Comprehensive Martial Arts: He Was in the Jin Kingdom, but He Returned to the Southern Song Dynasty

It was only a few years ago that I enjoyed reading this book so much, and I regained the feeling I had when reading a book. That sense of anticipation of chasing a book. The martial arts system is stitched together in various ways under the name of Jin Yong Gu Long, and is internally its own system. Familiar name, different kernel settings. The character design is unique and the writing is very powerful. The stars are shining brightly when the sentences are read, and the plots are intertwined. I really like the scene where the protagonist plays chess with the little poisonous creature. The little poisonous creature is well written and doesn't steal too much of the protagonist's limelight. As long as you don't stop, you will keep chasing.

I could still watch it when I was fighting out of the Kingdom of Jin, but I couldn't watch it after that. Too much of what I write is useless. You may have your own thoughts and rhythms, but people nowadays don't have the patience. The story is too slow to follow.

The second chapter is a bit toxic. The protagonist is warming himself by the fire in Po Tao Temple. Qiu Chuji avoids the snow and enters. The protagonist says, "Taoist Master, come and warm the fire." The protagonist and Qiu Chuji don't know each other, and neither does Jilaishu. The normal development should be that the protagonist is a weak young beggar with food and money around him. When he sees a strange Taoist entering the Taoist temple, he will be stunned at first, and then he can't help but become alert. Then the character and character of the protagonist and Qiu Chuji are determined based on their personality, and the dialogue is determined by their personality, such as whether to remain silent or take the initiative to say hello. As a Taoist who travels alone in the world, Qiu Chuji, even if he is not a social cow, is still very knowledgeable and good at communication. When he sees a weak and vigilant beggar, he can first say hello to appease the person and avoid unnecessary hostility. For example, "I have met a little friend, and I want to use the land to avoid the snow. I hope my friend is not weird." The protagonist can then come to his senses. As a time traveler, his wording should have some modern characteristics. At the same time, because he has no experience in dealing with relevant social situations, his answer will be delayed due to thinking and hesitation. In order to make up for the impoliteness caused by this delay, he will use repetitive words to emphasize his attitude. For example, "Um... It's not weird or not, Taoist priest, please feel free to do so." I don't know what the author's mentality was that made Qiu Chuji refuse the protagonist's invitation to warm up by the fire. A reasonable guess is that he wanted to maintain a safe social distance to prevent the little beggar, the protagonist, from feeling uncomfortable. Following the development of this plot, you can write: "The protagonist observed for a moment and found that the Taoist priest seemed to have no ill intentions. He was sitting alone in a cold corner, with his beard and hair trembling slightly in the draft. It was a bit unbearable to watch. After hesitating, the protagonist still said, "Taoist Priest, why don't you come here to warm yourself by the fire? "". Forget it, let's just hide and speculate when writing character dialogues in the future. Just one dialogue exposed the cognitive deficiencies in related aspects. It is hard to imagine that an author who does not even have a foundation in this aspect can write a work that does not make people constantly alert to common sense.

I want to see the protagonist defeat the whole fucking world on his own!

It would be great if your text was as exciting as the introduction.

When I read the first 16 chapters, I felt that this book was just like cooking even if it wasn't Buddha Jumping Over the Wall. Until Chapter 17, this should have been the first small peak. The protagonist acted secretly because he was not strong enough. Run, push away a bunch of people in their base camp and run to check their injuries to see how they were beaten to death. After being scolded by the housekeeper, he was so stunned that he killed the housekeeper with his backhand. Seeing that the servants next to him were frightened, he shouted righteously that the housekeeper also told you to die. He didn't think about you, and the literary youth got up inexplicably. You are still in their base camp. Are you so crazy? The whole thing feels like it was written by two people, just like the strawberry tofu with the name of boiled cabbage. It's not that it's inedible, it's just that the gap is too big.

