someone forcing you to limit the exemption?

The main plot is unclear, the protagonist is nagging, and the rhythm is a bit off, but the author's cultural heritage is still very strong, and the writing is more everyday.

I've seen Chapter 10, but I haven't seen the main plot. You haven't seen it yet when you wrote Hualong, and you kept pushing back on progress when you wrote Sword Cultivator. I looked through the comments and found that they said it was chapter 80 and it hadn't broken through to level 9 yet. Why can't it be so good?

I finished reading this book for free, which focuses on a novel world view, but it is completely incomparable to Shennong Daojun's book which also focuses on the world view. Look at how they write it, with clear priorities and decisive products in one chapter. The key point is that it doesn't feel watery. This book is free and feels that watery (it may be because the writing is not good, Even if you don't have that level, it's reasonable to have poor grades. The character is said to be reborn, but the separation is obvious when doing things like a child; the supporting characters are flat, and they obviously feel like they are just tools to serve the plot; the realm has improved, and the ink is terrible. Is my writing style confident enough to write that kind of slow prose? (Looking at the twenty years of the Republic of China, people can only write slowly with the writing style of physical books, but the plot is over-the-top and decisive. One volume is written in one volume, and the content is very informative and the plot is attractive); the only advantage is the world view, but the previous ink-printed plot The supporting roles of love, tool man, fragmented characters, and strong water-feeling techniques and realm descriptions are no longer balanced. If you want to write a setting article, check out the Extraordinary Genealogy (the main setting, but it is better-looking than yours, and the setting is also more enjoyable than yours, without the water-feeling). I feel that the author does not have a clear understanding of his own writing style: the chapters I read in this book are written in a novice way, but the world view and settings are a little obscured, but the author thinks it is very powerful, and he has to write about everything, and he cannot control it at all, so the separation of priorities is obvious.

It's scratchy, sticky, and too many parents think it's a soap opera Siheyuan story.

The rhythm is a bit chaotic. I don't know how you feel. Please leave a message. I feel unsure and feel more and more afraid to write.