Some explanations of the introduction, for some friends who don't understand (The first bracket corresponds to the original work, and the second bracket corresponds to the meme. There are some that I can't recognize. Let's see if anyone knows and can give me a guide) "The Tiger Soul Demon Sword commands the world; if the Sky Crystal is not available, who can compete with it." (The Mysterious Weapon Xuanqi) (Since it is the Tiger Soul Sword and the Sky Crystal Sword, it is naturally the God's Soul Sword. Bing Xuanqi is the original work of Shenbing Xiaojiang that I watched when I was a child. But this sentence itself is from Neta's self-reliance on heaven and dragon slaying. "The supreme king of martial arts, the sword slays the dragon, and commands the world. No one dares to disobey, and no one can fight against him if he relies on heaven." Among the gifts given to Fulian, the sword of the brave (As a side note, the buried Fulian is really beautiful, even in the people's view of history, the brave is not a profession, as long as there is strength and courage, everyone is a brave, super good-looking, if you haven't seen it, I suggest you watch it)) "The same move cannot be used a second time against Star Shift." (Dragon and the Eight Parts) (neta from Saint Seiya, the same move The style cannot be effective against the saints for the second time! ) "The world's martial arts came from Shaolin, which means that the seventy-two stunts of Shaolin are the prototype of all martial arts throughout the ages. It is natural that a child cannot be defeated by his relatives." I don't know without neta, I didn't see it...) "The Vajra Demon Circle is a stunning secret technique performed by three eminent monks, also known as 'Sakyamuni's Wonder'." (The Legend of Heaven and Slaying the Dragon) (It feels like a sea tiger, a shocking secret technique, amazing to the world, and what immediately comes to mind is shocking wisdom) "Little Li Feidao is just a name given by people in the world. It is said that Li Xunhuan only cares about practicing. Kung Fu, claiming to be the 'Serious Flying Sword'." (Sentimental Swordsman's Ruthless Sword) (Serious Series, One Punch Man?) "The fifteenth sword of the Thirteen Deadly Swords is said to be a sword that can see the dead line and dead point of all things." )(But having said that, the fifteenth sword does seem to have such an effect)) "Fucking innate body-breaking invisible sword energy, I order you, you give me a breakthrough!" (Gentle sword) (I guess this neta is Ye Haihu, because the tone is so similar) "The Khitan tribe has a battle legend that has been passed down for thousands of years, a super Khitan with a calm heart... " (The Eight Tribes of the Dragon? Khitan, martial arts, I can only think of Xiao Feng) (neta's is the Dragon Ball, legend has it that a super warrior, a Super Saiyan, will appear every thousand years!) "I will destroy all the Taoist demons before they appear." (The Legend of Two Dragons of the Tang Dynasty) (neta's is the Magic Circle, I will destroy all the witches before they are born."

Gua! I want to see the update!

The flesh-and-blood characters created in the original work can be immediately killed in your book after three or four chapters. Is there anything you can do to complete the original work? Have you really molded people like Ximen Chuixue, Zhuge Zheng and me into shape here? Can Mu Taoist really stand at such a height? I have always been talking about great truths, and every few chapters I have to talk about why evil cannot defeat good. But unless it is your protagonist, which decent person can defeat evil? If the protagonist is pretty good, then that's it. Why do characters like Ximen and Zhuge have to be portrayed as such protagonists for you? I can't wait to let the character I can't control end, and my control of the plot is simply terrible. I came to see Tongren not to see Mu Taoist, but to see people like Ximen Chuixue, Zhuge Zhengwo, and Qingwu. Ximen Chui Xue Ling appeared in four chapters and ended immediately. Can you write some tall clichés to cover up your poor portrayal of Ximen? If it's not the original work, what do you think it is? Is there any person in the Battle of Huashan who has been better portrayed by you? If you have a little bit of shaping here, you won't be able to participate, and if you don't have a bit of shaping, you'll be given away one by one. If it weren't for the original works, would anyone be moved by the death of Ximen Chuixue and Zhuge Zhengwo in your novel? But precisely because of the positioning of the original work, what you are writing now is more like a farce. In your case, justice cannot be served without a protagonist, but the likability of your protagonist cannot be compared to people like Ximen and Zhuge. Of course we want your story to be well written and your original protagonist to be well created, but the charming characters in the original work are the driving force that attracts me to click in. Otherwise, why would I come to see the fanfic? On the basis of shaping these people, you can flesh out other characters and no one will say anything about you. But are they shaped well? Are Ximen, Zhuge and the others really exciting at the core of the character Mu Daoren? Why should they be used as a stepping stone for Taoists? How can your evil prevail over good? Where are your axioms? I even have some doubts about whether you think highly of these characters. You always seem to talk about the truth. Once you talk about the truth, others will come one after another. Going too far? I think it's a soul-moving method. The pacing is poor, the plot is outrageous, you don't respect the original characters, and you ignore the original positioning. This fanfic of yours is not very competent. Don't tell me that you are satisfied with the current development, and don't think that others can't understand your hard work. As a martial arts fan, it's not up to par.

Don't say anything else, just this introduction, the author, you are going against the readers, because you hate too much traffic, you are stubborn, why don't you write it simply and clearly, and you have to be mysterious, it is very interesting.

Very interesting introduction and world view, easy to read, and the writing is also good

As I expected, it turned out to be a eunuch. I said that according to the way you write it, the combat power will definitely collapse, the character design will definitely be OOC, and in the end it will definitely become a eunuch or a mess.

In the original work, Dong Tianbao is unscrupulous and has no dignity. He can slap himself in front of the eunuch. Are you telling me that such a person would promise Ximen Chuixue not to use a sword?

Bad again? Do you have no outline or something? You're writing a bad book.

What the hell did you write in this latest chapter? What you wrote is not as good as the previous plot of borrowing spells to fight back against Taoist Taoist Mu. Previously, Zhuge Zheng and I were just the ones using Taoist Taoist as a cushion. Then in the latest chapter, the protagonist saw Ding Peng and others and started to make peace. It was fun for me to watch. They were just pretending to face Mu Taoist before because they were not the protagonist Taoist Taomu. Now it seems that the helpers are almost dead. It is really possible that they gave in. One day is up Late to do big things, Zhuge Zheng and the others knew they would die but still went for justice. The protagonist saw that he was about to die and started to be smart. He worked on big things all day long, but it turned out to be Yuan Shao.

The female protagonists really don't have to be Yueyue Lianxing. At least seven out of ten books about mixed martial arts have these two female protagonists. The repetition rate is like Gwen in American comics. I'm really tired of reading it.

There is really a lot of nonsense, a lot of meaningless speculations. If you want to write that the protagonist is as smart as a demon, you don't have to write like this! Just the opposite effect

The fake Wenqing taste is too strong and a bit mixed. The author wants to write about three good young people, I and You refer to the book, I Want to Hold the Moon in the Nine Heavens, in which the protagonist can be called a model of virtue. The author wants to write about the protagonist's wisdom, but highlights that he is an imbecile who wants to use the prophet to deceive and kidnap the plot of the previous life novel. He wants to write a different kind of mixed martial arts. This is the biggest bug. A group of martial arts people messing around all day without interfering with the original plot is a mess. It can be seen that the author is aware of these problems, so the plot will also be changed later, and the protagonist's wisdom can also be reflected in the self-created skills. But the protagonist is both worldly and arrogant, and his words and deeds highlight a blind belief, which can easily wipe out the artistic conception and fresh and capable writing style. The result is a very fragmented and awkward look. If the following article is to reflect the growth of the protagonist, one thing that must be discarded is the protagonist's arrogance as a prophet. Otherwise, when I meet a key character in the plot, I will just talk about it, and it will be obvious to my face that I am the author. Secondly, there is no need to show off the literary and youthful atmosphere at all times. The plot should be fought and killed, but exaggerating it too much will only make people feel artificial. The protagonist's thoughts about martial arts actually reflect the author's, presented bit by bit. The plot form is reflected in the cognitive growth and progress of the protagonist. The description of the environment is concise and cruel, poisonous schemes are used in every possible way, and the villain does not force his wits. Overall impression: The protagonist lacks a sense of crisis, and the environment and plot are too contradictory. A little suggestion: If you want to describe the protagonist's wisdom, if you are not good at planning, write less. You can describe more about the tricks and scheming during the struggle. And, if you don't like it, don't spray it. If you don't like it, don't spray it. If you don't like it, don't spray it.

It was later that I discovered that the protagonist was just an unknown thing. First, Rui Pingqiu Chuji was self-righteous and wishful thinking, without looking at his own virtues. Then, later, the Nine Yin Manual could only be used by one person. He was so anxious that he turned into a clown. He didn't know what he was talking about!

I was too tired to read and kept preaching. Forcibly export your own values ​​​​in large sections. I don't know what to think. I obviously like the setting. Not happy at all. The more I read other novels, the more I read Snow Spirit. Even staying up late. This book made me sleepy. It doesn't mean that writing novels is just for fun. Let you write a simple essay. But you can put your own spin on the story. Like in the snow. There is some white space. Let me realize it myself. Instead of forcing it on me like in class. In fact, I write this because I love deeply. Otherwise, I would just leave. What a shame.

Every chapter is pretty much the same. Che Zhugluan talks a lot and adds a little bit about the background of the supporting character to tell how powerful his martial arts is. The protagonist is saying all kinds of things in his heart beside him, wishing he could kill him but he doesn't have the strength, haha.

Mu Taoist Su Nuo, Ximen Lao Master, Yao Yue Lian Xing Lao Lu Lao Che, Zhuge Lao Gu, Wen Wan Lao Bu, Lu Chen Ping Sheng, the rest can bite Mu Taoist like a dog can bite Su Nuo

The author of the Qidian novel feels that he can learn from the author of Tomato. He should not be so literary and young. He should be simpler and simpler. He thinks his writing is advanced. In my opinion, it is not as good as Shuangwen.

Will it be possible to stop being in prison in the future? It will be difficult 😁

It's just a martial arts world. The fighting power is not great at all. It's boring. It can't be compared with fantasy. In 100 years, there will be no more people. A few thousand soldiers can kill the best in the world.

Write about Infinity, don't write about mixed martial arts, follow the example of Wenzhao Gong and borrow his luck 🤓🤓

It would be great if the main text was as powerful and overbearing.

The early stage itself was quite amazing, but the more I write about it, the more it falls apart. Let's wait and see in the future.

My favorite part is the scene where Guo Jing comes to the rescue, but when I saw your Mu Taoist show off his power, the impression plummeted, too many people were offended.

Next time, don't overdo it when writing a book. The writing and settings are good, but once you get excited you can't stop.