Protagonist - Yu Shuyang: Xiyu bloodline (currently awakening the dragon and carp bloodline) was a human race in the Fuli world in his previous life. He learned swordsmanship from the Killer Sect. He made two swords as a sacrifice - the Jiamu Killing Sword and the Yimu Shengjian. He was entrusted by the Master Longhu to resolve the deaths of three generations of enemies. He was refined by the soul awakening ceremony and reincarnated in the Eastern World.                  （，）， Possess a magic weapon: Hundred Scales Zhanyuan Sword - a seven-turn divine weapon sword. The sword is as big as a collar and has a metal color. It is made of 365 kinds of scales, five water essences, metal stones, and twelve earthly branches. It contains the transformation of dragon and snake. It can be used externally with the secret method of Chen Sui. It moves like wind and thunder, and is still like sinking abyss. ps: There is a dragon god in the Bailin Zhanyuan Sword, which is the Liangyi Killing Sword. Five Zhi Yao Cao Sword - a three-turn sharp weapon sword. The blade is one palm long and two fingers wide. It is made of translucent chicken oil yellow agate stone and looks like Ganoderma lucidum. It is made of five elements and six colors of Ganoderma lucidum, Yao Cao Ling Tea, spiritual lead and spiritual mercury. ps: The Wuzhi Yao Herbal Sword is refined with the yin and yang Wu Ji Earth Evil Qi, imitating the secret techniques of Xinghuang Banner and Dao Gui. It can automatically protect the body after refining the earth energy, and can also be used to heal wounds with the Wuzhi Yao Herbal Qi. It is an Eryi Shengjian. Tianyi True Water Orb - The orb made from the fish stone left behind after the death of the happy fish. A drop of Tianyi True Water is injected into it, and it is refined with the laws of heaven and earth to connect with the power of the water virtues of the stars. ps: At present, the three levels of ritual prohibition can be used to incite nectar spiritual water twice a day. Each time, one hundred jars of ordinary water can be infused, and each jar can hold one thousand kilograms of water. Xuanming True Water Orb - It is also made from fish stone, and a drop of Xuanming True Water is injected into it. ps: At present, the first level of ritual prohibition is practiced, and the earth's turbid yin water is enlightened once a day. There are also one hundred tanks, each tank contains one thousand kilograms of water. Dragon and Carp Ten Thousand Methods Bell: It is carved from the finest dansha stone, imitating the style of the Sanqing Bell. The handle of the bell is changed to the true shape of a dragon and carp, with the head facing down and the tail always up. The top of the bell body is engraved with a five-petal plum blossom, and the dragon mantras are engraved in sequence - pray for rain, attract wind, return wind, support wind, and face the wind. The outer wall of the bell body is carved from the north to the south - the breath of the nine-yang mysterious water turtle and the eighteen disks of the yin-fire black snake. The inner wall is carved from the east to the west - the Taibai ax and the Pleiades flag. The Eight Winds Mantra is engraved on the outside of the bell group, and the corresponding seven wind gods are engraved on the inside. The bell tongue is engraved with Judge Xie on the front, and Gong Gou Chen is engraved on the back. The quiet natural wind is injected into the tongue. ps: The dragon and carp are refined from the Ten Thousand Methods of the Earth, the twenty-one law of the law is refined, and the dragon and carp are made by injecting the luck and clan spirit of the dragon and carp into the sacrifice. Master the spells: Tianfeng Method - Hum and Ha two spells to dispel the soul.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                       ​He curses the stomach and intestines to produce thunder, which can make the stomach full       He who curses the ears and clears the sound                                                                                                              Xuanwu Water Technique - The Xuanwu Turtle Book can calculate the exercises, ask the Four Saints of the North, and the Xuanwu Seven Constellations Star God.                      ，，，                     ，，                     ，，， Kendo: One sword, a grass python, transforms into the spring breeze, one sword, the grass python transforms into the spring breeze, one sword, the grass python transforms into a candle dragon, and one sword, the grass python transforms into a candle dragon sword form. A sword of grass python transforms into the spring breeze: the Hundred Scales Cutting Yuan Sword binds the sword energy, and practices the one-word long snake formation. The sword energy gathers with the formation to form the grass python's true form, which is generated by the three sword intentions of spring time, spring breeze and spring breeze, and the sword and magic sword merge. Spring Time Zhouguang Sword Intention: Spring Wind, Spring Rain, Spring Life, Spring Death, and Spring Time are five sword intentions that merge into one, affecting the laws of Zhouguang. The Hundred Scale Yuan Yuan Sword can be cut out in conjunction, which can cut off the lifespan and kill fate. It is the method of the magic sword. A grass python turns into a candle dragon: the white-scale Yuan-Zhan sword binds the sword energy, and practices a long snake formation. The sword energy gathers with the formation to form a grass python, but the snake head has one more vertical eye, and the snake tail becomes a scaleless meat tail. The five sword intentions of spring breeze, spring time, spring life, spring death, and spring time are unified, affecting the law of universe light. Spring time candle dragon sword phase: Spring breeze, spring hour, spring birth, spring death, and spring rain combine into one, affecting the law of universe light, turning into a candle dragon sword phase. This candle dragon in the form of a sword can kill Shou Yuan in an instant.

Several heroes said they wouldn't cut it, but they still didn't care. Can't you send one out every now and then?

Very talented, but unfortunately the story is too lacking. You have to set up suspense and whet your appetite so that readers will want to read it. In short, you have to dig holes and then fill them, so that readers will be happy.

The setting, power system, names of exercises, rituals, etc. Are all well designed, but the author wants to give all the good things to the protagonist. The power system has no priority, and the proportion of the story is less.

Usually, those who are said not to be able to do it will definitely know how to do it, and they will definitely go to the palace.

The fish walking in the blessed land can actually recall Bikini Castle Beach in my mind

It doesn't matter if I cut it, it's long enough anyway, and I still have 155 chapters to read. I haven't read it since I entered the Underworld. I feel like it's good to start a new book 🙂

There are too many typos, as well as bad sentences, so many that I don't even want to say them after I see them... Can't the author read it again after he has finished writing?